(FOXY'S POV)
I'm looking at Toy Freddy as he runs at me with a fist heading for me. I duck and shove him back making him tumble down on the ground. I jump onto home and readied my hook at his face. He then pushes me off and kickes me in the chest making me crash into the bleachers.
I get up to see that a sharp peice of metal in my chest, I take it out. It made a hole that looks like I'm being torn apart. It was showing lots of blood, my robotic spine, and a few wires.
I run at Toy Freddy with my hook ready to slash at him. He then dodges my hook, he then grabs me by my head and throws me to the brick wall. I get back right up and just stood still thinking of what to do. "Dang it! How did he get so much stronger?!" I thought. He then ran at me with his eyes only show a white dot in darkness in each eye.
I then thought of an idea! I smiled and jumped to the side making Toy Freddy slam into the wall. He falls backwards to reveal that his forehead is cover in blood. He then gets up with a fist flying at me, I stab it down with my hook and flung him into the same wall. His hand came off leave his hand on my hook, I shake it off and then looked at him.
He layed against the wall with blood coming from his forehead and his right hand now show just wires. He started twitching and started to make sparks. The Sparks the caught Toy Freddy on fire, he jumped up with blood covering his whole body while on fire and runs towards me. It was one of the most horrifying thing I've ever seen, before he could get to me he falls down and started to burn into a crisp. Leaving a endo-skeleton with burning wires.
I look at the door from where I came from to see Flash Sentry, I've heard of him from Twilight. He looked horrified at the sight of the blood. He then runs back into the school screaming. "This ain't gonna be good." Was all I said.
The battle against Foxy and Toy Freddy is up
"Well this ain't gonna be good." i lost it there
what gonna happen?
Nobody like flash sentry..İ still wonder how he become a guard in The other universe
This is a thing. Definitely too many short chapters for my liking (too used to long chapters.), and I would've atleast add in some backstory to how they got transported to EQ. I mean, just waking up there with no known reason just feels rushed, and I don't like rushed things.
You know what- you are lucky. I am still gonna favorite this, and see where it goes.
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It was a prank they did during their lunch hour. And this takes place before Rainbow Rocks.
What. The. Fuck.
WHERE DID TOY FREDDIE COME IN?!?!
What did I miss that part or something? EXPLAIN FANFICTION, EXPLAIN!
I just wanna ask this. If the toy animatronics were like younger siblings of something what would you cal them.
Toy Bonnie=_________
Toy Chica=________
Mangle=______
Also (Mangle) Boy or Girl...you pick...I guess.
I'm not trying to be rude but.......I don't like this fanfiction to be honest.
1. It's rushed first of all
2. You haven't even explained the story properly
3. It's random and doesn't make any sense
4. The SPaG isn't that good
I know my story isn't that good but at least I tried (If you go read the first chapter and once I publish it)
Try and improve this at least.