When a young medic plummets to his "death" in the mountains of Afghanistan, he lands in the orchids of Sweet Apple Acres. Will he be able to adapt to his new life and put his past behind him? Or will the ghosts of his past break him?
Sounds like a rough life poor kid. I would say it's a little unrealistic the level of abuse, sadly it it not.
It's a little weird that he knows the place is called Sweet Apple Acres and that they are fillies and Stallions, plus that he was not surprise at their speaking English, but meh.
6048205 He doesn't exactly know where he is until a bit later. The POV is omnipresent, so I (as the author) can let people know what's going on while the characters have a limited perception. Essentially, I'm telling the story from a God's-eye view
A suggestion, anytime you want to use an acronym, actually write out all the words of the acronym the first time and put the acronym in parenthesis. such as - Night Vision Goggles (NVG) This way tour reader doesn't need to look up an acronym just to have in idea of what you're talking about.
Intrigue!
Sounds like a rough life poor kid. I would say it's a little unrealistic the level of abuse, sadly it it not.
It's a little weird that he knows the place is called Sweet Apple Acres and that they are fillies and Stallions, plus that he was not surprise at their speaking English, but meh.
Continuing on
6048205 He doesn't exactly know where he is until a bit later. The POV is omnipresent, so I (as the author) can let people know what's going on while the characters have a limited perception. Essentially, I'm telling the story from a God's-eye view
A suggestion, anytime you want to use an acronym, actually write out all the words of the acronym the first time and put the acronym in parenthesis.
such as - Night Vision Goggles (NVG)
This way tour reader doesn't need to look up an acronym just to have in idea of what you're talking about.
Anyway, interesting so far.
This is a great story, Sounds like the kid had a rough child hood.
(rough outline of a winged figure outside of his window)
Hm I wander how it cauld be