Six Word Stories

by Dustin Lange

Rainbow Dash (Dustin Lange)

Author's Note:

"Loyal friends stay to the end."
Once again, Noble Thought helps me out with finding a better one.
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This one isn't as good as my other one, but I write for fun, so think what you wan't.

Rainbow Dash

Now that Rainbow thought about it, she led a fulfilling life. She joined the Wonderbolts and traveled around the world performing for ponies, griffins, zebras, and minotaurs alike.

She slowly moved her way up through the ranks of the Wonderbolts until she was captain, and she stayed there for fifteen years. Spitfire only made it twelve years as captain. Rainbow was very proud to be able to say she out lasted The Great Spitfire.

After every show, she would go out and meet her fans and sign autographs for them. At the time, she thought they were all her friends, something that might have been true at one time, but not anymore.

Once she retired, she stopped getting fan mail and the paparazzi slowly stopped chasing her, (Not like they could keep up with her anyways.) Eventually, her name was lost to other, younger Wonderbolts. Scootaloo, for example.

After all that time in the spotlight, she thought it would be nice to be able to have some time to herself for a change. She could finial do the really important things, like taking naps at two in the afternoon, or pranking ponies with Pinkie Pie again.

But all of those things were in the past now, and would never return.

Everypony needs to settle down at some point in their lives, it just took longer for Rainbow than most. And now that she was lying in a hospital bed, she was regretting ever settling down.

She was going to miss Pinkie's little snort she gave after pranking somepony. The one thing she was going to miss the most from Pinkie though, was her parties. Pinkie can throw one hell of a party.

She was going to miss her best cheering section she ever had, that section being Fluttershy.

After all of the competitions she had with Applejack, there was still no winner. No matter what they did, they would always tie. She would miss that as well.

Even though she hated standing still and dresses both with a burning passion, she would still miss the time spent with Rarity modeling for a new dress she was making. Those were relaxing times though, and relaxing was one thing Rainbow loved to do no matter what time of the day - or night it was.

Rainbow was even going to miss studying with Twilight. All of that studying helped her in her career as a Wonderbolt, and for that, she could never pay Twilight back what she felt she owed her.

Once here friends were in the room, she really started to realize how much she loved all of them, and how much she was going to miss them.

There was not a single dry eye in the room when Rainbow left them. But they all knew that she died the way she wanted to.

The last words Rainbow spoke before slipping into her eternal rest were, "Loyal friends stay to the end."

Comments

[Laughing Jack]

Please stahp it~
If you're gonna give me feels, then please provide a way to dry my tears

[Dustin Lange]

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Sorry, I just write what the six words tell me...

[Strythio]

Deceptive. The words at first suggested that this would be Dash swooping in and saving the day, but you took it in a very different direction.

Kind of felt my heart sink a little at the end there. it is emotional, though I think you could have whacked the audience a little harder if you would have included some expression and/or dialogue from the other Mane Six.

[Dustin Lange]

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For the Twilight one, I wanted to write something that made the reader think about what might have happened. Not sure if it helped or hindered it.
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As I was writing the Twilight one, I was thinking to myself, "These words don't really fit the story." so Noble Thought let me use the one he made.
As for the part of your comment, I also wan't to know who it was.
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This one was rather hard for me to write, and I wanted to start on a different one and see if I could get an idea on how to improve on it; so far, nothing.

[Strythio]

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You definitely made the reader want to know what happened. No worries there.

I suggest, once again, that you include some dialogue from the Mane Six, and some of their expressions. I mean, no doubt that if Dash is in retirement and had a full live, surely they have too. I don't mind the silent treatment if that is a must, but at least let Dash tell us what they look like, or if they're mourning already.

[Dustin Lange]

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I will probably go through and try to add to it once I write another one.