Very good sir. i try to aviod most FO:E sidefics because a lot fo them end up bieng quite bad. But this one is quite good. Other than horizons and pink eyes, yours is anather quality one i have found. Have a like.
There are some homonym problems, such as using "you're" for "your," "its" for "it's," and "then" for "than." And there's some tense switching in the prologue, which doesn't make sense unless there's some temporal screwup. But other than that this was a pretty engaging piece, and the humor with the speaker was actually funny. Keep it up.
Well... This is already something I've read a hundred times over regarding the Fallout Equestria fandom...
...But on the bright side: You have a wonderful selection of vocabulary and oh and I PRAISE that you actually have correct grammar.
good vocabulary and grammar, but cmon another Fallout: Equestria spin-off?
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Very good sir. i try to aviod most FO:E sidefics because a lot fo them end up bieng quite bad. But this one is quite good. Other than horizons and pink eyes, yours is anather quality one i have found. Have a like.
There are some homonym problems, such as using "you're" for "your," "its" for "it's," and "then" for "than." And there's some tense switching in the prologue, which doesn't make sense unless there's some temporal screwup. But other than that this was a pretty engaging piece, and the humor with the speaker was actually funny. Keep it up.