Fading Rainbow

by Mylittleponydarkside

Crashing a rainbow

As Rainbow awoke she found her head was very sore. She blinked her eyes open, immediately regretting opening them. A bright light shone down, almost blinding her. Rainbows vision was fuzzy, but she could make out a machine making beeping sound's. The last time Rainbow had heard this sound, was when she broke her wing and read her first Daring Do novel. This was when she realised she was in Hospital. She looked around some more and spotted 3 visitors.

As her vision became clearer, she could make out Pinkie Pie, Gummy And Tank. She tried to sit up but try as she might to no avail her back was to sore. To that Pinkie spoke up "Oh no your not allowed to sit up just yet, trust me *sigh* if you could I would've thrown a Get Well Soon Party."

To this Rainbow smiled and simply said "Never grow up, Pinkie." This seemed to confuse Pinkie.

"Huh?" Asked pinkie

"Well it means- what is gummy eating?"

"What that dosen't make any sense."

Rainbow simply motioned towards Gummy.

Pinkie looked down at Gummy and saw that he was chewing on a envelope.

"Gummy that was for, Rainbow," she reached down and retreated the letter.

"This Card was for you, all of our friends singed it but they said not to open it until I'm gone...weird huh?" Pinkie finished.

At this Rainbows face lit up. She took the card from Pinkie and simply opened it.

It was a rainbow coloured card that said 'Get Well Soon' on the front,Pinkie sat there confused to why Rainbow hadn't waited but, didn't object. Seeing Rainbow smile was everything to her. When Rainbow opened the card the first thing she noticed was that people seem to have thought, she was attempting suicide.

She saw various messages, some from ponies she had only met once or twice at this she decided to read her friends aloud "From, Apple Jack-It really is to bad y'all went and did that to yourself but it's even worse that y'all failed."

Rainbow began shaking. Her hopes, of her friends being mean was just a nightmare, just got shattered.

Tears welled up in her eyes as she slowly got up and said "I need to go to the bathroom."And shuffled out.

Meanwhile Pinkie sat there, rage building inside of her "HOW DARE THEY?!" She screamed as she picked up Gummy and trotted out of the room.

Rainbow dash locked the door and stared in the mirror. She spat in disgust at her reflection.
Her hair was matted,her eyes bloodshot,her wings ruffled up and her fur was mostly red and sticky.

"blood." She muttered under her breath.

She simply turned unlocked the door and limped back to her room. She saw only tank sitting there, with hopeful eyes. She petted him and then crawled into bed 'peace and quiet' she whispered as sleep took her.

Rainbow woke to the sound of the door creaking open she looked up to see Nurse Redheart "Oh don't mind me just came here to give you some food." She said in a cheery voice.

Rainbow looked at her she didn't have any food with her. Rainbow began getting confused.

After Nurse Redheart saw the confused look on Rainbows face she explained " You see, your stomach is too weak to be eating solid foods so at them minute we have to feed you through a tube," - she gestured towards A wire connected to the heart monitor and Rainbows arm held by a needle-" Although, it's good you can't taste this food because it has special vitamins to help you recover." She finished.

Rainbow just blinked, and decided not to watch Nurse Redheart as she feared it might bring her food back up.

Rainbow hadn't remembered falling asleep. In her nightmare she was back in Pony Ville, everyone looked sad. An Idea came to her ' I should do a awesome Sonic Rainboom to cheer everyone up.' She she took flight and did a Sonic Rainboom.

Nopony even looked up. This confused Rainbow 'What can impress them if that can't?!" Her face lit up.

' A double Sonic Rainboom!' She thought. She flew back to position and flew faster than she ever had, only once the second boom rang out she was at a greater speed than she could control.

She folded her wings in hoping to perform a nose dive and ovoid sudden death. But to no avail. She smashed into the wall of town hall. Then heard a sickening crack. She noticed something this whole time she was not in her own body. Just looking at it. To this Everypony looked up and began cheering.

She jolted up in bed. She was sweating and uncontrollably shaking. She had never felt so helpless as she did now. In fact she had never had a nightmare. She thought to herself ' I was only trying to make ponies happy. I guess only Pinkie is good at that.'

Meanwhile at Twilights new castle, Apple Jack, Flutter Shy, Rarity, Twilight and Pinkie sat in a circle.

Pinkie was clearly enraged, " How could you write something like that?!" She screamed

Apple Jack shrugged her shoulders and replied " eh."

The doors creaked open and Rainbow Dash walked in " Didn't know we where having a loser party."

Pinkie pie lept up " Dashie your back from hospital?" She asked clearly austounded.

Rainbow looked confused " I was in hospita- I mean ur yeah

Twilight Got suspicious " Pinkie said You were expected at least a 4 week stay."

Rainbow, gulped as a sweat formed on her head " Well Um I healed super quick, because of my awesomeness."

Rarity heard this and got up " Well here we go again, with the I'm so awesome darling you simply must stop saying that."

Rainbow clearly looked confused, before she could stop herself she said " I usually say that?"

Everyone looked confused, rarity walked over to Rainbow " Yes simple memory problems for such a tiny brain, we all knew it would happen someday." She stated.

Apple Jack got up and said " Twi cast yer' Changling spell."

Twilight got confused " Why?"

"Jus' do it!" Apple Jack screamed.

Twilight bowed her head as a light pink aura formed around her horn, slowly getting bigger when it finally blasted 'Rainbow' backwards. She opened her eyes and saw that lying on the floor before her, was I fact a Changling.

She gathered her power and simply said " Buckle up."

A bright light, and then silence. Everypony opened their eyes, only to see they were standing infront of The Tree Of Harmony. Something seemed odd and out of place.Twi trotted over her eyes immediately drawn to the Element Of Loyalty, her worst fears were confirmed. It had faded out. At that very moment it started falling and landed in the mud.

" What have I done!" She yelled as tears began to streak her face.

Everypony suddenly looked guilty as they realised the weight of the situation.

Meanwhile at Pony Ville Hospital, Rainbow got up and unconnected the life support and food monitor from herself. She shuffled around and went over to the door. Locked. ' There's gotta be a way out of here!' She thought. She turned over to the window "aha!" She found herself saying aloud. She quickly unbolted the lock and slid it open. ' Goodbye.' She thought as she slipped through the crack and out into the night sky.

Author's Note:

I have tried hard to improve my grammar and spelling. Hope this looks better. Annnnndd yeah I don't really have anything else to say except we have got 4 favourites. I mean for my first fic that's good right ?

Comments

[Mylittleponydarkside]

4450211 thanks for the feedback I'll get on it and no I'm not the comments I've deleted we're inappropriate and I don't want to have to rank the story to mature becuase of the comments

[Mylittleponydarkside]

4450937 yay finally someone with constructive criticism thanks I will go back check spelling, expand on matters and sort out the speaking problem. Oh and also the characters are ment to be a bit off the reason explained soon

[sunnybun]

4450346
My comment wasn't "innapropriate". If you lie to the people who are reading, this will cause more problems. I personally don't mind the storyline, but to put it bluntly, it was rushed, and the spelling and grammar were off. Way off. I think maybe if you got a proofreader, editor or prereader, a lot of these issues could be fixed, and also help you in the longrun to be a better author. This is a common problem. I bet you could come up with great story ideas, you just need to work on the spelling, capitalization, punctuation and grammar a bit more. The characters were also a bit OOC, and I don't know if there's anything you can do to fix this except perhaps study the character's personalities more?

I was just stating in my other comment that I personally didn't like the story because of the problems stated here, and I suppose I should've gone into more detail than before. Sorry if I came across as mean.

[wonderbolt mlp]

Awesome but sad still awesome