Soarin awoke in the hospital with a jolt, he was still for a moment and then he looked around and saw that he had bandages on his chest down to his stomach, as well as one on his head and one on his arm and a cast on his leg. He sat up; it hurt a lot less than he thought it would. He let his back rest on the back of the bed but then it hit him...
."What happened to Rainbow?" Soarin asked out loud. He remembered his dad beat her and he remembered her bleeding stomach; then another thought hit him but this time he didn't bother saying it quietly.
"What happened to the baby?!" Soarin yelled out loud. A nurse walked in and looked at Soarin like he was crazy but then she remembered he came here with his pregnant girlfriend.
She looked at a few charts of his and Rainbow's. The nurse looked back at Soarin with a smile and said "We haven't done an ultrasound so we don't know quite yet."
Soarin sat back again and said the next thing on his mind, "Well how is Rainbow Dash," Soarin asked.
"She is fine, she isn't even in a hospital bed. All we had to do was put some bandages on her. She is actually in the waiting room refusing to do the ultrasound without you, " the nurse giggled. Soarin smiled, he knew Dash was like this. He knew Dash would want him in the room when they did the ultrasound. Then another thought came to his mind; his little sister.
"What about my little sister" Soarin asked.
"She is fine we put some bandages on her leg," the nurse said.
"How long have I been out?" Soarin asked.
"About two days" the nurse said.
"Well that's not too bad, that would explain why it hurt less to move around."
"In fact, let me see your arm," the nurse said. Soarin nodded giving the nurse his arm. the nurse took the bandages off to reveal a small scar that looked like it could have been made by hiting the sharp edge of his counter top.
"Eeyup, I presumed correctly, this wound is healing nicely. I don't even have to put a new bandage on it," the nurse said.
"Now hold still," The nurse said reaching for the bandage on his head. She removed them carefully. "Eeyup this one is healing nicely too. Ok for this next one I will have to remove the bandages on your chest. I've been told you have a very......um ....fit body so please don't be upset with me if I stare," the nurse said with a blush on her face.
"Ok I understand," Soarin said.
The nurse walked over and undid the bandages and did her best not to stare at his muscular body. She looked at the scar on his chest; it ran down to his stomach and stopped at his belly button.
"Oh wow this has healed really nicely. I was expecting it to still be hurting," the nurse said. "Do you think you can stand? I have some crutches for you to use. The doctor told me that you would be ready to go when your wounds had half way healed so why don't you try?" the nurse said.
"Ok I'll try," Soarin said. The nurse handed him the crutches and he got up a little shaky but it worked, he was ready to leave the hospital but he knew he wouldn't leave until he and Dash got an ultrasound of the baby. The nurse handed him some cloths that where taken from his dresser by his mom. He put the clothes on and he walked out of the room with the nurse helping him to the waiting room.
Once Soarin got to the waiting room he saw dash talking to his sister they really where waiting for him. Rainbow was the first to notice Soarin and she got up.
"Soarin," Rainbow said in a voice that sounded like music to his ears. Rainbow walked over to Soarin and hugged him as tight as she could.
Soarin stumbled a bite but the nurse was there to catch him so he could let go of his crutches and hug Dash.
One of the male doctors came in the waiting room. "Miss Dash, now that Soarin is awake are you ready to do your ultrasound?" he asked. Rainbow looked up at Soarin with an expression that was asking him if she should do it, Soarin gave her a reassuring look and nodded his head.
"Ok I'm ready," Rainbow said. The nurse gave Soarin back his crutches and they both went to the ultrasound room followed by Spectrum, Firefly and Raindrop.
"Alright rainbow just take off your shirt and lay down on the table and we will be able to get started" a nurse said. Rainbow did as she was told and toke her shrt of and then lyed down on the table.
The nurse grabbed a weird looking substance and put it on a device that rainbow had no clue about. The nurse set the object on top of Rainbow's abdomen area. Rainbow flinched.
"Ohh cold," Dash said.
"Yes it will be a little cold" the nurse said. Rainbow took a wild guess at what the instrument was supposed to do, it would make it so they could she the baby.
The nurses expression worried the couple. Soarin was holding a firm grip on Rainbow's hand.
"Well, is there still someone in there?" Rainbow asked.
"Yes, but its more like someones," the nurse said.
Rainbows eyes widened in pure horror, "Is-is it triplets or twins?" Rainbow asked.
"Twins," the nurse said. Rainbow looked at Soarin, the look of fear still on her face. He held her hand tight and didn't let go.
"I will be with you every step of the way, I promise, no mater what happens," Soarin said leaning down and kissing her on the lips and then giving her a loving smile.
"Okay Soarin i trust you," Rainbow said.
"All right your next appointment will be on....September 25th," the nurse said.
"Ok" Rainbow said. The nurse wiped off the goo from Rainbow's stomach area and she put her shirt back on. They both left to go home. Soarin went to stay with Dash and he was lucky enough to sleep with Dash.
4895601 just read your story and this is my review.
The grammar is horible. The pace is too fast. Sometimes on the story you give useless description of the characters or none at all. I'm not a editor or proofreader so this is all ai can say.
Also by your comment you really must be twelve. Have my dislike.
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like i sead in my blog post My disorder I have dyslexia i try to write as fast as i can so i can try to make myself look less stoped
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and if you have seen my other blog posts you would now that im 24 and geting married to my beautiful fiance and i am a lesbian so if you would have goten confused there is your awncer
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there's a difference between being constructive and being an ass you know
There is only one complaint that I have with this chapter alone:
I'm pretty sure you can't do an ultrasound that early on into the pregnancy. The fetus (or fetuses, in this case) would be much too small to see, and not even fully formed. I'm sure it wouldn't even have legs yet. This is especially true in this case, since Rainbow could be having twins, and twins are generally born very tiny, unlike most people's presumptions that the mother would be twice the size in pregnancy. A small error, but one that annoyed me A LOT. I can't say that every word of this is gospel, since I haven't ever been pregnant, but this fetus is about A WEEK OLD. IT'S FREAKIN' TINY.
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i'm not trying to get on you for giving a dislike... but you could've left it at that
"you must be twelve" really that was unnecessary
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i know and i meant to change that but i forgot thank you so much for pounting that out i will be sure to change it if you haddent told me i probably wouldnt have notesed thanks
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Oh, God!!!! I'm sooooo sorry!!!! I was just giving a little criticism!! I'm so sorry I offended you!!! *drops to knees* FORGIIIIIVE MEEEEE!!!!
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thats Ok its Spiderman here being mean you where giving criticism that could actually help me improve and change my mistake
by the way which chapter did you see where it said Rainbow was 1 week pregnant i cant seem to remember or find it
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Damn, I replied to the wrong comment!!!
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I'm not sure, I think it was the last one. Thanks for not being pissy!
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Rude much? Why are people on FimFiction like this? Just messed up! Encourage them! Not HURT them.
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Sorry, make that fourth. She says it's a week since she found out, and you normally find out around seven weeks after... stuff happens. Also, if your getting sick of people whining about grammar and that rubbish, I would edit for you, if you want?
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thanks and i already have an editor well two editors for this story
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Okie-dokie!
4895788 what the fuck is an awncer? Is it some type of new cancer?
4895864 I'm rude to people that are rude to me.
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ANSWER its supposed to say ANSWER i told you i have dyslexia
4895966 You better have some great proofreaders then.
4895991 No girls don't think that. Maybe you are like that but not ALL girls. And you were rude to me first.
4895991 also you just replied to yourself! xD
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i was on my thing you know the monthly thing that girls have maby you should put that into consideration sometimes it might just save you all the arguing
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i clicked the rong button
4896013 having a period don't make you an asshole. Also you have hours if you want to answer my comments since we are talking on the internet not real life.
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Christ dude, just leave her alone. Please? You put your dislike, you've made your point. Please leave it be.
4896058 Nah, I like to have arguments.
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thanks and i'll try to find some time to fix some of theas mistakes and i will try to make it with more emotion
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PMS, Dude, PMS.
4896085 same with the second chapter, and I guess the others as well. Lots of grammar mistakes in the second one, and Rainbow seems all too calm that she's having a child.
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dont worry that will change i was suosed to make it so it sound like rainbow is to shocked to even have an emetion about it but it will change
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you know that sounds really bad on your image
4896344 this argument is over!
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I commend you for actually posting a story on this website even though you have a disorder like Dyslexia. That shows that you have courage. Oh and screw tht Spider-Man guy he's just an asshole.
4895748 SPIDER-MAN! THATS IT! IM ONE OF HER PROOF READERS AND EDITORS AND YOU DONT TALK TO HER LIKE THAT! THERE IS A GIANT DIFFERENCE IM BEING A CRITIC AND A COMPLETE AND UTTER ASS! AND ALL I SEE YOU FOR IS A GIANT ASS!!! YOU KNOW WHAT WHY DONT YOU COME AND PICK ON ME COS IM USED TO ALOT OF BULL SHITE!!! AND YOU ALSO KNOW WHAT MY CONDITIONS WORSE THAN HER'S I HAVE FREAKING DYSLEXIA, DYSGRAPHIA AND FREAKING DYSCALCULUS!!! AND IM STILL IN HIGH SCHOOL!!! IT MAKES LEARNING A TONNE HARDER!!! AND CALLING MY FRIEND 12 THATS SO LOW YOU REACHED HELL!!! CONGNRADULATIONS!!! SAY HI TO THE DEVIL FOR ME!!! AND TO TOP IT OFF I THINK YOUR JUST A HEARTLESS BITCH AND YOUR REALLY 12 YEARS OLD!!! SO FACK OFF BEFORE I FREAKING REPORT YOU FOR BEING A BITCH AND BEING PLAIN MEAN, LAUGHING AT PEOPLES SEXUALITY AND FREAKING MEAN TO SOMEONE WHO TRIES REALLY HARD TO WRITE A STORY TO THE BEST OF HER ABILITY!!! SO GO AWAY AND DONT COME BACK!!!
4896124 don't worry I will send rainbow an edited version
4896595 view the third one please
http://m.imgur.com/gallery/j95Mm
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Wow talk bout fluttershy sticking up for her friends thanks it really means alot to me
4897578 no problem! I'm always here to stand up for a friend!
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I didn't read the comments and don't know if anyone has told you this; so I apologize if my comment is repeating.
But, I would suggest researching some medical information. Your timelines are not adding up for the injuries or baby growth at all.
Also, if Soarin's parents would do that, there really should be evidence of it before-hand. Just to help with the story.
Other than those few minor details I'm liking your story. Take note of the few criticisms and you should be just fine :)
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thanks and i apoligised cus i was the one being an ass first so were friends know
Glad to hear it.
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thanks for telling me those things but what does this mean
im really stuped when it comes to someone telling me smart things
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It just means that people don't heal from the damage you have done in one day. You don't usually find out you're pregnant until a week or so later. You can't tell what the baby is or that it is twins until 8 weeks into the pregnancy.
Those are the timelines that you need to follow. Medical facts.
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oh well then i hope i changer that correctly in chapter 4
I would never be able to handle twins. I have enough trouble with my son. He is 18 and still acts like he is 12
4895748 man your such a dick! Fuck off she's making a effort she in my opinion is a fabulous writer so if you want to sit here and be a douche GTFO
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Ok thats enuff spidie and I are cool I was being a bitch twords him first he was tying to give a good suggestion but he just said it wrong and it made me think that he was being mean but he wasn't and him are friends ok