a race of creatures called humans lived alongside their pony cousins in peace and harmony.

...Distant cousins I hope; unless anthros are just the missing link or something. Then again, maybe if humans and ponies were cousins, they'd stop having so much sex... Or we'd just have a bunch of three hooved ponies and humans with twelve toes.

Anyway, on the story so far. Well, once again, ponies are going to get the worst impression possible as Twilight follows Sasuke on his murder streak, all the while missing out on the embodiment of friendship that is Naruto, (seriously, that kid makes Twilight look like Diamond Tiara) so my heart weeps a little. Hopefully Twilight doesn't go and think badly of humanity just because they fight like she did with the story, that was seriously annoying of her.

Speaking of which, that tree of life was a complete moron. What the hell was it thinking? Did it seriously not realize the shit storm it was going to create with the one fruit crap? For what amounted to a god, it sure didn't have any foresight.

And now onto the subjects of gods, I absolutely despise any story that puts the princesses into that category. It's the worst thing this fandom has ever made. There's no way Luna and Celestia could be eternal, multi-milleniam living, all powerful gods, and be as pathetic and stupid as they are always shown to be. They couldn't even handle some tentacle vines or realize Cadance had been replaced with a horrible actor for crying out loud!

And that's not even mentioning all the canon stuff your going to have to work around in this, like the old castle and the princesses' diary; I was under the impression that these two were children at the beginning construction of the castle of the pony sisters. I mean, who else but a child would want their castle be a fun house?

All in all, you are walking a slippery slope here, and this story can easily fall either way. I don't believe in casting my vote until after the first 15000 words have been published just in case something turns out better than expected or trips up after the first ten yards, but I'm letting you know I'm leaning towards a thumbs-down. That being said, you still have 10792 words left to convince me with, so good luck.

Oh, and be careful of those mistakes, they weren't to abundant, but I still noticed a few.

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Have you read the latest manga yet? (So I don't run the risk of spoiling anything.)

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No, but go ahead, I don't mind spoilers. I mean, my guess for the end is Naruto and Sasuke team-up, save the day, and they all live happily ever after.

And because I wish for this comment to be more than just an answer to a query; Hey Twilight, we may kill each other, but at least we don't argue over pies. Ponies are the most immature being imaginable, it's like a world of screaming five-year olds. Also, what the fudge was with that? What kind of circumstance leads to that anyway? Unless the baker stole the cherries, I see no reason for the farmer to come along and demand for the pie made with cherries he probably sold to the baker who bought them for the sole purpose of baking them. It's a good thing ponies don't have violent tendencies or they'd be killing each other way more than humans do.

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In the way of the manga your kinda right, but in this case their fighting said god tree which is the jubi. Obito and then Madara U. who become the 2nd and 3rd jinchuriki of the jubi respectively and the infinite tsukuyomi is cast but in the most overdone way for a plot twist, Madara isn't the true villain as the black zetsu he "made" betrays him and reveals that Madara didn't make black zetsu but the sage of the six paths mother did and proceeds to use Madara's body to revive her, kaguya (the sage's mother) then proceeds to go on about how the earth is her "nursery" like a hippie activist who's drunk on power and she fights team seven, obito and kakashi. She then reveals that only she should have chakra along with the stereotypical crazy villain tendencies. She also created the white zetsu's, who are basically what's left of those trapped under the infinite tsukuyomi genjutsu. So basically the zetsu's are once living humans turned into plant soldiers.

Basically we have inuyasha's ending all over again, just without an evil jewel and with a crazy tree hugging lady who has a god complex greater than madara's.

I'm still pissed off that that's how they decide to get rid of madara. At least kaguya's defeat is going to be imminent and probably very enjoying to read

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I wouldn't be surprised if kaguya herself is manipulated by black zetsu, perhaps unknowingly, there is some evidence there if you look into it, black zetsu might be an experiment out of control.

I gave this one a like just because the image of Sasuke riding twilight made me bust a gut.

4601744 you might be right but their is the issue of black zetsu being an extension of kaguya's will although he could be lying about being an extension of kaguya's will seeing as how he lied about being an extension of madara's will when he punched a hole through him from behind. (Still mad that that is how kishimoto decided to kill off Madara uchiha.)

Dunno who this human characters is, but story ssems interesting. W8ing for a moment when they fwill force Twilight to kill something.

i can already picture it...
Pinkie and Dash find Naruto...
so much chaos happens that not even Discord could add to it...
the multiverse is screwed

How, Interesting. I tentatively give you a thumbs up. As a reader i tend to focus on ideas and potential there of rather then sentence structure and the like. but your story flows. you convey the emotions and ideas of your story well so thumbs up. i look forward to seeing if you continue to hold my interest.

Wait do Celestia and Luna know about the Bijuu and the Prophecy about Naruto being the mischievous blue eye boy that will bring them together? Or did they leave before then or did they dismiss it? I wonder how they'll react when they hear that Indra began the feud that prolonged the conflicts and delayed their return home. Also I really want to see how you'll have Naruto meet with the Royal sisters and the Mane Six, cause he is practically the embodiment of the Elements of Harmony when you think about. Loyal to Sasuke and Leaf even though they betrayed and forsaken him. Kind to even his enemies especially when he finds that they suffered the same pain he had. Honest about his feelings and ideals. Generous as he gives his all for the sake of his friends and others. And he makes others laugh and easy or forget their problems. And that's his magic, his power which changes people and bring them peace.

I really look forward to seeing how that'll turn out.

Man, the tree of life is a total dick. Also, "distant cousins"? Ponies aren't even from the same biological order.