Im not one for this kindve thing, im kindve a pony purist, clop is kindve a not for me, but i LOVE a good romance like this, its so real, and not staged. Its so much fun to just see them as normal ponies and then put them in a love scene, its different if you know them from a love scene first. I love it i just love it!

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Rainolt looked at the mare and smiled.

Surprise and Rainbolt sex! Yay... And what's this "good stuff's in chapter 2?" Romance isn't good? Surprise flirting isn't worth reading? Rainbolt blushing isn't fun?

Man, did you get good genetics! The filly boastfully thought with a smile. I mean, just look at that mane!

She looks like her poppa, and is almost as beautiful as her momma.

...Rainbow stretched her wings out and examined their damp, cyan tips. "You're awesome, Dash... Simply awesome."

Would you do me? I'd do me.

Her mane would be a complete wreck and drool would stain her cheeks upon waking.

I need to get me some of that. Apparently, the only time I relax is when I sleep.

Her mane was matted with water

Ah! That's how she got him to invite her in.

which made the grown mare smitten like a lovesick teenager.

D'aww, that's cute.

"Mmmkay." the mare chimed.

Drugs are bad.

He smiled to see Dash already lying on her bed with her hooves tucked over a blue blanket. Her pink eyes seemed wide awake and expression seemed to be grumpy.

Sounds like she's already half asleep. If he drugs her, a stampede of rhinos won't wake her up.

"Umm.... I like it to where it's very light. Like, put a lot of creamer in it. And milk. And sugar."

Yes, I want coffee with my cream and sugar.

She then blushed, and tried to remain composed, not wanting to seem too excited. "I mean, really?" she repeated in a far more calm tone.

No, sleep is the last thing she wants tonight.

She felt her upper teeth sink into her bottom lip as she tried to get glimpses of goods beyond the stallion's rainbow tail.

What did I just say? Surprise wants the bolt, Rainbolt.

"I sometimes just put random stuff up there and forget about it."

I hope this cabinet becomes it's own chapter in Raising Rainbow for some reason.

In fact, when Surprise wrapped hers around the handle, she still had enough room to add another half a hoof. Not thinking about the size, however,

Their hooves touching there would be pretty cliche. Say, has Surprise ever been with a pony before this?

When the hour grew late, the elder sibling made an attempt to sneak out, but was caught by his younger brother. After some convincing, Rainbolt was allowed to sneak out alongside his brother, who made his way to a friend's house.

Th-That's good. Boys will be boys, and what boy doesn't want to not get into trouble with his older brother? It's good to see the two of them getting along in such a normal way.

It's bad for you and stuff...

Mmmkay?

And, you know, mean sexy and stuff. Not just pretty...

I think sexy, pretty, gorgeous, attractive, and similar adjective are interrelated, jumping from one to another is easy.

From what his brother had told him, he was giggly, chatty, and very loud-spoken when he got drunk.

I get rather talkative an lose my sense of time.

"Well, what's the worst that could happen?"

He could fly away to find Firefly and us his D knock some sense into her. Or Mrs. Skies. Or Surprise.

"I don't know... I could die or something."

I wanted to say that, but it sounded like low fruit.

"You only live once, right?"

???

"How's it taste?" Surprise asked hopefully.

It's vodka, it burns.

"Good. I mean, he still has a lot to learn, but he's doing well."

I told you he was going to be a good father. I bet Blue Moon likes him more than mommy.

"Yeah. I read it in the newspaper. Apparently, one of the biggest peanut farms in Equestria was seriously flooded."
"Oh. Well, that sucks."

Have we forgotten who directs how much rain each region in Equestria gets? Remember when rocks prices skyrocketed years ago? That was Rainbolt's fault.

"No, you're sweet!" His torso sprung up and he looked at the mare. "I mean, like, sugar is sweet, and we use it to describe ponies, but like, did it mean nice or sugary first?" It was then, Rainbolt smiled widely. "Oh my gosh! I usually leave that stuff in my head! It just came out! Like, I don't know! I just like talking!"

That's me, right there. Something tells me he's going to see how sweet she is soon...

I don't know anypony who's ugly. I just think we're all pretty and stuff."

Ponies are made to be aesthetically pleasing. Big eyes, smooth fur.

"I can't hear y-"

Quit trolling her.

"No, I am attracted to you, but... I don't know..."

"Maybe once the author finishes Raising Rainbow, she will make us be together."

"Yeah..." Rainbolt blushed heavily. "You-You have nice lips..."

Go! Go! Go! Go!

This time around, Rainbolt took action.

And with that, he's waking up next to her in the morning.

"Well.... H-how comfortable would you be going to my room?"

For kissing? <Dr. Evil voice> Kissing. Riiight.

Oh my gosh! the white mare thought excitedly. I am totally going to get laid!

Yeah you are!
So, is drugging Rainbolt and Moonstruck the only way to get them in bed? I hope their mother could seduce their father through simpler, less devious means.
Whoo, that was a fun chapter. This takes place a few years/months after Blue Moon's birth, but I'm guessing it's not canon for Raising Rainbow? That's disappointing. Wow, I made this comment a loong one.