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Oh... I've never seen it abbreviated that way.

4456231 Fixed. Thank you for your input.

4457997 Just to inform you a bit better, many of the characters here were once human, but due to their experiences on "The Planet" , they've become changed. Only one or two characters remain fully human.

So you asked me for input so in my opinion this looks like a good Humans are Superior, if that's what you were going for. The characters seem really, well, badass which is an element a lot of readers enjoy when it comes to these types of stories. There is hardly any dialogue which isn't necessarily a bad thing when you compensate with extreme action, which this story obviously has. Now I don't know too much about the characters but if they are like themselves in the game but person who loves the game shouldn't have a problem with it because you got to appeal to people who would take the story personally. It's looking to be a good epic warfare story, so good work.

The metal object lodged itself inside the thick bark of the tree which had begun to catch fire from the burning hot capsule.
Suddenly the ice encasing the pod shattered around a circular hatch as it was forced open

if the capsule was hot enough to light the tree on fire, wouldn't it melt the ice?

It appears that the humans don't know where they are due to the line 'hostile planet' it just makes screem at the story 'it's only hostile if you provoke it'. And so far the only one out of the bunch that seems remotely human is the Bandit, the rest just seem robotic, or to put it another way, emotionless and animatronic like they don't know what it's like to be human or to have human emotions. But the story it's self the plot is good the way that each chapter introduces a new 'mercenary', very well done.

Chapter three, still no plot that I can see. just emotionless battle.

Scratch that, I mean slaughter, because I know who's always going to win.

Hm, I don't really think I can read much more of a story with no challenges, no chance of failure, and no mercy for random creatures they run into. With god-like powers, you'd think they might stop and ask SOMEPONY a question instead of acting like homicidal maniacs. Well, at least the Timberwolf wasn't talking enough to make threats, so at least I could see treating that one like a wild beast.

Here's what I can offer objectively:

Your action is superb. The level of detail you put into each scene is crystal clear from your descriptions.

I personally have never played Risk of Rain, so I feel if you wanted to make this a more open crossover and potentially get more readers, perhaps a foreword synopsis is in order. Explaining the characters' motivations, backgrounds, goals, etc. will help to make your story more accessible.

That said, I don't as a rule read Mature rated stories, especially gory ones like this. I admire your initiative in going out of your way to message me, though, so I felt I owed you a few chapters read. Especially since no inside motivation is given, the post-human characters here seem to be needlessly ruthless and have no goal but to fight challenging creatures and commit random acts of violence. If there are any sympathetic qualities in the protagonists, they should be addressed immediately, I believe, or you'll lose the interest of some readers.

These characters just keep getting better and better, but I guess that's what I get for being so ignorant of the game.

Description keeps going up. I'm so impressed that I feel obliged to ask for some help on my stories, if that's not too much.

The Bandit seems like a guy with rules, and also has his histories with several fights and whatnot. A man of memory and a very funny one too.

Many questions pop up in my head about the Colossus and its history with the Bandit. Guess I better stay tuned and find out.