I woke up in a field with an apple orchard. "Am I in Uncle Hedrick's orchard again?" No, if i were, i would be smelling horse crap, but it smelled sweet. I got up with, of course, sleeping legs. But i felt something on my back. I turned around to see, wings! and on my back, scales! I looked at my hands and saw scaly claws. When i huffed out, a small golden flame erupted from my mouth. "Im a dragon!" I screamed out, and of course, heard hoovesteps. Wait, rewind, i heard hoovesteps?? Am I where I think I am? I heard a female southern voice yelling "Ya'll better show yurself or yur in a world o pain!" Of course if it was a cowgirl, they wouldnt lie, so i puffed out my chest and walked from behind the tree, and to my suprise, it was Applejack. "Who in tarnation are ya?!"
"I should be asking the same to you!"
"Ugh, fine. My name is.." I cut myself off since i could make a new name...
"My name is Darishon. What is yours?"
"Mah names Applejack!"
"seems pretty direct.." i mumbled.
"What did ya say?"
"Nothing! So, do you know where any motels are?"
"Whats?"
Im such an idiot, this is equestria...
"Is there any building where i can stay for a few nights?"
"I'm fraid not, but you can sleep in the guest room if ya like!"
"R-really?" I was honestly suprised at the comment.
"Yeah! Come on!"
"Right! Ill be right there!" I cannot beleive this, i am in a double fantasy! But again, i felt limp, and blacked out.
You need an editor, FAST
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Quillo doesn't usually write further into other's stories, because he can't focus on one thing for very long, it's quite amazing, like me.
However, since this is giving Quillo (and now me) a migraine, it must be dealt with.
CHAPTER THE FIRST!:
Before feed back:
It's a tad boring considering any problem that your character had is negated instantly by JACKLEAPP but no seriously, get one of the other pones to have first contact, Like: Flootershai, Rare ET, Raidbon wah, Twailait or Piky pine.
I propose Fluttershy, she finds him in the EverFree then she runs to tell her friends and baddabing baddaboom he is in Ponyville.
Okay, lets go.
YOURS:
I woke up in a field with an apple orchard. "Am I in Uncle Hedrick's orchard again?" No, if i were, i would be smelling horse crap, but it smelled sweet. I got up with, of course, sleeping legs. But i felt something on my back. I turned around to see, wings! and on my back, scales! I looked at my hands and saw scaly claws. When i huffed out, a small golden flame erupted from my mouth. "Im a dragon!" I screamed out, and of course, heard hoovesteps. Wait, rewind, i heard hoovesteps?? Am I where I think I am? I heard a female southern voice yelling "Ya'll better show yurself or yur in a world o pain!" Of course if it was a cowgirl, they wouldnt lie, so i puffed out my chest and walked from behind the tree, and to my suprise, it was Applejack. "Who in tarnation are ya?!"
"I should be asking the same to you!"
"Ugh, fine. My name is.." I cut myself off since i could make a new name...
"My name is Darishon. What is yours?"
"Mah names Applejack!"
"seems pretty direct.." i mumbled.
"What did ya say?"
"Nothing! So, do you know where any motels are?"
"Whats?"
Im such an idiot, this is equestria...
"Is there any building where i can stay for a few nights?"
"I'm fraid not, but you can sleep in the guest room if ya like!"
"R-really?" I was honestly suprised at the comment.
"Yeah! Come on!"
"Right! Ill be right there!" I cannot beleive this, i am in a double fantasy! But again, i felt limp, and blacked out.
QUILLO'S:
Pain. So much pain. My body ached all over, my limbs were heavy to the point to where I couldn't move them. I have never been so tired after a sleep in my life. I slowly returned to the living world as memories of the past day filled my mind. I remember... What do I remember... Home... Music... Knife... I flinched at that last thought, Well my face works now, what else do I remember? A second chance... the voice... the smile... That's right! I willed my eyes to open, they did so slowly and lethargically. The sun pierced into my vision and partly blinded me, I shut them again. Well, I can't look straight up, it must be midday, the sun is directly above me... Wait... above me should be a ceiling... Hang on a sec. I just reacquainted myself with my other senses, what I received in my mind boggled me. I smelled grass, trees, animals and water. What I heard was roughly the same. So I was outside. How did I get outside? I couldn't feel the grass though, but I could feel the ground I was on, I wouldn't say I was numb but rather hardened... wait... I have three more touch signals... two more on my back and an extension to my spine, the two on my back hurt as I was putting my weight on them. As I noticed the things on my back they started to uproar in intense pain. I let out a growl of pain and tried to roll to my side. I seemed to have regained motor controls. I moved my hand over the eye exposed to the sun, and noticed what it was. That's not my hand... It was a claw, golden in color, it seemed sharper than a diamond. I flexed my hand and the claw responded. I turned my hand over and the claw responded again. That... Is mine... I arced my head down using my neck so I could see my body...
My body was elongated and covered in scales, I looked strong, further down my body was a long stretch of skin, a tail? I have a tail now? I looked to the two things on my back, two giant glorious wings graced my presence. Blow me down further... I'm a freaking dragon. A DRAGON! I'M A-
"DRAGON!" A familiar voice screamed from above me, well, from my perspective above me. I looked towards the voice and saw a small yellow and pink thing, then I didn't. It seemed to have ran away. I knew that voice. Let's see, yellow and pink, fast when scared, obviously scared of dra- Fluttershy! That was Fluttershy! I attempted to get on my giant feet flat on the ground. I noticed how big I was so standing on my two back legs like spike would be impossibility. I managed to stabilize my footing as I gave chase to the small-frightened pony. The forest eventually thinned out and I could see an abundance of tine furry critters. I saw her cottage. Then I paused... I'm a dragon, chasing a pony, that... Can be taken the wrong way. I slowed to a walk as I approached the small home. It was seemed to be devoid of all life as I could see, but I could still smell them and Fluttershy. I know she is a timid pony, easily frightened, but horrifying if her friends are threatened, including her animals. I could just torch the house, but that's stupid, it's Fluttershy! How could I even think of that! Instead I chose the passive path. I calmly walked to the front of her house then laid down. Waiting for her to calm down and realize that I'm not a threat. I'm not a threat, I'm a good dragon. I was tired anyway, I need my sleep.
"Do you think he's dangerous?"
"I don't know Twilight, well, he hasn't destroyed anything yet."
"I don't think that counts Spike."
"He also feels different, not like he is another dragon, it just feels like he is different."
"Different how?"
"Like... Powerful... I'm intimidated by him, but I feel... Safer? Around him?" That's strange...
"I don't feel that at all."
"Maybe it's because we have something in common?"
"And what's that?"
I heard a cough, "Dragon..."
"Oh... Look he is waking!"
I shuffled around in the spot I was in, intent on waking myself up, I thought over the conversation Spike and Twilight had then, So I am a powerful dragon... to the point where Spike can feel intimidated and safe at the same time? ... I'm okay with this... I stood up, stretched my back and yawned. It was late day and the sun was setting, that's nice, the sun set looked loads better in this world. I felt a presence behind me. The image of Twilight and spike reverberated separately in my mind followed by brief descriptions of them, Twilight was followed by; Magic, Harmony, Librarian, Studious, then followed by a definite Friend, Spike's image was followed by; Hatchling, Hard working assistant, Fun, Humorous, then was also followed by the Friend. Do I know everything about everyone?
"Um... Dragon! You- Should tell us why you are here!" The unmistakeable voice of Twilight called from behind me. Should I come outright? Or should I play a role? I suppose role-playing is fun. Alright, I'll adopt the role of omniscient dragon. I decided to call Twilight as her title instead of her name, it seemed cooler that way.
"Can... you speak?" Twilight said again.
I cleared my throat and spoke without turning around, "Such effortless tasks are not beyond my capabilities, Magic." I spoke with a commanding voice, it wasn't my voice, but then again, why would I want my voice?
She seemed startled by my voice, "What?"
"Speaking is not above me, Magic, as to why I am here shall remain unheard of by your ears, as of yet." I don't know what I am saying, but it sounds freaking cool.
"Magic? That's not my name."
"That is known to me, however, are you not the Element of Magic?" My lip turned into a sly grin.
Twilight didn't reply.
"Woah, he is cool." I heard Spike say with my dragon ears.
"Be that as it may Hatchling, however, that is not the reason I am here." Spike did not seem impressed at what I called him.
"Why are you here?" Twilight finally asked without the tone of fear.
I turned around to face the two, "Now that you have come to trust me slightly, all I ask for is temporary lodging somewhere around here." I paused, that didn't seem convincing.
"Why?" The unicorn asked me.
Think think think think, BINGO "My cave in the EverFree had collapsed and I am without a home until I can find another, and even I am an easy target while asleep and cannot be caught in the open unawares." Good enough.
"That's a good point, but why this town?"
Okay, hopeful imagination time. "Well, my cave resided on the other side of the EverFree Forest and the trek on the way for a new home drained me to the point where I couldn't move any longer, I happened to have been awakened by Kindness, as she found me by the border. She indirectly lead me here, and now I'd like to search for suitable lodging, if it's not to much to ask, due to the fact that I am a Dragon and this is a town of ponies I would stick out quite terribly."
"Maybe Applejack can fit you in her barn." Spike suggested, and as soon as the farmpony's name was said I saw a picture of her, followed by the words; Honesty, Hard-working, Farmer, Stubborn, Reliable, Dependable, then was followed by Friend. I seem to have some sort of FaceBook in my mind.
"Perhaps so Hatchling."
"Would you stop calling me that?" He retorted at my remark.
"No, I believe in titles, and as you are no more than 10 years out of your egg, you are still considered a Hatchling."
"Does that explain the Magic and Kindness you called Fluttershy and I?" The small purple unicorn asked.
"Indeed Magic." Quite.
"So what do we call you?" The hatchling asked.
Not Max, that is so not a Dragon's name, what about... I got it, "You," I pointed towards Spike and hissed slightly, "Can call me Dragon," then I loosened up and looked towards Twilight, "However, Magic, you can call me Darishon"
So that's chapter uno. Do tell me what you think and I'll completely disregard it!
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