Rarity purchases contacts from overseas. They cost her 500 bits so the must be good. Right? Right?
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I like where this is going. The idea of the contacts actually being some form of blood transfer is interesting. It also has a bit more creativity than my original idea of what was happening. I had thought that the contacts were simply enchanted. It does raise the question of how Rarity's friend from the last chapter knew the guy who sold them.
I also like the villain. Madara is threatening and seems to enjoy being the bad guy here. Not as much as the likes of Discord, but it's clear he likes being an imposing figure that strikes fear in the hearts of others. I've yet to finish the Naruto anime (I just finished the race arc around episode 100), so I can't say if you took his character directly from the show yet. What I do know is that a ruthless, manipulative villain is fun to see in action. I look forward to seeing what kind of havoc he unleashes. He'll need something big hidden up those sleeves if he plans on surviving an enraged pair of unicorns known for swatting god-like beings out of the sky.
In short, this was a good chapter. The grammar is still off, but I can handle that so long as the story is interesting. Fluttershy's appearance at the end of the chapter tells me that the two stories are about to connect. I look forward to the next update.