Ohhhh, so good, I don't know why. But it is! It has a great sense of humour and a nicely ironed out plot. The romance is cute and i dont know why but I love the firestep as it is just how twilight could fix things. He is OP with teleporting. Twilight can just teleport and use magic but never does and it shows what it would be like and tbh i like that. The fourth wall is broken and I like that. Comedy in the 4th wall is brilliant.
Bad:
Hm, this is hard but maybe a little clean up on grammar and spelling and a little bit more use of interesting adjectives and qualifiers. An editor could fix all this but hey, they are hide to find. :P
Nothing else i can find wrong but hey this is my first review but it is necessary to tell you how much i LOVE this story. Hope next chapter is in the works bro! Have fun.
5519638 swy I'm looking for an editor, bruh
Stimpack...
is he from fallout?
5519780 eeyup
5519800 yay!
Good:
Ohhhh, so good, I don't know why. But it is! It has a great sense of humour and a nicely ironed out plot. The romance is cute and i dont know why but I love the firestep as it is just how twilight could fix things. He is OP with teleporting. Twilight can just teleport and use magic but never does and it shows what it would be like and tbh i like that. The fourth wall is broken and I like that. Comedy in the 4th wall is brilliant.
Bad:
Hm, this is hard but maybe a little clean up on grammar and spelling and a little bit more use of interesting adjectives and qualifiers. An editor could fix all this but hey, they are hide to find. :P
Nothing else i can find wrong but hey this is my first review but it is necessary to tell you how much i LOVE this story. Hope next chapter is in the works bro! Have fun.
5540230 Thanks bro! Working on it now!
Good to hear! Can't wait.
5540373 Going to take a while...pc got fried and am doing this on my lunch
That sucks man, Hope you get a new pc soon!
5540380 Saving upto fix fried parts, thank god the memory wasn't messed up...
5566466 Looking for one... also need a new pc...