Will Trixie accept your request?

It's generally a very bad sign when there are typos in the synopsis.

this is a great story headbanger. you earned a follower

I kind of like this story, but it could be better.

There are lots of grammar and spelling mistakes. Sometimes, the incorrect word is used. For example, I remember in one part the word, "taken" was used when the word, "taking" should have been used. Other times, a comma or a punctuation mark is missing where it is needed.

In terms of storyline, not bad; it could have been better though.
At the end of "Magic Duel," Trixie asked Twilight for forgiveness and Twilight accepted her apology. Because of that, the story seems a bit off. With that in mind, the characters seem a little out of character and acting like as if the events of Magic Duel never occurred. Did you ever watch that episode?

Story was okay but my biggest problem was the narritive exposition amd dialog seamed a little deadpan half the time, like only the bare minimum was used to explain anything
Great potential though, good luck with future endeavors

lol I need to read the next chapter, [hurry up an release it]! (that's what she said)

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Thanks.

the pictures are unnecessary and distracting.