"When they got there they saw a small orange filly hanging on to a broken limb surrounded by easily twenty timber wolves"

Sorta muddled here. We went from Jenson's perspective to AJ and the two crusaders in the same paragraph? And isn't Applebloom yellow?

The battle seems interesting but it cuts to fast, first he shows up then is surrounded? Just like that?

AJ caught up and then ran to the house only for Jenson to hand over Applebloom to her and then escort them to the house? Who did he give Applebloom to? AJ is already at the house.

I don't mean to sound like I am critisizing it just doesn't make sense. You need to pace this out more. I know the action is more fun but that's why you need to build to it.

Hmm dis story hes u good story line i keep my eye on it keep up the good work

RD is going to get her ass handed to her if she fights Jensen. Great story, but you need to work on the details a tad bit.