Rainbow Dash's eyes fluttered open. Some point while she was crying she had fallen asleep. Her eyes were puffy and sore. Soarin' was gone. Soarin'. Why had he done that? It was so kind. He was so kind. Rainbow thought of how he stroked her mane. She had let him, but, why? Oh, and the way he was so gentle- she should thank him. No, wouldn't that be weird? He was just being a good friend...unlike Applejack. No, Applejack just thought she was lonely, and Applejack was right. As a matter of fact she was a bit lonely right now. She flew outside her house and down to the hard ground. Applejack's place was the closest to her right now, and she better apologize, actually, Applejack is one who should apologize. She shouldn't have pressured her into that! It was Rainbow's business weather she had a boyfriend or not. Was Soarin' doing anything? But, why would she want to hang out with Soarin'? A voice in the back of her mind told her. Because Soarin’s your friend. But then something hit her, she didn't know where Soarin' lived. Maybe she could hang out with Pinkie Pie. But, Pinkie was busy.
"Ugghh!" Rainbow said in frustration.
"Rainbow?" The familiar voice of Twilight Sparkle spoke.
"Twilight?" Rainbow said in surprise, she hadn't heard her come up. "What are you doing here, I thought you were supposed to be at the Crystal Empire?"
"Actually, it was a false alarm." She answered with a giggle. Then her serious face came back. "Is something wrong?"
"It's nothing. Applejack just keeps trying to force me together with other colts." Rainbow was surprised by how upset and angsty her voice came out.
"That's why your so upset?"
"It's ridiculous I know-." Rainbow started.
"No, it's not. It's just that well, it's a bit ridiculous for you. But, every pony has their ups and downs even you." Rainbow stomach grumbled.
"When's the last time you've eaten?" Twilight questioned. Rainbow thought about it. Actually, she didn't know when the last time she ate. The silence made Twilight's frown deepen. "Well, Rainbow Dash, no wonder your so grumpy, you haven't eaten! You can't work on an empty stomach!" But the thought of food made Rainbow's stomach churn.
"No thanks, Twilight."
She scowled. "Nonsense!" Before Twilight could do anything, Rainbow zoomed away. Maybe she was tired, but the thought of sleeping didn't sound very appealing either. What was wrong with her? Whatever it was she knew Zecora could help.
oh yeah, i can tell. If i wrote it with Microsoft Word it would be better.
(Corey)
i'll probably edit it a lot
Don't let dislikes throw you off. Just keep at it and you'll find that your writing (as well as popularity) will greatly improve :D Also there are groups with editors who can help you out if you ever want to boost you story's quality :D
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Thank you but i was wondering how do other people edit your story (to make it better of course.)
4600702 Usually once you find an editor they'll send you a personal message regarding all of the mistakes that they found, it's up to you to fix them... But they can at least point out all of the mistakes and tell you how to fix them :D
This looks like an Alright story. I will be waiting for future updates,to see if it goes into my favorite pile. Good job with this part of a meddling Applejack.