Ok, now I see improvement. Nice work. I hope he chooses Luna. Aurora is a bitch and a whore and a slut! I can't believe Shadow even tapped that cum bucket again!
4763209 I appreciate the criticism and see your points, I'll do my best to make a more in depth feel in the serious moments. I'm glad you like the story n offered help, my buddy is a much better writer but refuses to mess with anything clop. We'll both be pushing out a new series of stories after I finish this one
Yet, another unexpected twist.
4754466 Many more to come :3
I just love the way NMM bucks with shadow
This story is awesome and I love it completely. Keep writing
Ok, now I see improvement. Nice work. I hope he chooses Luna. Aurora is a bitch and a whore and a slut! I can't believe Shadow even tapped that cum bucket again!
4763209 I appreciate the criticism and see your points, I'll do my best to make a more in depth feel in the serious moments. I'm glad you like the story n offered help, my buddy is a much better writer but refuses to mess with anything clop. We'll both be pushing out a new series of stories after I finish this one