Bravo, very nice chapter. I kind of feel that the ending, where Applejack wakes up, could have had a bit more to it than just two paragraphs though. Like, herself slowly coming to and her mind having to figure out what had just happened -- and as she puts the pieces together, she would have a bit of denial until it sunk in with her engorged, impregnated belly.
It may just be me, but I see Applejack as far 'prouder' than anypony else. So, I guess I just kind of see her as having a much more pronounced reaction when she woke up.
Likewise I look forward to seeing what will happen -- when those "apple-sized" eggs hatch and reveal what sex-based reproducing monster comes out in a baker's dozen. In a way, this kind of reminds me of the Alien series with the Xenomorphs; in fact, there's something of an idea. Facehugger-like creatures that cling to one of their victims "entrances" in a vice grip and implant their egg -- just, without the fatal chest bursting. Just an idea to ponder.
I still liked this a great deal though. And I await the next chapter.
3957559 Yeah, I may expand upon the ending later today. When I put the chapter up it was almost 3am and I was tired. My thought process on it was that she was still a little out of it and her main concern was getting away. Like I said I may add on to it a bit.
As for the Xenomorphs idea. Its passed my mind and in fact in AVP 2 when the hybrid was in the maternity ward and caught the pregnant lady and started shoving eggs down her throat was the moment I fell in love with ovi. I may incorporate it into the next chapter, but (and excuse the ridiculousness of this statement) the physics of it likely won't work. There is still a good amount of story to cover so I should be able to work something in there.
3956053 Sorry to say, but I didn't really have a plan to have Changlings in this story . Though I do love the Changeling x pony egg impregnation theme. (may do that in another story) As for the sentient slime ponies...you'll just have to wait and see
3957952 Understandable. Truth be told I do prefer more consensual scenarios, but the issue here is that while the slimes are sentient and able to, on a basic level, communicate with the characters, the tree is not and therefore does what it needs. Is it still rape? Yes. Is it still terrible? Most certainly, but most tentacle monsters aren't known for their manners. With the slimes I can give a more positive spin on the idea. Showing that there is good where there is mostly bad.
3958007 Yeah, I'm not blaming you for the tentacle monster not asking for consent... just more voicing my own opinion. I usually stay away from tentacle stories mostly because of their almost 100% non-consensual nature. I gave this one a look and actually enjoyed the idea of the slimes requiring consent and so I continued with it. The plant rape kinda came out of left-field for me since I was expecting the slimes to be the focus, I guess.
P.S. Thanks, it still weirds me out when people recognize me.
3958019 Nice to know that it still draws the attention of those who normally don't read such material. I may go back and edit the chapter names or add an author's note saying what kind of monsters to expect.
You are missing commas in a handful of places. A general rule is to 1. put a comma before independent clauses (if there is anything in front) 2. put commas before and after parenthetical elements.
Here is one example, but there's many more you gotta fix.
The two slimes she had just practically birthed crawled up beside her one of them nuzzling her cheek
"one of them nuzzling her cheek" is an absolute phrase, and thus it is a parenthetical element, and thus you need to seperate it with commas.
I love how the slimes take after each mare that created them, I m actually more interested in the slimes than the tenties, but that is because I thought this story was all about just the slimes. but I love them ALL non the less~
3959913 While the slimes are a significant portion of the story I wanted to include some other creatures such as the tree monster. I will be including other creatures in upcoming chapters with some, like the tree, making repeat appearances.
As for the slimes conversing with their host, I felt that it would be good to give them some personality. Most fics have the monster breed with the host, but I wanted to have the slimes seem more docile and caring toward their hosts showing that they were more than just procreation driven mindless creatures.
Why are there even delays? You've posted the chapters before, it shouldn't take this long to just post them again. Even if you had to retype it, you already know exactly what happens. I used to like this story, but what you are doing seems a bit shady.
8278734 I assure you that nothing intentionally shady is occurring. Within the past several months I was diagnosed with ADD, one unfortunate symptom of which is a tendency to leave projects unfinished, even ones I had a great interest in. I'm sorry that I have been unable to keep my promises as far as the release of the content, but once again I assure you it was by no means intentional. As you may now notice the remainder of the chapters have been added. But to save myself prolonged future heart ache I will be labeling the story as cancelled as it would be unfair to keep teasing new content and not delivering. Once again I am sorry that it has come to this.
AWESOME
Crazy good plant/tentacle sex there. I liked Applejack's scene much more than the slimes.
3954833 Glad you liked it.
I'm gonna have to ay I'm more inclined towards the slimes than the tentacles, but good work nonetheless.
Bravo, very nice chapter. I kind of feel that the ending, where Applejack wakes up, could have had a bit more to it than just two paragraphs though. Like, herself slowly coming to and her mind having to figure out what had just happened -- and as she puts the pieces together, she would have a bit of denial until it sunk in with her engorged, impregnated belly.
It may just be me, but I see Applejack as far 'prouder' than anypony else. So, I guess I just kind of see her as having a much more pronounced reaction when she woke up.
Likewise I look forward to seeing what will happen -- when those "apple-sized" eggs hatch and reveal what sex-based reproducing monster comes out in a baker's dozen. In a way, this kind of reminds me of the Alien series with the Xenomorphs; in fact, there's something of an idea. Facehugger-like creatures that cling to one of their victims "entrances" in a vice grip and implant their egg -- just, without the fatal chest bursting. Just an idea to ponder.
I still liked this a great deal though. And I await the next chapter.
3957559 Yeah, I may expand upon the ending later today. When I put the chapter up it was almost 3am and I was tired. My thought process on it was that she was still a little out of it and her main concern was getting away. Like I said I may add on to it a bit.
As for the Xenomorphs idea. Its passed my mind and in fact in AVP 2 when the hybrid was in the maternity ward and caught the pregnant lady and started shoving eggs down her throat was the moment I fell in love with ovi. I may incorporate it into the next chapter, but (and excuse the ridiculousness of this statement) the physics of it likely won't work. There is still a good amount of story to cover so I should be able to work something in there.
3956053 Sorry to say, but I didn't really have a plan to have Changlings in this story . Though I do love the Changeling x pony egg impregnation theme. (may do that in another story) As for the sentient slime ponies...you'll just have to wait and see
I was okay with the consensual sex, not so cool on the plant rape.
3957952 Understandable. Truth be told I do prefer more consensual scenarios, but the issue here is that while the slimes are sentient and able to, on a basic level, communicate with the characters, the tree is not and therefore does what it needs. Is it still rape? Yes. Is it still terrible? Most certainly, but most tentacle monsters aren't known for their manners. With the slimes I can give a more positive spin on the idea. Showing that there is good where there is mostly bad.
P.S. - Love Xenophilia by the way.
3958007
Yeah, I'm not blaming you for the tentacle monster not asking for consent... just more voicing my own opinion. I usually stay away from tentacle stories mostly because of their almost 100% non-consensual nature. I gave this one a look and actually enjoyed the idea of the slimes requiring consent and so I continued with it. The plant rape kinda came out of left-field for me since I was expecting the slimes to be the focus, I guess.
P.S. Thanks, it still weirds me out when people recognize me.
3958019 Nice to know that it still draws the attention of those who normally don't read such material. I may go back and edit the chapter names or add an author's note saying what kind of monsters to expect.
3958049
Even just a quick warning before the scene would be good for those of us not interested in the rapier parts.
You are missing commas in a handful of places. A general rule is to
1. put a comma before independent clauses (if there is anything in front)
2. put commas before and after parenthetical elements.
Here is one example, but there's many more you gotta fix.
"one of them nuzzling her cheek" is an absolute phrase, and thus it is a parenthetical element, and thus you need to seperate it with commas.
My userpage has a short explanation that'll help.
I love how the slimes take after each mare that created them, I m actually more interested in the slimes than the tenties, but that is because I thought this story was all about just the slimes. but I love them ALL non the less~
3959913 While the slimes are a significant portion of the story I wanted to include some other creatures such as the tree monster. I will be including other creatures in upcoming chapters with some, like the tree, making repeat appearances.
As for the slimes conversing with their host, I felt that it would be good to give them some personality. Most fics have the monster breed with the host, but I wanted to have the slimes seem more docile and caring toward their hosts showing that they were more than just procreation driven mindless creatures.
3960377 I love the idea!!
Tis' gut.
Anything else to be said?
This is my favorite chapter yet
3965312 More cumming soon!
Excellent work! It just like my dream fiction came true.
3974432 I'm glad I could deliver!
Fuckin' love it! Thank you.
3978342 Thank you for letting me know you liked it. :)
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Patience my friend. More will be coming soon.
very nice story
Update?
4242801 Im working on the update now. Expect chapter 4 our sometime this weekend.
4242898 so, what happened to the update?
4315022 I will be finished with the editing, and have it posted within the next 2 hours.
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i'm so excited...!
to clench down around the with even more force
1. Them.
Two more fetishes added. This pleases me greatly
I enjoy reading this, but I was not expecting full anal exploration and impregnation in such a way.
8106191 Thank you so much. i really cant wait for the rest of it to be put back up. It is my favorite!
I'm sorry to keep asking but when will the rest be put out again?
Why are there even delays? You've posted the chapters before, it shouldn't take this long to just post them again. Even if you had to retype it, you already know exactly what happens. I used to like this story, but what you are doing seems a bit shady.
8278734
I assure you that nothing intentionally shady is occurring. Within the past several months I was diagnosed with ADD, one unfortunate symptom of which is a tendency to leave projects unfinished, even ones I had a great interest in. I'm sorry that I have been unable to keep my promises as far as the release of the content, but once again I assure you it was by no means intentional. As you may now notice the remainder of the chapters have been added. But to save myself prolonged future heart ache I will be labeling the story as cancelled as it would be unfair to keep teasing new content and not delivering. Once again I am sorry that it has come to this.