you seam to have a few missing words, but all together good

4759139 I agree good sir, editing should be taken. This could have a possibility of great potential.

Not enough Gilda stories.

This has potential, but the pacing could go a bit slower if you ask me.
Still, one like and one favorite from me.

So this really happened to you but with humans?

Lol yeah, its why I got into writing and how I met my girlfriend now. But I'm not into clubs and drinking as much anymore,its just not my thing. And thank you for the comments. Im still learning as I go, and the editors I used to have just disappeared so I need to find another one. But again thank you every pony!

Je he is so going to get late tonight and if he work on a construction doesn't that mean that he has a good health too?

4760098 He is of decent build for being 6 foot 2

4760713
I mean like he has six packs and budge arms or is he like modern…slim but not over muscular body kind of guy?

4760830 He is of modern build. Not to fat not still skinny, but still has some muscle.

4760896
So option 2, ok got it…proceed

4759785 If you're looking for editors or proof readers, check out OEE. Just make sure you read the rules. I'm sure there'd be someone who would be able to help you out.

4761962 Ok Thanks!

Great start, but it feels like something is missing.

Does have potential... but it's hard to follow.

Understood, ill try to even things out in the second part of the story, and hopefully it will make things flow better.

You are a lucky guy Jazz. How much I wish I could find someone special in some really random circumstance but oh well, it looks good so far and keep working on it

4765838 Just be yourself and you'll find the one for you. And just make the one you love feel special and cared for no matter what and you'll be fine.

4766638 Sadly tried that...with an online girlfriend and you know how that happened

Based on an event that happened to yours truly

FAAAAAAAAAAKE. GRIFFONS AREN'T REAL.

Not bad. There was some repetition with the ass shacking and a missing word or two, but this is still a good read. I do love me some hot, Gilda action.

Just something to think about. Since this happened to you, why not have, Gilda stand on her hind legs when she increased her grinding if the help of her tail so they could get closer. I sure you didn't just stand there letting her do all the grinding alone!

4767957 LOL. SHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH

4768072 !

4768076 LOL shush you...maybe ill think about adding it... MAYBE!!

(Based on a true event that happened to yours truly XD)

You are telling me you fucked a griffon?

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4768302 hjkfdskfskjfsd OMG!!!!!!!!! YALL KNOW WHAT WHAT I MEAN!!!!!

4768377 Yeah, dawg!

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4768377 More on topic, you are saying that you called a woman in a bar beautiful, she threatened you with bodily harm, and then totally banged you?

Awesome.

4768590 Who said I got some

So Awesome!

4768302 Happened to me too.

Darn those random transdimensional portals.

4768590
ur avatar is duckfess

Sorry for the inconvenience, but all my stories are gonna on pause for a few days. My father had a stroke and I just can't write right now. Family comes first, sorry.

4779282 Send him my regards. Hope he gets healthy. I have a father in his 60's so I worry for him as well.

4763439 your avatar.....
Want dome popcorn?

Yeah but I don't want these ponies thinking I'm not or not hardcore or anything. | This statement confuses me.
All and all an okay story, need to watch out for your use of apostrophes in I'm, other wise I see no problems aside from word play confusion.

I feel like this is a stopid question, but is this anthro? Im kinda lost no that note )3

5298177 I don't think its anthro or I am pretty sure it would be listed as one.

The most prettiest and most beautiful one I've ever seen.

...and I'm out.