God only knows how many of them i’ve had to deal with.” I've Hi. I’m Mark Brown, and i’m the motherfucking Courier. I'm --Actually, just do Ctrl f "I've, I'm" and that sorta thing Ima stop telling ya, there's too many Edit: okay, there's actually not that many more, but tablet copy-paste is a bitch to use -end He then proceeded to get into the mares keeping his big smile the whole time. Face? What do you mean by ‘pre-war’? The goddess of the night asked the scared pony. What? What reason does dash have to be scared? Presumably she's seen some shit, and she just got back home.
Really hope that this works! Twilight thought to herself with a mixture of fear and glee, knowing full and well that her friend might not make it. Needs a designation for thoughts, italics would work, or some people use ' as a type of quotation mark ' Also... I question dash's mind reading powers. I was under the impression that this was 1st person.
most of our names-yes I saw Try saying this aloud. You'd have spaces on either side of the hyphen, or it sounds really hasty.
There were a few places that got a bit tell-y instead of showy, but pretty good, I can edit, but I have limited access to an actual computer... In other news, yay for really hard tablet controls!
Cmon men! We need to make this story featured
3715385 Thanks for the kind words!
sooooo aplejack knows the loner?
gogogo
Can't wait for the next chapter it looks good.
3715966 Yup gonna make a little side story about it some time, most likely as I'm writing this.
You may want a serious grammar check here.
3716895 I had a feeling, I'm trying to get an editor and a pre reader so hopefully this will be much better.
not bad glad to see you have tuned down the swearing,
God only knows how many of them i’ve had to deal with.”
I've
Hi. I’m Mark Brown, and i’m the motherfucking Courier.
I'm
--Actually, just do Ctrl f "I've, I'm" and that sorta thing Ima stop telling ya, there's too many
Edit: okay, there's actually not that many more, but tablet copy-paste is a bitch to use -end
He then proceeded to get into the mares keeping his big smile the whole time.
Face?
What do you mean by ‘pre-war’? The goddess of the night asked the scared pony.
What? What reason does dash have to be scared? Presumably she's seen some shit, and she just got back home.
Really hope that this works! Twilight thought to herself with a mixture of fear and glee, knowing full and well that her friend might not make it.
Needs a designation for thoughts, italics would work, or some people use ' as a type of quotation mark '
Also... I question dash's mind reading powers. I was under the impression that this was 1st person.
most of our names-yes I saw
Try saying this aloud. You'd have spaces on either side of the hyphen, or it sounds really hasty.
There were a few places that got a bit tell-y instead of showy, but pretty good, I can edit, but I have limited access to an actual computer...
In other news, yay for really hard tablet controls!
Bwahahahahahahahs needs updates! Yes precious, precious updates...:pinkiecrazy *laughs crazily*
3959204 an update should be coming some time soon!
THATS NOT OMINOUS AT ALL
I can't believe Boone thinks RD's awesome.