Sally O'Connor has never heard of My Little Pony. But now, trapped in Equestria in the body of a Pegasus, she'll need the help of other human Avatars to find a way back home.
So far, this shows a lot of promise. It comes across as something more creative than the standard H.I.E. stories. And while you have a minor "telling rather than showing" issue you could clean up, your writing style is still pretty good. I've put this on my reading list, and I hope you will continue it soon.
Editing to add: I see from your blogpost that you've already completed it, so I guess I won't have to wait too long for that continuation.
Thanks. I haven't actually had time to edit this story yet and repetition is my biggest weakness when it comes to writing, so uh. I'm not surprised there's some of that for me to tweak when I can find the time. But thanks very much for the fave, and I hope you enjoy the story.
Thanks very much. And yeah, beginnings are often a weakness, and this story'll be a little messier than my usual writing, to be honest. But I hope the story itself is still a pleasure to read and you're able to enjoy the weird tale it follows. It's going to take some uh... interesting twists and turns, and I think I'm going to post two chapters tomorrow so I can get all the main characters introduced, so you won't have to worry about waiting for more to read. Thanks very much for the fave as well. It's much appreciated.
Thanks very much for the fave and the interest. It should be up uh... give or take ten days, maybe a little shorter, depending on how fast I edit and how many chapters I post a day. I do hope it proves enjoyable, though: it's a little out there at times, even by my standards.
a... a whole lot of Avatars don't understand how hoofgrip works right away. That's... that's a good sign.
Hoofgrip...huh, I oddly like this word. A nice word for one of the biggest mlp-mysteries to date...
Hmm...yes, I think this will be a most pleasent read.
Although...with words like "worldcrafter" and "figment"... This has no ties whatsoever to the Blooming Moon chronicles, yes? (because I'm a little scared that if there would be a connection, I might miss out on some things...)
So far, this shows a lot of promise. It comes across as something more creative than the standard H.I.E. stories. And while you have a minor "telling rather than showing" issue you could clean up, your writing style is still pretty good. I've put this on my reading list, and I hope you will continue it soon.
Editing to add: I see from your blogpost that you've already completed it, so I guess I won't have to wait too long for that continuation.
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Thanks. I haven't actually had time to edit this story yet and repetition is my biggest weakness when it comes to writing, so uh. I'm not surprised there's some of that for me to tweak when I can find the time. But thanks very much for the fave, and I hope you enjoy the story.
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Thanks very much. And yeah, beginnings are often a weakness, and this story'll be a little messier than my usual writing, to be honest. But I hope the story itself is still a pleasure to read and you're able to enjoy the weird tale it follows. It's going to take some uh... interesting twists and turns, and I think I'm going to post two chapters tomorrow so I can get all the main characters introduced, so you won't have to worry about waiting for more to read.
Thanks very much for the fave as well. It's much appreciated.
I always enjoy your work, will give it a read as soon as your done posting it up!
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Thanks very much for the fave and the interest. It should be up uh... give or take ten days, maybe a little shorter, depending on how fast I edit and how many chapters I post a day. I do hope it proves enjoyable, though: it's a little out there at times, even by my standards.
So this story is one part James Camerons' Avatar, one part Racism correct?
Oh wait...
Hoofgrip...huh, I oddly like this word. A nice word for one of the biggest mlp-mysteries to date...
Hmm...yes, I think this will be a most pleasent read.
Although...with words like "worldcrafter" and "figment"...
This has no ties whatsoever to the Blooming Moon chronicles, yes? (because I'm a little scared that if there would be a connection, I might miss out on some things...)