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So much for Mac being smart. I'm a bit surprised that they all slapped him, though that could be an issue with Applejack's status as unreliable narrator.
I'd wish we saw Big MacIntosh's nightmare, too. Would be nice to have a looksie at his issues.
And do I see hintcest there..?
lol, this story is so bizarre.
Continue, yes?
Oh, you know what could be fun? After somepony talked some sense into Big&Red, have him confront Twilight and Jifar and show some male warrior pride. Jifar would totally be into that I bet, and Twilight needs a serious push to understand Mac does not consider her beneath his interest. She also usually craves guidance and acknowledgement. Play up the "you're my herd, I'm the stallion, you're both mine" angle. You can have him apologise profusely later on (plus, we all know Twilight could turn him into a turnip if she so choose).
If he dominates them in the bedroom a lot of their problems might lessen. Jifar is bigger than he is, and Twilight was a sorceress prodigy even before her ascension, but I do think they would both like for him to take the reins—and it will give him some acknowledgement too.
Something I noticed over the course of my reading this story, which is quite fun by the way, is a series of minor errors.
for example, the apostrophe here is unrequired, and with the apostrophe is actually the wrong form of the word.
What a bunch of hags, slapping someone is wrong.