Fallout Equestria: Amnesia

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Distrance

Distrance #1 · Mar 26th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 (Revised) ·

Well... This is already something I've read a hundred times over regarding the Fallout Equestria fandom...

...But on the bright side: You have a wonderful selection of vocabulary and oh and I PRAISE that you actually have correct grammar.

Hungrybear

Hungrybear #2 · Mar 26th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 (Revised) ·

good vocabulary and grammar, but cmon another Fallout: Equestria spin-off?

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Noakwolf

Noakwolf #3 · Mar 26th, 2012 · · · Prologue (Revised) ·

Weeeeeeelcome aboard! I know your already in the group so let me just say welcome because I didn't notice that sooner.

Sorren

Sorren #4 · Mar 26th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 (Revised) ·

Very good sir. i try to aviod most FO:E sidefics because a lot fo them end up bieng quite bad. But this one is quite good. Other than horizons and pink eyes, yours is anather quality one i have found. Have a like.

SugarPesticide

SugarPesticide #5 · Mar 26th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 (Revised) ·

There are some homonym problems, such as using "you're" for "your," "its" for "it's," and "then" for "than." And there's some tense switching in the prologue, which doesn't make sense unless there's some temporal screwup. But other than that this was a pretty engaging piece, and the humor with the speaker was actually funny. Keep it up.

TacoTown