Okay...grammar...spelling...might I suggest an editor?

I don't have one yet
But I will be working on it

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Hm, the prose was decent enough, but...

Why didn't you capitalize like 90 percent of the story?

5648875 I'm terrible with capitalization. That and my tendancy to be lazy

5649146 Well, you're gonna need to kick that if you want to be a good writer. You can't just give the fuck up on basic rules of the craft.

5649689i just started editing it and I found a few errors
: A FEW!!!!???
*Shrinks back in fear*
Okay ALOT of errors

You're right, I do need to kick my laziness to the curb

Thank you for the advice Regi

ps I'm gonna quote you on that now if that's alright with you

5658802 I'm fine with that!

I love this.

5667735 thank you.

ps i just have to say i love your profile picture

5673601 Thanks, I like yours, too.

5673864 naw
Mines just another terrible oc

5675128 No, it's cool, all darkish.

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5659611
Just finished my first edit!!

5677081 YAY!

Kay.

5694601 I am not sure I understand the comment, are you saying the story was just ok or are you trying to say something else?

5694828 Yes. It was good.

That's all.

Kay?

The tags are all over the map on this O_o I didn't expect a dark and depressing epic...But I'm a man of my word and I will at least give it a chance.

5696591 trust me when I say that, if you don't like dark and depressing fics you're going to hate what happens next

Though the inclusion of swearing was unnecessary, I do like the criticism for this work. Editing is an ass of a job, but it is the essential final half of a story. Editing is important because no writer is always at their best. Sometimes, we scribble down junk and believe it's passable due to our lazy and muddled minds. The revision of our work is to prevent that sluggishness from ruining our craft.

Do your best to implement some grammatical corrections and punctuation touch-ups. The best way to better your rhythm/flow is to read it aloud yourself. This tells you where to put periods, commas and semicolons.

I can't wait for more of your work. I simply can't contain myself.

6529983 thank you for the feedback

Well I guess this story is dead

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Not yet, just trying to recover chapter 2 from my old hard drive
Once done the story will be back in full swing

7402082 I can understand what it's like to have your computer break down on ya

7402082 when do ya think you'll be done