This is my first story EVER. So any feedback is greatly appreciated. It's far from perfect its going to need revisions so let me know. This is a learning experience for me and I could really use some help. Thank you and I hope you enjoy reading this story as much as I enjoy writing it.
Greetings my friend. I am interested third party and I noticed the posting of this story. May I suggest you look into this document? http://tinyurl.com/FoESSCP
"Joram even managed to add some more plates far added protection."
far --- for
The story is currently moving too fast for my tastes, but i understand it too. This is just background exposition. You have yet to get to the juice of it.
This is my first story EVER. So any feedback is greatly appreciated. It's far from perfect its going to need revisions so let me know. This is a learning experience for me and I could really use some help. Thank you and I hope you enjoy reading this story as much as I enjoy writing it.
Greetings my friend. I am interested third party and I noticed the posting of this story. May I suggest you look into this document?
http://tinyurl.com/FoESSCP
and this link
http://www.ponychan.net/chan/fic/res/58852.html
I assure you that it will be worth your time and a good chance you will find like minded individuals.
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I have read the document and I am very interested! Thank you for notifying me!
"Joram even managed to add some more plates far added protection."
far --- for
The story is currently moving too fast for my tastes, but i understand it too. This is just background exposition. You have yet to get to the juice of it.