What lengths would you go to for the sake of fitting in? How far will you go to cover your past? These are questions I ask myself every day. But there's one question that will haunt me until death; Am I really the monster?
Oh god, I laughed when I saw he beat a pony... with another pony. Hulk reference? I think so! LOL...
Iron will and a super shoulder, what wilt happen two those too now? ^---That is what you did with a few sentences for example. you put the wrong words or you misspell them to a point where they have a new meaning. im not trying to be rude, but when your typing, look at what you write. Im not saying go back and reread it (though that helps), but it is better when the reader knows what you are trying to convey right away rather than having to guess what you are saying.
I look forward to the next chapter, and despite the errors, I doubt I will be disappointed unless you don't update this story for 2 months... good chapter by the way.
4330964 I always put in a break...when I write these in google docs. But when I transfer them, they get rid of the wall breaks. I'll go back and fix em
4330862 I can explain the word thingy. I write on an iPad. It has the bitchiest autocorrect I have ever used in my life. If I had a pre reader, this issue would be fixed.
Partnership with Iron Will, i cant wait to see whats coming next
Oh god, I laughed when I saw he beat a pony... with another pony. Hulk reference? I think so! LOL...
Iron will and a super shoulder, what wilt happen two those too now?
^---That is what you did with a few sentences for example. you put the wrong words or you misspell them to a point where they have a new meaning. im not trying to be rude, but when your typing, look at what you write. Im not saying go back and reread it (though that helps), but it is better when the reader knows what you are trying to convey right away rather than having to guess what you are saying.
I look forward to the next chapter, and despite the errors, I doubt I will be disappointed unless you don't update this story for 2 months...
good chapter by the way.
Might I suggest puting a line break in between paragraphs?
Wall of text syndrome tends to be unpleasant
4330964 I always put in a break...when I write these in google docs. But when I transfer them, they get rid of the wall breaks. I'll go back and fix em
4330862 I can explain the word thingy. I write on an iPad. It has the bitchiest autocorrect I have ever used in my life. If I had a pre reader, this issue would be fixed.
the Davy Crocket.
He has a nuke in his pocket?