Aww this was cute. Heck id even say intimate. All the heart of a romance but not corny like certain clop-ficks. I think you nailed Rainbow's personality to a tee. And it was nice thinking she could be bi (even if she's happier with females )
And Twilight was her same cute, overanalytical self
There wasn't a single cringe worthy moment in this fix! Not to erotic, but not to emotional. You kept the focus right where it should be. I felt like I was reading an actual event, no pointless drama, just people maturely coming to a conclusion.
5205548 I'm sorry you didn't enjoy it, I knew when I posted this that it wasn't for everyone, I was expecting some downvotes. So, that okay, thanks for taking the time to read it.
5206022 I know it could use some proofreading, I spent ages going through it to fix mistakes but I undoubtably missed some. Thanks for your comment and for reading this.
I like this so far. Twilight's character is portrayed well, but Rainbow's isn't. She's too understanding for only three months into the relationship, especially if they're only meeting on Saturdays + plus an extra day or two throughout the week. You've got Twilight spot on though, so that's why I'd like to see where this goes.
5209192 Thank you, corrected. 5209228 Yes, I'm aware Rainbow's character isn't quite right, that's actually deliberate. I wanted to whow how being with Twilight has mellowed her out a bit, and made her consider things more. Also, she has very much fallen for Twilight, yeah it's only been three months but she cares VERY deeply for Twilight. That's what I was going for, I may have overdone it.
Aww this was cute. Heck id even say intimate. All the heart of a romance but not corny like certain clop-ficks. I think you nailed Rainbow's personality to a tee. And it was nice thinking she could be bi (even if she's happier with females )
And Twilight was her same cute, overanalytical self
There wasn't a single cringe worthy moment in this fix! Not to erotic, but not to emotional. You kept the focus right where it should be. I felt like I was reading an actual event, no pointless drama, just people maturely coming to a conclusion.
Plus I ship the heck out of these two!
Oh my gosh. This was beautiful. Thanks for sharing. So many feels.
Cool concept, but in need of proofreading.
5205420 Thank you so mush! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I was going for something emotional yes, but I had planned on putting sex in later chapters.
5205500 Thanks, glad you liked it.
5205548 I'm sorry you didn't enjoy it, I knew when I posted this that it wasn't for everyone, I was expecting some downvotes. So, that okay, thanks for taking the time to read it.
5206022 I know it could use some proofreading, I spent ages going through it to fix mistakes but I undoubtably missed some. Thanks for your comment and for reading this.
When is the next chapter going to be out?
5207603 Well, I really have no idea. I haven't even started it yet, though I have a lot of planned out in my head. I'd say give it a week.
"Share" shouldn't be capitalized in your short description.
I like this so far. Twilight's character is portrayed well, but Rainbow's isn't. She's too understanding for only three months into the relationship, especially if they're only meeting on Saturdays + plus an extra day or two throughout the week. You've got Twilight spot on though, so that's why I'd like to see where this goes.
+1'd.
5209192 Thank you, corrected.
5209228 Yes, I'm aware Rainbow's character isn't quite right, that's actually deliberate. I wanted to whow how being with Twilight has mellowed her out a bit, and made her consider things more. Also, she has very much fallen for Twilight, yeah it's only been three months but she cares VERY deeply for Twilight. That's what I was going for, I may have overdone it.
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Three months into their romantic relationship. Not sure how long they knew each other before that.
5212033 That is true. In this particular story I had thought of them havin g known each other for about a year total, maybe a touch longer.
I properly hope you continue this, it's gorgeous
5221985 Thank you! I have made a start on the chapter and I know the basic events I want to happen in it. I hope to be done in a few days.
Not a problem
I'm usually a flutterdash kind of guy but every now and then I hanker for a bit of twidash. This was well written, adorable and super cute.
I patiently wait for more