Well, that escalated quickly. Basically, it was a rocket start Poor thing must be incredibly repressed to have such vidid imagination during the day itself, not just before passing out, while dreaming, or in the wakeup period. Good job, this can only get better
6378695 that was a fantasy/dream sequence thing, didn't actually happen and noi is not actually a futa.
it'll be elaborated on later.
also, thank you to everyone for all the kind words! it's nice to know that after all the wait the end result was just as well received as the original!
>I'm the faggiest fag to ever eat a pussy? -One would think authors would be ''professional'' enough to know to leave such stupidities to the rest of the Internet, but noooooo... Come on now, authors should have more vocabulary than that ! Sigh. -_-
6401609 It's not coming from a professional author, it's coming from a lesbian teenager. Using vocabulary in that way can really help define a character, even in that one line, you can infer so much about Noi.
Sorry if I come accross as a little bit stuck up, I'm not very eloquent.
6406147 for a second i thought you were calling me a lesbian teenager and i was going to point out that i'm bisexual and in my late twenties but then i read the rest of your post. thank you for taking my side, friend.
6401609 i'm not going to say anything on the subject, beyond this;
- once again, bi lady. fag is my slur to reclaim and i can use it if i want. i don't expect you to have known this, but now you do. - noi is not a real person. no one is calling anyone anything here except a fictional character calling herself "fag" - to an author, words are tools. i'm not going to not use the best tool for a job because someone says "oh, you have other tools, why not use them?" likewise, i'm not going to have a character say something other than what she would say because what she would say contains a slur. it has nothing to do with being uneducated; fag is a word in my vocabulary and i'll use it when the situation calls for it. - you talk about authors being "professional" enough to not use slurs. which is bullshit, but even going by your logic, i'm not a professional author. i'm just a girl writing fetish porn on the internet as a hobby. i don't get paid for this beyond like a dollar per story via patreon and maybe commissions (i've not gotten one yet, maybe you could be the first, person reading this comment!). i have no need to be professional about anything, and it's more fun this way.
6406204 >you talk about authors being "professional" enough to not use slurs -I speak of being 'professional' enough not to use ''foul slang'' with little meaning as if it was what everyone(teenagers, etc, whatever) did or would do. I already see plenty of people randomly throw that out, as if it still had any kind of ''power'' left in it.
If anything, it's simply overused and dull... and there it distracted from the reading. (After consideration, I feel I must precise that I don't speak in ''anger'', but in ''Sigh + Rolling my eyes'' at the word.)
The action drew Dinky's attention to what Noi was wearing, or rather what she wasn't wearing – she didn't have a goddamn bra on, again, as was made obvious by that eight year old white tank top that she refused to throw out even though it didn't even remotely fit her anymore. Her nipples were clearly outlined against the thin, tight cotton, and her sizable breasts were squashed flat, tantalizing lumps oozing out of the sides of the top.
Yayz a sequel!!!!
Sorry, I'm drunk as fudge right flipping now and ah can't helpnt
Awesome! Can't wait to see how this goes! Looking forward to every damn word you write! Lol, this is off to a good, sexy start. Keep up the good work!
Awesome!
~TOOWC
Well, that escalated quickly. Basically, it was a rocket start
Poor thing must be incredibly repressed to have such vidid imagination during the day itself, not just before passing out, while dreaming, or in the wakeup period.
Good job, this can only get better
OH SWEET JESUS TITTY CINNAMON, THAT WAS SWEEEEET! Seriously, that was pretty good. I hope to see more of this sometime soon.
errmm i thought noi was a girl where did the unos come from or was it just rumble in disquise
6378695 that was a fantasy/dream sequence thing, didn't actually happen and noi is not actually a futa.
it'll be elaborated on later.
also, thank you to everyone for all the kind words! it's nice to know that after all the wait the end result was just as well received as the original!
6379883
...Aww...
6379883 More of this is needed. Enough said.
>I'm the faggiest fag to ever eat a pussy?
-One would think authors would be ''professional'' enough to know to leave such stupidities to the rest of the Internet, but noooooo...
Come on now, authors should have more vocabulary than that ! Sigh. -_-
6401609 It's not coming from a professional author, it's coming from a lesbian teenager. Using vocabulary in that way can really help define a character, even in that one line, you can infer so much about Noi.
Sorry if I come accross as a little bit stuck up, I'm not very eloquent.
6406147 for a second i thought you were calling me a lesbian teenager and i was going to point out that i'm bisexual and in my late twenties but then i read the rest of your post. thank you for taking my side, friend.
6401609 i'm not going to say anything on the subject, beyond this;
- once again, bi lady. fag is my slur to reclaim and i can use it if i want. i don't expect you to have known this, but now you do.
- noi is not a real person. no one is calling anyone anything here except a fictional character calling herself "fag"
- to an author, words are tools. i'm not going to not use the best tool for a job because someone says "oh, you have other tools, why not use them?" likewise, i'm not going to have a character say something other than what she would say because what she would say contains a slur. it has nothing to do with being uneducated; fag is a word in my vocabulary and i'll use it when the situation calls for it.
- you talk about authors being "professional" enough to not use slurs. which is bullshit, but even going by your logic, i'm not a professional author. i'm just a girl writing fetish porn on the internet as a hobby. i don't get paid for this beyond like a dollar per story via patreon and maybe commissions (i've not gotten one yet, maybe you could be the first, person reading this comment!). i have no need to be professional about anything, and it's more fun this way.
6406204
>you talk about authors being "professional" enough to not use slurs
-I speak of being 'professional' enough not to use ''foul slang'' with little meaning as if it was what everyone(teenagers, etc, whatever) did or would do. I already see plenty of people randomly throw that out, as if it still had any kind of ''power'' left in it.
If anything, it's simply overused and dull... and there it distracted from the reading. (After consideration, I feel I must precise that I don't speak in ''anger'', but in ''Sigh + Rolling my eyes'' at the word.)
That is all.
Ignoring THAT asshat above me...
This is great, Azure! Keep it up!
This part . I wonder if her shorts/skirt match...
Wow...Poor Dinky...
Surprise new sex organ is surprising..., to Dinky