As for the characters (this is before I've read Chapter 2, so my opinions may change slightly): Charlotte seems well developed. We don't have tons of detail about her personal life and backstory, but that's OK since she isn't the main character. Her vocal and forceful personality really shine through. Keep up the good work with her.
As for Amicy, I think she could use a little more. She's not poorly written, but Charlotte's personality seems to overpower her a little. If it weren't for the fact that the conflicts center around her, I'd think that Amicy was the best friend to Charlotte's main character. Then again, it's fairly early in the story, and Amicy seems to have a more introverted personality. I'd suggest something to show why she's in charge for reasons other than default, but that's just me.
Please don't feel obligated to change things if you think they won't fit. These are just my opinions, and I will admit that they are more than a little biased towards my personal view of what a main character should be like. She's your character in your world, and you know best what works and what doesn't.
I look forward to reading chapter 2!
Edit: didn't realize that chapter two was you dividing of the chapters. My bad. I look forward to the new material!
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As for the characters (this is before I've read Chapter 2, so my opinions may change slightly): Charlotte seems well developed. We don't have tons of detail about her personal life and backstory, but that's OK since she isn't the main character. Her vocal and forceful personality really shine through. Keep up the good work with her.
As for Amicy, I think she could use a little more. She's not poorly written, but Charlotte's personality seems to overpower her a little. If it weren't for the fact that the conflicts center around her, I'd think that Amicy was the best friend to Charlotte's main character. Then again, it's fairly early in the story, and Amicy seems to have a more introverted personality. I'd suggest something to show why she's in charge for reasons other than default, but that's just me.
Please don't feel obligated to change things if you think they won't fit. These are just my opinions, and I will admit that they are more than a little biased towards my personal view of what a main character should be like. She's your character in your world, and you know best what works and what doesn't.
I look forward to reading chapter 2!
Edit: didn't realize that chapter two was you dividing of the chapters. My bad. I look forward to the new material!