I like it.
But one small thing.
They wear dresses when they relax? that's odd to me.

5490297 they're royalty. they're used to it.

Hmmm....a good start. I think this might be an interesting plot bunny to run with. Others have, and some have been awesome! If it just hit you one day, run with it. You might be surprised where the idea takes you.

She did, after all, ban me to the moon

...or so help me I will ban you to the moon for a week.

So Celestia didn't use the Elements, but the Ban Hammer? ...Is Celestia secretly the Admin of Equestria?

Princess Celestia Von Cosmos.

And now I can't help but think that she's also Germane.

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I always suspected Celestia defeat NMM with the elements, but sent NMM to the moon with her own magic.

I like how you people notice these jokes. It let's me know I'm doing a good job.

Interesting. I look forward to more.

update please!!!

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Working on it

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Yay!!! Soon the power of love!!!

Dear Auxiliary Booster,

Allow me to welcome you to the fold. It is always nice to meet another who appreciates the true love shared by the Royal Sisters.

While I am always pleased to see these stories show up in my feed, I find that most of them do not live up to the quality I would like. I was hopeful at first, as this story shares a few key elements as my own. Sadly, I was left less-than-impressed.

Most distressing to me was the slap-dash story telling. From the one-off, inconsequential asides to the speedy movement from one scene to the next, there was little to engage me in the story beyond the premise and promised climax. Rather than develop the characters and display their relationship, you threw tropes at us and 'told' us everything. More than anything, this read like a rough draft rather than a finished piece.

All that being said, I will stick around for the next chapter. Princest is princest after all.

Your Benevolent Dictator,
The Landgrave

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I understand how you feel, but it's a little hard for me to create the long bits in between scenes, so I just skip to the most desirable part; just before something important happens. Plus, I actually only started serious fic writing last year and this was only going to be a clop one shot, but I said fuck it. I've never made a one shot before and I wasn't going to then. Not many of my stories do that though. Only one I can think of off the top of my head. It was going to be taken down soon to be fixed though. I'm trying hard to make something desirable to read, but it seems the only two I got any real big hit on was my two r63 fics.

Guilty sister is only for shameless clop. None of the story was supposed to be any more than a mild joke. Just laugh at the shit I put into it and wait patiently for the dirty sex to arrive. (If it even gets here now that you had to insult the idea of the first chapter. It wouldn't have been like that if it were not entirely for the sake of writing about the two royal sisters fucking like love starved changelings. I blame you if I lose interest in writing this fic.)

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Dear Auxiliary Booster,
I am sorry to hear that. It was not my intent to dishearten you so.

it's a little hard for me to create the long bits in between scenes, so I just skip to the most desirable part.

It is not so much where you start and end, as it is how quickly you move from one to the next. You present the absolute minimum of information instead of filling out the scene with details and character thoughts and interpretations.

Plus, I actually only started serious fic writing last year

Have you picked up any literature on writing? My own writing showed marked improvement after reading only two such books.

None of the story was supposed to be any more than a mild joke. Just laugh at the shit I put into it and wait patiently for the dirty sex to arrive

Might I suggest the comedy tag?

There are two points I would make about myself. First, I have very high standards compared to most. There are some highly regarded stories, praised by better writers than I, that I find to be wholly unreadable. Second, I take my princest very seriously.

Best Regards,
The Landgrave

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I was a little drunk when I wrote that, so the point I was trying to make was lost in my delusional ranting. To answer your question, yes I have read other stories to try and fix my issue, but despite my efforts, I lose track of where I want the fiction to go. Normally I have a way of following a specific plot to the story, but I seemed to have lost the required amount of inspiration to write after my first semester. After seeing my grades, I guess something in my head went "No, you don't get to enjoy that any more!"

*Sigh* I don't know... maybe I'll just take down all of my work and start over again. Like a computer, sometimes the brain does need a refresh. If I do that though, then I can work on mistakes without the constant rushing of my followers to get it finished. Maybe that's were the problem lies... Maybe I get rushed too much...

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I wasn't speaking of other stories, but books on how to write.
My favorites were Building Great Sentences and Elements of Fiction Writing.

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I don't have a kindle...

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They are availible in paperback.

Please telleth me that there shall be more!!!

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There shall be more, but it may take a while. I'm working through some things right now, so please be patient.

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Totally understand if you don't mind maybe you could message me or something when you put out more...

"His nostrils bursted with blood and he collapsed on the floor next to his partne"

*slaps for head* I'll get back to this fic when I'm ready to read something by an anime fan.
Looking forward to princest though.

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I'm so glad you noticed that!