Update Note:
Fix: Grammars (Don't expect me to do a perfect job at this)
Added tons of dialogs/expressions
Added connection to ep.2
Added more actions and foal play that does not appeared in non-edit version.
“Mommyyyyyyyy!!”
Button’s mom rushing into her son’s room… with a worry looks on her face.
Button’s room is painted with cloud wallpaper. Inside the room is filled with toys, a TV, a game console and a PC.
“What’s wrong button, did you hurt yourself?” she spotted her little colt sitting on his bed, with a huge wet spot on his sheet and blanket.
“It’s not my fault mom, it’s just… just……” button try to hold his tears back.
Button’s mom gallops close to her son and gives him a warm motherly hug and pats his back softly.
“Its ok button… accidents do happen from times to times. And especially colts at your age do have a similar problem. You don’t have anything to be ashamed of my son”. Button’s mom calms her son with her soothing voice.
Button burry his head into his mother’s mane, it really help him feel the comfort he needed.
“Mommy… you are not mad at me are you?”
No…. not at all my dear son. I am not mad even a tiny bit.
She starts to tickle Button mash’s body, making him laugh uncontrollably.
*Burst out laughing and start rolling around in bed* “Mommy stops it, please…”
“I love seeing my little colt smile and happy” She let out a little giggles.
Button smile at his mommy happily, trying to catch his breath.
“Now that you are happy, I have a question for you. Have you been drinking energy drinks to keep you up all night again? Be honest with me okay?”
Button face turns bright as he shyly nodded softly.
“Well, those drink are bad for you dear… it’s not meant for a little colt like you”.
Hearing the word ‘little colt’ button standup on his bed and say “I am a big colt mommy; I even rank up to gold in League of Equestria”. Button trying to play it cools in front of his mommy.
However all button’s mom sees is a foal pretending to be a big colt in her sight. Button’s mom then stand up and patted his head softly making a cooing sound.
“Well I don’t see any big colt still wet his bed and liking to use foal bottle at night”.
Button face turns red like a tomato. He sits down on his soaked bed and curl up into a little ball. His mother then shoves him up and cradles him within her hooves rocking him gently.
“It’s ok button mash, you will always be my little foal.
“It’s not wrong right mommy? To like using a foal bottle at my age, it’s just so comforting… it help me sleep mommy. “
His mommy lightly nodded giving him an approving look.
“Button… from now on your milky bottle is only to be used to put in milk not energy drink. It’s really smelly when I wash it. So don’t drink energy drink from your milky bottle okay?”
Button nodded and say “Okay mommy”.
“Good” she then gives a soft pat on button’s head, lifting him off the bed and put him on the floor. “You go take a bath honey, while I clean up the sheet.”
Button hug his mommy’s leg, he don’t want to part with her. Button’s feeling insecure after wetting accident and he's reminded that he likes using foal bottle makes him feel even more foalish.
“Its okay honey, I know exactly how you feel button, but mommy have to wash the sheet. Can’t have you go to bed with a wet sheet. *button’s mom let out a small giggles* How about I give you a special treat today? I will give you a bath, how’s that sound?
*Button nodded his head and blush* “Mommy but I am a big colt… I can take a bath by myself?”
*Mommy gives button a wink* It’s super effective!
“So go and mix up the warm water in the bath tub okay? There’s a bubble bath powder in the cupboard too. I will be there soon okay?” She smiles like an angel as she ran her hoof on her son’s back comforting him.
“Mommy comes as soon as you are done okay?” Button let go of his mom’s leg and ran off to the bathroom.
Button’s mom let out a sigh, speaking to herself when button left the room. “When I look at my little angel, he really resembles me when I was a little filly.
I was once a bed wetter too, I guess it run in the family. I missed the time when I played with my plushie, old 8 bit video games and I especially miss to wear diaper again…. it’s so soft and…. and……..” Not realizing that she have been blushing these whole time.
She shook her head. “Ahem… well I better put the sheet and blanket into the washing machine.” She speaks to herself as she gallops off to wash the sheet.
Button’s playing with his game colt 3DS, as he waits for the water to fill the tub. He’s curious what is in the bathroom cupboard since it has been awhile he opened it.
Button put down his game colt and opens the bathroom cupboard. At his first sight, he sees nothing special and out of ordinary; toilet papers, tooth brush, a soap and a shampoo.
But what caught his attention is a foal powder, foal oil and diaper rash cream… It makes his eyes goes wide. Button’s curious so he picks it up and examines it closely. On these foal products, they all have logo of a foal being held in his/her mommy hooves.
When he sees it, he really wants his mommy… but he tries to put it aside for the time being. As he checked the foal items he found out that, it is rarely used… and the content inside each bottle are still nearly full. Why do we still keep these foal supplies around? He thought to himself.
He looks around the cupboard a bit more and found a bubble bath his mommy mentioned. He happily picks it up and gallops to the bath tub filling it in. The bubbles start to form and fill the tub. He put foal supplies back into the cupboard, and patiently waits till his mommy enters the bathroom, with a slight red cheeks on her face
“Mommy, why are you blushing? Your cheeks look a bit red” Button’s mom covers her face with her hooves to hide her embarrassment.
“Am I? Maybe it’s because I haven’t bath you for a long while, silly colt.”
Button is now the one who is blushing and trying to hide his private part.
Button’s mom bends down and moves his hooves away. “It’s okay dear, don’t be afraid. I have seen your little one for many years now. I still remember changing your messy diaper, like it was yesterday.” Button’s mom let out a *giggles*.
Button trying to argue and pout a bit but he knows that his mommy’s right.
Button’s mom then lift button up and put him in a nice warm bubbles bath as she started to wash him with a soft sponge.
Button is in bliss… he playfully blows the bubbles to his mommy.
Button’s mom then playfully shapes bubbles into a mustache on button’s face.
Button feels so relax in his mother embrace. As he was relaxing… he accidentally let go of his bladder. Button just closes his eyes, nothing he can do other than letting it all out. He just hopes his mother didn’t notice another one of his accident.
“How is the bath sweety?”
Button snap out of his trance and answer “It’s very nice mommy, can we do this…. like once a week?
“Sure things sweetheart” she replied
Button’s mom helps her little colt out of the tub and wraps a fluffy warm towel around him drying him off.
“What would you like to have for a dinner today dear?”
“Pizza mommy pizza pleasseeeee!” button gave his mommy a puppy eyes.
“But we just ate that yesterday.” She rolled her eyes and says “Ugh okay I can’t resist that looks of yours”
Button’s mom ordered ‘Canterlot Pizza’. During the dinner Button told his mommy about how he really enjoys the bath. He then went up to his room to play Bat Stallion Origin on his console.
It’s almost 10.00pm his mommy knocks on the door.
“Button dear, it’s time for bed.” She then proceed to open the door slowly seeing button’s still playing on his ‘game colt’ 3DS.
Button reply back “Mommy but my Laphas’s nearly lv58. Can I…”
“Bed now Button, you need your sleep… it’s for your own good dear.”
“Okay mommy” he switched off his 3DS. And climb on his bed.
“I have been out to M-mart while you are playing your video games. I got you this.” Button’s mom pulled out a blue packaging of pull up size 5 for foal. “
Button eyes went wide to what have been placed next to him on his bed. He started to shiver a bit, not in fear but more like he’s excited to see it again.” He tried to hide his desire and speak up.
“Do I really have to mommy?” Button poke a package of pull up, it feel soft and gives off a plastic crinkle sound.
“I think you will fit just fine, beside I think you will look really cute in it. I am sorry to make you wear pull up button. Tomorrow, I have to get up early to meet my friend ‘Twilight Sparkle’. She’s always wakes up way too early and she’s really strict on her schedules. Can you wear this for a night button?
“I guess…. *his eyes get a bit watery* I don’t want to cause more trouble for you to wash those sheet and blanket. Sorry mommy.
*Slowly gallop to button and pull him close to her chest.* “There is nothing to be sorry about my sweet heart, now just lie down for me so I can put the pull up on for you.”
Button lied down on his bed, his face turned red in embarrassments.
Button’s mom rip the package open, as she pulls out a blue teddies printed pull up and slid it on making sure button’s tail snug. She checked the leak guard of the pull up just to be sure.
Button just laid there in silence, he patted the front of his new garment. The pull up feels soft and snug. Button let out a small smile and asks his mommy.
“Mommy… can I have my milky bottle?” Button’s mom opens her pouch and pulls out a foal bottle full of milk and gives it to button.
“Thank you mommy you are the best”. Button lie down on his back and suckle down his milky. His mother then gallops up to him and gives him a big cuddle.
They stayed in a cuddle around 5 minutes.
“Have a sweet dream honey I will see you tomorrow then” Button’s mom then kiss button mash on the fore head, and gallops to switch off the light.
“Good night mommy” he says before drifting off to his dream land in his new teddies pull up and a foal bottle in his mouth.
Obvious trollfic is obvious. -1
Hello Admin.
I read this on a Livestream to make fun of it. We all had a good time. So thanks for writing such a bad story.
Haha.
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I'm pretty sure he's at least ten-twelve. But at least flutters has a friend...or two? Hmmm...
While this does sound intrguing you need to polish this quite a bit. Pick an editor, or proofread since there's a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes. The introduction probably should be included further up. And the premise could do with some editing, seeing as the story's there, but it's kind of rushed.
It's intresting for a padded Button Mash fic, considering he could potentially wear them for those late night gaming sessions, plus he's at the age where bed wetting is common. But it's not what it could be.
This is a pretty good story, the grammar and the like could use some touching up
I like the idea of Button and his mom in this kind of a situation...
But this fic doesn't do it well at all. Too many grammar mistakes, rather quick, and just a really awkward story.
Um... quick question and I hope it doesn't offend, but- what the fuck? Reading is extremely cumbersome and at bath time it tends to get more sexual than it should.
Needs quite a bit more polish.
The basic story was good, but the execution wasn't.
It was rough to read, but it has a certain charm to it. Needs to be polished some, but, it is a good idea.
sorry, waste of time you should of got and expert. on read better story. thumb down.
Dear readers,
Thank you for your feed back, I will try to improve and extend episode 2 to be better than my first ep. I know I might not be able to reach the standard of many stories posted here. But please be generous with me, my english is my second language. I really put efforts in to writting my story. And as you know this might lean a bit on to adult baby side of things.
I will try to work towards all the comments I have received.
See you soon my beloved readers,
Fearzop.
I really don't know what to make of this. At least he seems to know he's far from good.
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Very rough dialogue and prose but the idea is quite interesting.
I suggest getting an editor.
The Good: The concept: You do not know how long I have waited for a adult foal button mash story. The seed of buttons mom's cutie Mark was set, but no-one did anything with it, and it's nice to see someone do something with it.
The Bad: The spelling/grammar: (This is going to hurt a bit)
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The grammar and pacing felt awkward, strangely put, and overall hard to navigate through. Also the reader was having to struggle to understand some big plot points.
The first big one: why does button mash still need a bottle? Why does he still have a bottle? When did he get the bottle? None of this is explained, and for all we know he got it from the tooth fairy.
This however can be savaged.
The Fixable: My advise on how to make a smoother, more polished story is three simple steps.
1. Copy and paste this in a word document, or any document that has spell check, and can spot punctuation errors. Run it through and clean up what it tells you.
2. Read your story OUT LOUD to yourself. If your read the story, and a sentence sounds weird when it is spoken, chances are it sounds weird to read. Edit anything that sounds weird.
3. GET AN EDITOR!!!!!!!!!! Another pair of eyes looking over a paper can catch mistakes that you might have missed.
Once all of that is done post it on here and you are more than likely going to get a better response to your stories.
One more thing, unless buttons mom is going to be diapers, take her out of the cover, there is another perfectly usable button mash diaper picture that can be used.
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Thank you for your guide on writting and improving the fiction spacecardswell. I am considering to edit my first episode before posting ep.2. I wrote this story on microsoft word. I understand that currently the fic is not polish, and I will fix this.
3780002 thank you for putting the effort to fix your story, I hope to see it better soon.
Well the rewritten chapter is an improvement. There are still some mistakes you could correct, and it wouldn't hurt to at least pick up a prereader to point out some of the more noticeable mistakes. But it's better then how it was to begin with. Hopefully you can continue to improve.
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3778588 fearzop, you really should listen to SuperPinkBrony.... He knows what he is talking about (excuse me if I misunderstood your gender SPB12) this is a good story, shows good ideals.... But needs a but of work, because I read through it, 3 entire times before I understood placement of everything..... Its confusing when nothing is formatted right.... Otherwise great story ideas..
3780002 I did suspect English wasn't your first language. The premise is good but the errors spoil this fic. I'd suggest working on your English generally. Also, don't write in that way where you put actions in asterisks instead of actually writing them out fully- it gets close to writing like a script, which FimFic doesn't allow.
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Hi Penjacker, I really appreciate your feed back. That I can work on directly, I will keep your comment in mind when I write episode 2. I will try to write the actions out fully this time so it's not like a script (I am not trying to write a script, but there are lots of dialog going on.) I know it's a long road for me to be a good writer but I have to try right?
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Hello DGGAMES, thank you for your feed back too! I understand that, it maybe hard for many readers to understand me. I apologize for that. I am trying my best too on my side. I will try to improve my ep.2 to be better, and I hope you will read it only once this time haha. I also got an editor now too. And my gender is Male and I am straight.
3847451 oh I was talking to SuperPinkBrony on if I screwed up his/her gender ;)
The writing isent very good but very cute
Please keep writing!
Dear, Fellow readers
Here are some updates on ep.2
Well firstly, I'm sorry it has been quite a awhile for ep.2. I'm still writting it but it has been put on hold for the moment due to stressty time at work ( Too much work 10 hour a day).
But it's coming! I promise
Ep.2 is going to be awesome! Exploring more into how Button's mom actually got her cutie mark! (Not gonna spoil it )
So stick around for better grammar, better stories, cooey, cuddly and warming plot.
In Mommy’s cutie mark.
3925113 i cant wait be read it ^^
I wanted to read a male padded pony story and then I saw this.
I just want you to know I was not disappoint.
Ill pull the story, edit it, then send ya a message with the edited version. Ill be using microsoft word and the comment tool. Unless you want me to just go ahead and edit it. And in that case, I can stay as close to the original as possible, only changing typos and what not, or I can rewrite some parts, as needed, so it can flow a bit better.
3967379 one day you will simply walk past a fez
adorable, although I’ve never had been akin to button mash, but its still good nonetheless