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Lunar Mate has joined the party!
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Now have fun trying to guess her totem
Well with absolutely no information on a tell or anima banner.... or even a name or cutie mark. I'm going to go out on a limb and say.... Full Moon Caste, with a spirit form of a Phoenix....
No wait! Wolf!
Cow?
Crow!
Rabbit!
Human?
I'm liking the story so far, webkilla, glad for the link!
Three chapters in, I've noticed a number of spelling/grammar errors including missing or extra words. I don't know how much you've improved over time, but I do recommend making an editing pass over some of the earlier stuff. (This is not an offer to act as an editor, by the way. I'm already serving as editor and sounding board for My Little Masquerade as well as writing My Little Exalt. There's only so much pony I can fit around the rest of my life!)
As a player, I think it's a bit surprising for a Solar to be running around with a gyroscopic chakram and using Thousand Wounds Gear Style. I guess I could buy a gyroscpoic chakram being developed in the First Age, but if I were the ST of a game I wouldn't likely permit it. TWGS, on the other hand, was developed in Autochthonia during the time of the Shogunate in Creation, so it wouldn't be something remembered from the First Age, and wouldn't be present in Creation until the Seal of Eight Divinities was broken. (Also: IIRC in 1e Autochthonians the gryoscopic chakram made mention of the style, but the style was never printed. The fan-made version of the style produced 3 months later would give a master of the style 2 permanent Clarity, with the ultimate charm giving temporary Clarity, a trait only Alchemicals have. That said, the 2e official version of the style does not grant Clarity.)
Of course, this far into your story I'm under no illusions that you'd change such a fundamental part of a major character just because of a single criticism. I just felt it had to be said.
It's also worth noting that the punishment for breaking an Eclipse oath rarely happens immediately, and it's rarely as dramatic as being dragged kicking and screaming off the deck of your ship by animate water. Nor can the Eclipse specify exactly what the punishment will be (that's entirely up to Heaven to decide). Tripping over a rock and stabbing yourself in the eye is entirely appropriate (especially for an oath made by an Ess 2 Solar); having your junk rot off is much less likely. Remember, the penalty manifests as a botch at the worst possible time in proportion to the Eclipse's essence at the time the oath was made. While not impossible, it's hard to come up with a situation where a botch would cause your
manstallionhood to fall off.The oath works both ways, too, but correctly wording the oath can easily put the Eclipse out of any harm: "Do you promise not to hunt me?" is a hard oath for the Eclipse to break himself.
Put shortly, as I understand, they're like active feats.
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yes and no - mechanically, in the game, excellencies is the basic ability to just "spend mana/essence, get more dice for a roll, because magic"