Dash looks to be telling the truth. But at the same time Shy believes it is the other way around. I get the feeling that there was a few Pegasi, like the ones that picked on Shy and Dash in the show, who did stuff. The ponies on the ground start blaming everything that goes wrong on the Pegasi, and Shy believes that is true because she remembers how some Pegasi were cruel to her.
Yeah I understand that it may be a little confusing right now, basically there are two stories of what happened in the past, one told in Ponyvile's favour, meaning the pegasi were at fault for what happened (Fluttershy's version) and the other told in Cloudsdale's favour, meaning the ponies were at fault for what happened (Dash's version). Hopefully this clears a few things up for you. :)
And yes I am working on making the characters speech shorter.
Because there's not really any real drama in the story yet (at least that's how I see it), I may add that tag in if there turns out to be more drama in the futrue. :)
"Well years back when Cloudsdale first decided to come here to Ponyvile, in order to have some sort of base for us to always come back to, since Cloudsdale is still a traveling city, there were a lot of things that didn't go too well. For instance many of the pegasi from Cloudsdale would talk down to the ponies from Ponyvile and would discriminate (disparage) them in front of their faces many times. Some of the pegasi were nice and respected the ponies, myself being one, but it would seem, that the bad did outweigh the good quite a bit unfortunately," Fluttershy put a hoof up to her chin as she went back in her mind to think about how things were between the two towns before they were separated, remembering that many of the pegasi were already making enemies out of the ponies.
"There were an awful lot of times that many of the pegasi, one of them being Rainbow Dash, were accused of things like that, but there was never any proof of it, it's just that those so called 'misunderstandings' happened way too many times to simply just look past them, plus most of the stories that were apperantly (apparently) all just lies in the pegasi's eyes did make a lot of sense, and sounded true enough. But things like stealing food and all that wasn't the biggest problem that the ponies were worried about," by now Fluttershy had gotten the idea that Twilight had heard the story of what had happened between the two towns, but either she had gotten it a little mixed up, or the pony that had told her had gotten the story wrong in some ways.
"Hey you know I really can't thank you enough for what you did toady (today) Princess," Rainbow stated as she flew closer to Twilight and waved a hoof in front of her, smiling to her slightly as she was able to catch the other mare's attention.
'Stupid, stupid, stupid, I'm such an idiot,' Twilight cursed herself under her breath as she couldn't stop seeing that shocked look that Rainbow had had on her face after she had kissed her, feeling guilt overcome her as she sighed, before she picked up more speed and raced to her home, 'Why couldn't I control what I was doing? I should have caught myself before I even tried to do something like that, I just got so lost in those breathtaking eyes of her's, (no apostrophe) and the way the sun was shinning down on her fur, causing for her cyan fur and rainbow mane to shimmer brightly...no I shouldn't be thinking about her like that. Oh why, why did I kiss her? I haven't known her for that long, and I just left her without any kind of explanation or apology for what I did to her. What's wrong with me?'
A long silence fell on Golden Oak Library as Sipke (Spike) and Twilight now sat together at the small table they had in the middle of the library (which they used as a dining table for now). They had been eating a late lunch together for a while now, but Twilight hadn't really eaten anything, yes she was starving since she hadn't eaten anything since this morning, but her appetite was completely gone right now, as she just used her hoof to push her food around her plate, while she sighed deeply and rested her head on the table, feeling absolutely defeated by everything that had happened today, and the day wasn't even over yet.
Spike looked over to the Princess as he could clearly see that something was on her mind right now, wondering if maybe toady (today) hadn't gone to plan, maybe Rainbow Dash and her old friend weren't able to make up after all, and now she's probably feeling down, thinking that she may never get the two towns to put the past behind them and try to get along.
"Oh okay, how did toady (today) go? Was Rainbow able to make up with her old friend?" Spike asked knowing that that was what Twilight had planned for today, and guessing that it hadn't worked out the way she would have like it to, judging by how the Princess was acting right now.
"It went really well actually, Rainbow and Fluutershy (Fluttershy) were able to make amends," Twilight sat up straight now as she lifted her head up off of the table and tried to seem less depressed in order to not worry Spike.
"Yeah I guess," Twilight sighed as she thought about all that had gone on today, still not sure who's (whose) story she should believe, or how she should feel about what had happened while she was taking Rainbow Dash home eariler (earlier).
"who's" = who is "whose" is the possessive form
"Yes, but when I asked if she maybe got the story wrong or mixed up, she looked disappointed in me, thinking that I didn't believe what she had told me, I didn't want to get into a fight with her since we don't know each other very well, and arguing already wouldn't be good for the friendship we're slowly building right now, so I just left it and changed the subject," Twilight rested her head back onto the table as she finished all that she needed to say, in order for Spike to understand what had gone....(on)…. toady (today), which had caused her to seem so distracted since she came back home.
9703101 I'll just reply to this comment for all of your comments since you wrote quite a few. I appreciate you pointing out all of those writing errors as well as spelling mistakes that I made, as you can see I wrote this story a long time ago, and I don't really want to go back and fix all the mistakes it has since it would take WAY too long to do that. I have never been the best at spelling and back when I first wrote this story I was bad at proofreading, this was my first story on here just so you know. I also thank you for offering to be an editor for me, but I don't want an editor since I hardly ever write on here anymore, and I mostly just write for fun, so I don't really care for making my stories perfect and without any mistakes at all. So you see there just wouldn't be much point to me having an editor, plus I like to work on my stories alone.
Aside from all that thank you for reading these chapters, and I'm sorry for all the mitakes I made.
If your a sucker for drama, than why doesn't this story have a drama tag?
Dash looks to be telling the truth. But at the same time Shy believes it is the other way around. I get the feeling that there was a few Pegasi, like the ones that picked on Shy and Dash in the show, who did stuff. The ponies on the ground start blaming everything that goes wrong on the Pegasi, and Shy believes that is true because she remembers how some Pegasi were cruel to her.
YAY! MORE CHAPTERS!
This whole conflict is getting me confused.
The speeches of the characters are also really long. Maybe you should work a little bit more with full stops instead of commas.
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Yeah I understand that it may be a little confusing right now, basically there are two stories of what happened in the past, one told in Ponyvile's favour, meaning the pegasi were at fault for what happened (Fluttershy's version) and the other told in Cloudsdale's favour, meaning the ponies were at fault for what happened (Dash's version). Hopefully this clears a few things up for you. :)
And yes I am working on making the characters speech shorter.
KillerChainsaw ;)
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Because there's not really any real drama in the story yet (at least that's how I see it), I may add that tag in if there turns out to be more drama in the futrue. :)
KillerChainsaw ;)
Dang I'm all caught up. I was planning to read it all in one run once it's finished, but I snowballed chapters after reading the first one.
"who's" = who is
"whose" is the possessive form
9703101
I'll just reply to this comment for all of your comments since you wrote quite a few.
I appreciate you pointing out all of those writing errors as well as spelling mistakes that I made, as you can see I wrote this story a long time ago, and I don't really want to go back and fix all the mistakes it has since it would take WAY too long to do that. I have never been the best at spelling and back when I first wrote this story I was bad at proofreading, this was my first story on here just so you know.
I also thank you for offering to be an editor for me, but I don't want an editor since I hardly ever write on here anymore, and I mostly just write for fun, so I don't really care for making my stories perfect and without any mistakes at all. So you see there just wouldn't be much point to me having an editor, plus I like to work on my stories alone.
Aside from all that thank you for reading these chapters, and I'm sorry for all the mitakes I made.
Killerchainsaw ;)