"This has to be some kind of mistake. I mean, I can't be pregnant", said Nyx
"Im sorry Nyx, but test results don't lie", said Nurse Redheart
Nyx walked out of the office and into the reception area where her friends were waiting for her.
"So what did the doctor say?", asked Twist
"She said that Im…Im…pregnant", said Nyx with tears in her eyes
"C'mon we have to call your parents", said Applebloom
"I can't", said Nyx
"C'mon, you have to tell them at some point", said Scootaloo
"But they'll think less of me", cried Nyx
"Nyx, they're your parents. They'll never think that", said Sweetie Belle
"Ok, but just let me tell Shady first. Then I'll tell my parents", said Nyx
Nyx left the hospital and went to Shady's house. She knocked on the door, and Shady opened it with a smile.
"Hey babe", said Shady
"Shady, I need to talk to you", said Nyx
"What is it?", asked Shady
"Im pregnant, your the father. But at least you'll be there for me when the foal's born right?", asked Nyx
"Ooo yeah about that…Im gonna have to let you go", said Shady
"Your breaking up with me when I need you most?", asked Nyx
"Yeah. You didn't think that I actually love you right? I just made a bet with my friends to see if I can get into bed with Nightmare Moon", said Nyx
"But Im not-", said Nyx
"Face it Nyx, your a freak. And no guy would ever like you. Seeya", said Shady
He closed the door, and Nyx sat there crying. When she got home, she saw her family and friends.
"Mom, Dad, what are you doing here? Your not suppose to be back until tomorrow", asked Nyx
"We called them", said Twist
"Girls what the hay?!", said Nyx
"Sorry Nyx, but you need your parents", said Applebloom
"Whats wrong honey?", asked Twilight
"Im…pregnant", confessed Nyx
Everypony fell silent for a second.
"YAY NYXIE'S HAVING A BABY", cheered Misty
"No Misty that's bad", explained Twilight
"But I thought that when someone has a foal it's a good thing", said Misty
"It is, but in Nyx's case it's…OH YOUR TOO YOUNG TO HAVE THESE CONVERSATIONS. Flash, take her to her room", said Twilight
Flash took Misty to her room, and Nyx started to cry.
"Nyx whats wrong?", asked Twilight
"When I told Shady he…he broke up with me", cried Nyx
"WHAT?!", yelled everypony
"Yeah, he said that he only dated me to win a bet with his friends. He called me a freak, and he said that no guy would ever like me", cried Nyx
"THAT JERK! WHEN I GET MY HANDS ON HIM, IM GONNA-", yelled Scootaloo
"Hold on there Scoots. We have to be here for Nyx when the foal is born", said Sweetie Belle
"Your right", said Scootaloo
Then they all hugged Nyx. Twilight told her friends about Nyx's pregnancy and they were shocked. Meanwhile, Shady was at his house playing video games. Then a blue unicorn mare with a purple mane and flower cutie mark shows up. It was Shady's cousin "Tootsie Flute".
"Hey did you hear that your marefriend is pregnant?", asked Tootsie
"She's not my marefriend anymore", said Shady
"WHAT? YOU DUMPED NYX WHEN SHE'S PREGNANT WITH YOUR FOAL?!", asked Tootsie
"Yeah. So?", said Shady
"So?! YOUR GONNA BE A FATHER!", yelled Tootsie
"Not my problem", said Shady
"IT IS YOUR PROBLEM?!", yelled Tootsie
"Then why don't you go help Nyx", said Shady
"FINE! Maybe I will", said Tootsie walking away
Tootsie walked to the library and knocked on the door.
"Hello?", said Nyx
"Your Nyx right?", asked Tootsie
"Yeah", replied Nyx
"Im Tootsie Flute, Shady's cousin. And I feel bad about how my idiot brother treated you. So I was wondering if I can you with the foal", said Tootsie
"That would be great", said Nyx with a smile
So Nyx made a new friend who is also her foals future second cousin.
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sorry
Shady dumped Nyx. Time to get my swords.
Also...hands?
3644537 Tell that to the other stories that I have seen countless times and still have it up. Also I forgot about that 1k less words rule.
man how mean but im sure nyx will find the right guy there are tons of stallions out there
Okay..... I just can't keep reading this, the grammar mistakes are so bad. I suggest you get an editor..
3648256 lol when were there a lot of stallions?
"Im pregnant, your the father. But at least you'll be there for me when the foal's born right?", asked Nyx
"Ooo yeah about that…Im gonna have to let you go", said Shady
"Your breaking up with me when I need you most?", asked Nyx
"Yeah. You didn't think that I actually love you right? I just made a bet with my friends to see if I can get into bed with Nightmare Moon", said Nyx
"But Im not-", said Nyx
"Face it Nyx, your a freak. And no guy would ever like you. Seeya", said Shady
He closed the door, and Nyx sat there crying. When she got home, she saw her family and friends.
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Shady's cousin. And I feel bad about how my idiot brother
Cousin-offspring of your parents sister/brother
Brother-has the same parents as you
I don't see how you are able to get these confused.
6432393 send in the dalek. "EXTERMAIT SHADY EXTERMANAIT HIM" !!!!!!!!! the doctor "MAKE SHURE THERE IS NOTHING LEFT OF HIM!!!!!!!!"
I may not have posted anything and may have just joined a few days ago, but it's kind of hard to ignore the grammar mistakes and the abruptness of this story. You have multiple plot holes, you mess up your story left and right, and you don't seem to even care about your story. Multiple people have given you plenty of advice to fix your stories but you don't do anything to fix them. And what made me message you was you saying that Tootsie Flute was Shady's cousin, then Tootsie claims Shady as his idiot brother, then 2 lines later your back to calling Tootsie his cousin. You can clearly see this mistake when your writing it because the mistakes are right next to each other. You just lacked the care to correct your mistake. This could be an amazing story, if you cared enough about it to put some more effort into it instead of 10 minutes for each chapter.