and... this is now mature also THE ULTIMATE POWER OF THE FIRST IS MINE!!!! *manical laugh*

That has to be one of the most romantic sex scenes in MLP famdom.

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Yeah, I was really, really trying to emphasize the "love" aspect of it and make it way, way more than just mere flesh meeting flash. Glad that you like it. After all, isn't Derpy so amazingly beautiful?

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Yep!

Mmthat was mmmmincredibly well done. Mmyes, indeed.

derpy doesn't have her wings in the story picture.

-The Doctor

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I just now noticed that!

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Oh shit, how is she going to get off of that cloud.

-The Doctor

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I'm sure that the pegasii around will help her out.

Cinnamon is also pretty fond of her (and that's a serious understand), so he might have some unicorn abilities to teleport himself up and then teleport them to safety.

Derpy can make it!

I would like to see this continued.

Very romantic, truly well done. Spectacular writing and word choice. The scene in the end was vivid and splendidly written. Bravo good sir.

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So much

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I am oh so intrigued to hear this.

So, yes, reading this tomorrow. If it's good, weeeelll, I apologize to the entire fandom. Because I shall never stop crowing, "Tough love, bayby. Tough love."

My apologies to everypony. I shall be insufferable. This is nice indeed.

The romance is a solid A. The sex, a C+. You've got your characters in a nice place; you can afford to be more explicit. Let Cinnamon take a good long look, see her blush, the curves of her chest, how she holds her forelegs, the bristling feathers of her wings, the way her belly quivers below her last rib, her inner thighs, teats, erect vulva*, and flicking tail. That sort of thing, except take even more time.

(*a pretty word for a pretty thing, no?)

A well-earned thumbs up and fave.