5037854 we dont do this because we hate earth we do it because men are greedy not all men mind you but once man finds something they like they keep taking it wood and oil for example
As a victim of rape myself, I found this last chapter quite hard to read. It really hit a place in my heart, I know the feeling of fear. At the time I was 17 and didn't really know the extent of what had happened, but my literatcy teacher ended up going to jail in the end, never heard from her again.
Regardless, this story is not by any means bad, I really enjoyed all the chapters. I actually think these three characters might be my new favourites.
I got comments on another site telling me that the ending was unsatisfying because of the unresolved drama I created. I then decided to wait for the movie to come out, watch it, and then write an ending chapter that will probably take place after those events and hopefully bring it to a more satisfying ending.
Why do I see a sequel where you finally get to reunite with the Dazzlings and help them on their road to recovery after that final battle in Rainbow Rocks?
That was a good story, only two problems, 1) I wish you had done more with the sonata romance, 2) the cliffhanger ending. But overall, it was still a great read
5075689 5155157 I finally got the chance to see the movie in a proper quality and the ending of it offers me an easy point to connect with another chapter.
5129577 That part might seem amplified. But since you only really interact with the Dazzlings, I pointed their names out directly.
5104895 Thanks for pointing that out. I changed it.
I enjoyed this story. I really hope that this story continues from the ending of Rainbow Rock where their gems shatter. I like to see if the main character has any concerns for the Dazzlings, especially Sonata. I'd really hoped they could work things out and get past what Aria did.
Of course I'd also like to see if Adagio makes a move on him, whether it's for comfort, a plan to use him, or developing feelings over time.
Why are all these fucking villains trying to take over our world!? WE don't even like our world!
Bittersweet
5037574 True enough
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no we love our world we just don't like each other
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Yeah, that's why we're burning down our rainforests and cutting holes in the ground.
If we can't have you, Earth, no one can, right?
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we dont do this because we hate earth we do it because men are greedy not all men mind you but once man finds something they like they keep taking it wood and oil for example
Well... That was a very sudden and unexpected ending. Is it really over?
Aww, it's over. Just as it was getting good.
You can't exspect to end like that, least without a teagdy tag
Considering the Lies, The kidnapping and the rape, shouldn't I hate them anyway?
As a victim of rape myself, I found this last chapter quite hard to read. It really hit a place in my heart, I know the feeling of fear. At the time I was 17 and didn't really know the extent of what had happened, but my literatcy teacher ended up going to jail in the end, never heard from her again.
Regardless, this story is not by any means bad, I really enjoyed all the chapters. I actually think these three characters might be my new favourites.
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I got comments on another site telling me that the ending was unsatisfying because of the unresolved drama I created.
I then decided to wait for the movie to come out, watch it, and then write an ending chapter that will probably take place after those events and hopefully bring it to a more satisfying ending.
5040038 Ahh, makes sense. In that case, take your time.
5040038 I look forward to what you churn out this time. You now have another follower
Why do I see a sequel where you finally get to reunite with the Dazzlings and help them on their road to recovery after that final battle in Rainbow Rocks?
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So it's not over yet.
That was a good story, only two problems, 1) I wish you had done more with the sonata romance, 2) the cliffhanger ending. But overall, it was still a great read
I need more and you said Sonata in this chapter twice.
I find this interesting. Instead of hating others, he mostly hates the Dazzlings.
That ending was sudden.
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I finally got the chance to see the movie in a proper quality and the ending of it offers me an easy point to connect with another chapter.
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That part might seem amplified. But since you only really interact with the Dazzlings, I pointed their names out directly.
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Thanks for pointing that out. I changed it.
5155932 No prob... now, go and write an update! please...
Well... I must say that I screwed that one up. Hopefully those 6 girls everyone seems to talk about will do something about it.
I enjoyed this story. I really hope that this story continues from the ending of Rainbow Rock where their gems shatter. I like to see if the main character has any concerns for the Dazzlings, especially Sonata. I'd really hoped they could work things out and get past what Aria did.
Of course I'd also like to see if Adagio makes a move on him, whether it's for comfort, a plan to use him, or developing feelings over time.
I found some things you may want to edit.
That should either be "you" or something like "your body".
You're missing an apostrophe so it should be "Sonata's".
I think that period should be a comma.
I think you should replace that with, "If you weren't".
That should be either "We" or "We'll".
And the same problem I mentioned before comes up again, so that should be "Sonata's" and "Aria's".
Okay.........
Stereotype much?