It feels like the internal monologue is a bit -too- broken up, it kinda hurts the flow in a few places- Something about the formatting, I think. As far as the actual story so far goes, I'm intrigued and liking it-- Applejack with a fear of intimacy is a great thing, and this is a great rendition.
Actually for me usually being a bit of a critic this is suprising, I honestly cannot find something I don't like about the story or flow of the writing. Bravo sir
Oh my, Cherry, you naughty thing... So this is in the same continmuity as Romance Reports, huh? When does that story happen in relation to all of this?
First! So beyond epic words have no meanings to describe this. Thank you SleeplessBrony. Thanks for this.
It feels like the internal monologue is a bit -too- broken up, it kinda hurts the flow in a few places- Something about the formatting, I think.
As far as the actual story so far goes, I'm intrigued and liking it-- Applejack with a fear of intimacy is a great thing, and this is a great rendition.
Great
Actually for me usually being a bit of a critic this is suprising, I honestly cannot find something I don't like about the story or flow of the writing. Bravo sir![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
312756 ... Looks like the author isn't the only one who's sleepless.![:trollestia:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/trollestia.png)
Amazing first chapter. This is why I'm following you.
back again with another amazing tale![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
Oooooooh lala!![:duck:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/duck.png)
Oh my, Cherry, you naughty thing...
So this is in the same continmuity as Romance Reports, huh? When does that story happen in relation to all of this?