When I initially saw this in the browse section, I thought it was a typical 'human in Equestria' adult-rated drivel... only to realize that it's actually a side-chapter/side-story for a full story.
On one hand, 'human in Equestria' is one of the big cliches of the fandom. On another hand, writen well, it's one of the most enjoyable ones.
I'll not give a final opinion until I've read the original and got context for the scene. Though, if I have to give a first impression...
The main character's awkwardness and the emphasis on exploration & nervosity is a really nice point. Too many adult-rated stories have the characters manage to pull off improbable super amazing scenes despite having no experience, no knowledge of what they like, and having not felt one another's body traits as a whole.
Of course, as I said above, I have no context ; I'll need to read the original to know if the main character is interesting at all, if the story actually got an interesting plotline to it, and if the relationships are naturally created or if they're artificial.
I think that the sub-title should have been something like (Supplementals) or (Extra Chapters). (The Sexy Chapters) make it sound like it's actually a part of the main title when it's not.
Link to original?
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Look to your right.
4584526 actually, I'm a derp. There's a link at the bottom. I dunno if it was there before.
4584634 I actually added that when you pointed it out that there wasn't one![:twilightblush:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightblush.png)
4584677 Yay, I'm not blind![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
When I initially saw this in the browse section, I thought it was a typical 'human in Equestria' adult-rated drivel... only to realize that it's actually a side-chapter/side-story for a full story.
On one hand, 'human in Equestria' is one of the big cliches of the fandom. On another hand, writen well, it's one of the most enjoyable ones.
I'll not give a final opinion until I've read the original and got context for the scene. Though, if I have to give a first impression...
The main character's awkwardness and the emphasis on exploration & nervosity is a really nice point. Too many adult-rated stories have the characters manage to pull off improbable super amazing scenes despite having no experience, no knowledge of what they like, and having not felt one another's body traits as a whole.
Of course, as I said above, I have no context ; I'll need to read the original to know if the main character is interesting at all, if the story actually got an interesting plotline to it, and if the relationships are naturally created or if they're artificial.
I think that the sub-title should have been something like (Supplementals) or (Extra Chapters). (The Sexy Chapters) make it sound like it's actually a part of the main title when it's not.
>>Getting ready for week long trip.
>>Sees story
>>Makes face.
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>>Reads anyways.
It was really good! I can't wait to see more![:yay:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/yay.png)
Nice.