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NightGlider Shimmer

Healing slowly..... And there might be times I show my real face


After Rainbow and Soarin went on another date, Rainbow started getting severe stomach pains. When she goes to her friends to ask if they have an idea of what could be happening to her, what they tell her is to shocking, so she goes to the nurse at school to find out if it is true. What the nurse tells her makes her heart shatter into a million pieces. Rainbow will have to now go on an adventure called pregnancy. And how will Soarin react to Rainbow telling him that he is going to be a father? i give credit to the person who drew the original picture as the cover art :)
edited by :RaylanKrios
and Spectrum Destiny pre reads the chapters and corects anything that was missed

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Rainbow Dash awoke to the sun on her face, she started moving to get of the bed but then felt something touch her leg. She looked over to the other side of her bed and saw her boyfriend Soarin lying down,still sleeping. She smiled down at him as she thought to herself "wow he looks so hansome".

Soarin fluttered his eyes open and looked at Rainbow and smiled with tired eyes, "Morning beautiful," Soarin said. Rainbow blushed at this ,she wasn't quite used to being called beautiful. All of the sudden she realized she was only wearing a bra and literally nothing else and Soarin was totally naked. She blushed furiously as her face turned a apple red color but then she remember that her parents would be home at 11:00am; she looked at her clock it was 10:55am.

"OH SHIT SOARIN! I HAVE TO GET YOU OUT OF HERE! MY PARENTS WILL BE HOME ANY MINUTE NOW," Rainbow said, but as she stopped speaking right at that moment as the door to her room swung open reveling her mother and father.

Comment posted by RaylanKrios deleted Aug 23rd, 2014

You just spoiled the story in the summary...

theres more to the story than just that i meant to do that :twilightangry2: you could just wait for the rest of the story to be out :facehoof:

One Mistake Can Led To Pain

Isn't it supposed to be lead not led? Since led would be past-tense.

Comment posted by rainbowangel409 deleted Aug 22nd, 2014


Alright, but then title is still wrong.

thanks for pointing that out i have a really shity key bord so it can lead to some mistakes and i also have dyslexia :twilightblush:


Don't worry about it. I hope you have this story succeed.

sorry i saw what you meant right away i never mind about that othe comment i changed it :twilightblush::twilightblush::twilightblush::twilightblush::twilightblush::facehoof::facehoof::facehoof:


Yup, I saw. Good luck with your story.

it got more favorets on the first day then my other story :applejackunsure: so yeah you could say im hapy with how my story is going:twilightsmile::trollestia:

Well that's good, try to keep above a thousand words with your other one.

From the description:

What the nurse tells her makes her heart shatter into a million peaces.

They may sound alike, but there's a difference between "peace" and "piece".

i know its just i have dyslexia and i can get letters confused and stuff but i will change it :twilightblush:


4890358 leave my friend alone! There is a reason why they are called summaries! Back off!:twilightangry2:

4890428 rainbow are you ok?:pinkiesad2:

im fine :pinkiesad2: he was just not paying atention to detail and how amazing this story is doing:trollestia::yay: i think he is just jelus :trollestia::trollestia::trollestia: this story is geting more likes and favorets faster than the other one is i dont get why people dont like my other story i ges they asome its a cupcake story that involves all the gore and stuff but it doesn't :derpytongue2:

and this is kind of ironic cus that guys pic is spiderman i just watched the 2 spider man movie it was pretty good:pinkiehappy:

Damn... just.... damn.... can't say anything else:twilightoops:

Nope. You got a thumbs up from me but still, holy shit he got violent.

Oh you blue sky trust me i have something planed out for that :ajsmug::ajsmug::trixieshiftright:

I love it cx one of your best

4892086 Are you twelve? Cuz are acting like one.

FUCK YOU :flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::twilightangry2::twilightangry2: leav spectrum destiny alone

4895601 just read your story and this is my review.
The grammar is horible. The pace is too fast. Sometimes on the story you give useless description of the characters or none at all. I'm not a editor or proofreader so this is all ai can say.
Also by your comment you really must be twelve. Have my dislike.

like i sead in my blog post My disorder I have dyslexia i try to write as fast as i can so i can try to make myself look less stoped :twilightangry2:

and if you have seen my other blog posts you would now that im 24 and geting married to my beautiful fiance and i am a lesbian so if you would have goten confused there is your awncer :twilightangry2:


there's a difference between being constructive and being an ass you know :ajsleepy:

There is only one complaint that I have with this chapter alone:

I'm pretty sure you can't do an ultrasound that early on into the pregnancy. The fetus (or fetuses, in this case) would be much too small to see, and not even fully formed. I'm sure it wouldn't even have legs yet. This is especially true in this case, since Rainbow could be having twins, and twins are generally born very tiny, unlike most people's presumptions that the mother would be twice the size in pregnancy. A small error, but one that annoyed me A LOT. I can't say that every word of this is gospel, since I haven't ever been pregnant, but this fetus is about A WEEK OLD. IT'S FREAKIN' TINY.


i'm not trying to get on you for giving a dislike... but you could've left it at that

"you must be twelve" really that was unnecessary

i know and i meant to change that but i forgot thank you so much for pounting that out i will be sure to change it:twilightblush::twilightblush: if you haddent told me i probably wouldnt have notesed thanks:twilightsmile::twilightsmile:


Oh, God!!!! I'm sooooo sorry!!!! I was just giving a little criticism!! I'm so sorry I offended you!!! *drops to knees* FORGIIIIIVE MEEEEE!!!!

thats Ok its Spiderman here being mean you where giving criticism that could actually help me improve and change my mistake:twilightsmile:
by the way which chapter did you see where it said Rainbow was 1 week pregnant i cant seem to remember or find it :twilightblush::twilightblush:


Damn, I replied to the wrong comment!!! :twilightblush:


I'm not sure, I think it was the last one. Thanks for not being pissy!

Rude much? Why are people on FimFiction like this? Just messed up! Encourage them! Not HURT them. :flutterrage:



Sorry, make that fourth. She says it's a week since she found out, and you normally find out around seven weeks after... stuff happens. Also, if your getting sick of people whining about grammar and that rubbish, I would edit for you, if you want?

thanks:twilightsmile: and i already have an editor well two editors for this story :twilightsheepish:

4895788 what the fuck is an awncer? Is it some type of new cancer?

4895864 I'm rude to people that are rude to me.

ANSWER its supposed to say ANSWER i told you i have dyslexia :twilightangry2::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::facehoof:

4895966 You better have some great proofreaders then.

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