"Hey, why didn't you kill your mother?" I ask Otani, smiling maliciously. I'd like to know what stopped him, to get a sense of his conscience.
"Because she found out my plan and sent me here." Otani added frowning. "I'm actually glad she did, otherwise I would've been in prison for awhile." I accept this response with a nod.
"Will you have to go to jail once you get out of here?" I ask.
"Um, I'm not sure. Hopefully not." He smiles nervously. "I don't want to go back." I look cautiously around the hallway, no nurses are escorting us back to the room. Weird. I would think that most of us would take this chance and make a run for it, but we just shrug and walk back ourselves. Usually a nurse would be needed to unlock the door, but Dr. Discord lets us in. I raise an eyebrow at Dr. Discord as he waves at us.
"Please come in." He smiles. "It's movie night." That's odd, usually we're supposed to have 30 minutes of quiet time. Where's all the nurses? I stare intensely and suspiciously at Discord. I know something's up. Discord tries very hard to conceal his maniacal laughter as he reveals his film. I quickly cower under the chair with my hooves on my eyes. Discord pulls me out and makes me sit. "You simply must enjoy the movie like everypony else, I think you'll find it... mesmerizing."
Immediately I know the plan, as if Discord did so well to conceal it. He's been subtle with our minds so far. Warming us up for the big show. This is where he'll take complete possession of us and harness our chaos for his own benifit. Everytime I try to close my eyes tight, Discord commands my eyelids to relax. He keeps a close eye sitting next to me as the others don't suspect a thing.
...And I swear the film flashes colorful hypnotic rings before it changes into cowponies vs. aliens.
"Ooh." Discord giggles playfully, chomping on his popcorn. "This is the best part."
"But." I frantically stare around the room, everypony else watching the movie and shushing me. I stare mindlessly at a few alien blasts and tumbleweeds on the film screen before I'm interrupted by a certain blue mare of the night.
"This is a dream Monotone." Luna barks. Everypony else, including Discord don't seem to notice her.
"I don't actually remember falling asleep..." I say confused.
"Think Monotone, what is the last thing you remember." Luna says assuringly.
"That feeling where I swore I was being hypnotized." I shout nervously. "But doesn't that mean that I'm technically not asleep?" Luna rolls her eyes.
"Well it's the late evening and your unconscious, when I'm traveling planes I can't really tell the difference." Luna says. "But it's a good thing that I am here otherwise you wouldn't be consciously aware of what Discord is doing. Look." Suddenly, Luna creates a visual with her magic. I adjust my eyes to see me and the other ponies in a classroom with Discord, everything he says about evil and chaos being absorbed directly into our minds. Just like the nightmare, except this time I was a part of it. The ponies all reaffirm by mindlessly repeating 'Yes Discord' including me.
"What?!" I scream. "But I'm here not there! And I did everything I could to avoid being controlled."
"As you did Monotone, but Discord sensed your rebellion and took extra cautionary measures with you." Luna responds.
"What happens now? Do I stay in this dreamscape until I regain consciousness, possibly after I've done horrible things not under my control?" I wonder really, I don't want to even know what happens. I just want to have my body back in my own control, my real one. Luna sighs.
"Sadly no, I must leave for somepony else's dream and when I leave you must wake up."
"But I can't wake up, I'm an empty shell." I explain. "Does that mean I'll be free?"
"I'm afraid not my friend. You will be a prisoner of darkness just like I was. You have to fight yourself and take back control." Luna calls as she dematerializes. Then I 'wake up'
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Even though I HATEEEEEE cliffhangers, you did good with this one :3
5308644 Thanks... what do you think will happen?
5308648 Hmmmm. One of two things. 1. Discord makes them watch some kind of "propaganda" movie to make them work for him. 2.Bird droppings gets called "bird shit" again.
5308661 Spot On.
5308805 grrr. The shaded black bar. My mortal enemy :3
5308805 I found out what it said. And yeah.
Aww come on! I want to read what happens next!! You were doing so well, much less the grammar and spelling errors, but I am just DYING to know what's gonna happen. Is the next chapter going to be a repeat of Mono's nightmare?
I wonder...
Nice cliffhanger though!! This had me laughing.
5327837 I will finish this story, I'm currently riding the hype train on my Hunger Games in Equestria Story and I don't have as much writing time as I would like, so it may be longer than anticipated before this gets done.
5333356 Oh sure, of course. I'm not rushing anypony, just curious. I have read your Hunger Games intro too, very nice. Would like an update on that as well.
5333371 I have a good two hours of writing time so, working on it right now. Should be uploaded tonight.
EDIT: The Hunger Games that is.
5333378 Oh great. I'll be sure to read it then when I get a chance.
Sorry for having to do another short chapter, I just saw another excellent opportunity for a cliffhanger. Don't be complatin'!
this neeeeeeeeeeeeeeeds to be updated. I love it!
5338771 Thank you!
5439096 I'm glad you enjoy the story. I'm currently conflicted as to where the plot is going and how to write it but I'm confident I will continue at some point in the near future.
i don´t want to be mean, but would it not be better, to just delete the cancelled storys? I don´t really like it to look at a story i am interessted in, only to see that it isn´t finished, that is actually something that i don´t like if i search in some groups for a good story.
5610840 Well no, because I spent a lot of time writing the story and it was a good idea, I just didn't know where to go. If you disliked my story only for it being cancelled then I am very disappointed. Please give me a valid reason why you dislike my story, not just because of it's status. If you can't then I really think you should look up every cancelled story on this site and dislike all of them, because I assure you there are hundreds of other ones out there that were all cancelled for different reasons.
5610848 calm down i didn´t even read that story, it is just one of many, that just stop. If you want to continue it later, then you should probably change it to hiatus (or something like that), but i see no reason for a story to exist, if it isn´t even going to continue.
I don´t dislike your story, and i don´t think i said something like that, but i don´t like it, that if all the cancelled storys really should not continue, that it is just disappointing to look at something unfinished. I mean if i want to look for a good Screwloose story or something like that, the half of the storys are from 2012 or something like that. It is not much, but i waste my time with them in that little moment.
of course there are many, but why should they still be on this side, if no one want to continue them? If they want to continue them, then there exist the option to put them on hitaus. It could even be easier to find other storys, it just waste time if they .....not sure how to say it, so i just send the comment, my english is at his a limit for a moment.