Is it just me or did the whole romance develope kind of fast? Also, Rainbow is really direct and moving forward fast considering her feelings towards Twilight who is a princess. Kind of weird that this fact is disregarded that easily.

The offer at the end of the chapter is another weird thing. How about spending some time to get to know each other better instead of ... excessive kissing or whatever is happening? Oh, wait, there's a "Sex"-tag. Is this where the next chapter is going? Well, we'll find out sooner or later, right?

Somehow the whole conflict about the two towns has moved to the background now. Not that I want to complain. I like the Idea of Rainbow stealing Twilight and having her for herself in Cloudsdale which is autonomous.

Now a little observation:

"I've had one or two crushes in the past, on both mares and colts, but this was nothing like any of them, it all felt so different when I thought about you. I had always thought there was something that I kinda liked about you, and I couldn't really figure out what it was until you kissed me. It all made sense to me then, why I could relax around you so much, without having to keep my guard up all the time. Why I found it so much easier to find comfort in you then anypony else, why it made me happy just to see you smile, why I trusted you and agreed to let go of the past, and try again with the ponies of Ponyvile. Why I liked spending time with you so much, and why I couldn't bring myself to pull away when you kissed me." Rainbow now turned away slightly from Twilight, as her cheeks were stained with a light shade of pink,

Since Rainbow is speaking, I thought that this was intentional due to her grudge against Ponyville, or rather Pony-vile. Nice pun.
Sadly, Ponyville is spelled Ponyvile in all other instances as well, so it's a typo.

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It's supposed to develope fast, that's the point. They will of course get to know each other more as the story goes on, but for know they both want to know where they stand, friends or more? Rainbow's character is more direct in this story than in the show, she knows what love feels like, and she is simply accepting that, and embracing it. It's not disreguarded, you'll see what I mean by saying this in future chapters. ;)

I'm not giving anything away here, but let's just say that a little bit more than just kissing will be in the next chapter. I know they seem to be rushing into things awfully quick, but that's the whole point, this will become clear as more chapters come.

Yes the story is focusing more on the relationship of Twilight and Dash right now, but you will see more of the conflict mentoined more in the chapters to come. I like the sound of that idea as well.

I didn't even notice that there, I must have be spelling Ponyville wrong, and just didn't realize till now. I'm not all that good at making puns a lot of the time, so it's funny that I made this one unintentionally and you found it like this. XD

Thank you for commenting and giving me your feedback as always. :D

KillerChainsaw ;)

7301002 Well, I'm still following this story and I'm curious how things will work out.

i still fallow this story it is getting vary interesting now keep up a good work update more please

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Glad to hear it.

KilerChainsaw ;)

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Thank you, and I'm glad you're liking it, next chapter coming out this weekend.

KillerChainsaw ;)

I find it odd but entertaining that Twilight is sneaking around like a teenager with their first girl/boyfriend

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Well she never really has been in love before now, and also never thought she would end up doing so when coming to be the ruler of both Ponyville and Cloudsdale, so hiding it all seems to be something she prefers to do rather than getting other ponies involved at all.

Thank you for reading and commenting by the way.

Killerchainsaw ;)