You have my attention. I'll be watching this. Some excellent world building going on here.

Very interesting. The tenses of the sentences are sometimes hard to follow, but overall this chapter is pretty good. However, when Celestia was wondering what Nightmare Moon gained from her attack, you wrote Appleloosa instead of Dodge Junction.

"She wouldn't attack Canterlot."

Mmm Yes Yes she would~!

The Sure fire way to get attacked, Say it won't happen!

Good story so far! We are gonna be watching this!

4086733 Thank you for spotting that! I'll fix it right away.

Despite the odd premise (pirates wtf) this looks extremely promising.

The Dread Pirate Nightmare Moon, eh?
Well, I guess no one would surrender to the Dread Pirate Luna...

I FUCKING LOVE THIS CONCEPT!
C'mere, so I can kiss you!

Pirates + Moonlight... gotta track this one!

Hm, Moonlight, is it? And so far not a Tragedy tag, only Sad? I am intrigued.

You have a big problem with walls of text. Consider hiring an editor and excising a few of those. Few minor errors too, but an editor should fix those as well.

To be honest, the execution is so rough thar I couldn’t get into this. But it's a nice idea for a fic nonetheless, one that I've puzzled over a lot myself.

4090441 Yes, I do need an editor, but every time I would contact someone for help I would not get a reply. It's extremely frustrating because I've contacted dozens of people who said they were available to be only be met with silence. I self-edited to the best of my ability, but of course things slipped through the cracks. Thank you for the honesty, though.

Hopefully, I will get an editor soon and get this fixed all nice and pretty.

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If you hadn't already, check out the Overly Extensive Editors group. Never used them myself, but lots of respectable authors praise them for being thorough and honest.

4091302 Okay, I'll go check them out. Thanks!

My attention has been quite thoroughly caught.

When is the next chapter