Innocence (part one)
-Ten years ago.
From the archives of the old world:
Start of the cassette. "Hello? It's anybody listening?" Beat. "Okay, I don't know if someone or, God helps me, some pony will ever hear this but I want to at least leave a record from before... before we..." Sobbing. "Where I was? Oh yeah, the end of the world. Or at least what I think is the end."
"It all started with those ponies." Whoever is talking is breathing heavily. "Okay, that may be unfair. I don't know! We don't know!" Something crash, it sounds like glass and metal. "Okay, I should start with the beginning."
"About two years ago, a new continent appeared out of nowhere." Pause "But I think that you should know what follows." A bottle can be heard being opened." *gulp* "Then it happened to be populated for all kind of weird things but specially ponies. Yes, you heard that right. Little, pastel colored horses. They even talk! But that's another think you should know by now."
"They asked for asylum. Apparently their world was destroyed or consumed or something between those lines, they don't like to talk about it. But the point is that barrier." Another glass breaking, this time followed by the sound of liquid. "Okay, to the point. Their continent was surrounded by some kind of barrier; it didn't affected matter or energy so no scan detected it. We scratched all the scientific explanations. Our head were about to explode when we discovered two important thing about it." A lighter clicks, a soft exhalation.
"The first one was that every human, and specifically human, that somehow ended inside it dies in forty seconds. The bodies that we managed to retrieve showed a massive intoxication on every single organ." Pause. "The poor ones, they looked like being under radiations for months, even that psycho of Edward was perturbed after seeing how they looked." Another pause, another exhalation. "There wasn't any logical explanation of how it worked or an effective way to prevent it. Again, no explanations."
"Then we discovered that we were going to die." Beat. "The thing was expanding."
"The ponies showed real concern on that, unless they are a whole race of skilled actors and liars. They tried everything they could, even something called 'The Elements of Harmony' but the barrier didn't stop nor ceased to kill us." Another bottle is opened, the sound of swallowing. "That's it! We're not going to wait till these bloody ponies get their act together! The guys from the D.C. finally made out their minds and are sending the nuke." *sobs* "If those thing doesn't work." *heavy breath* "Oh God, this is our last hope. We have come to the point that a nuclear inferno and decades, if not centuries, of radiation is our last hope to avoid death." An alarm stars sounding. "This is it. The planes are in range. Gotta go to record the events." Noise of someone putting on a lab coat. "This is Doctor Henry Jekyll, if this work then I will destroy this stupid record but if you're hearing this it means that the human race is doomed." End of the cassette.
***
-The Rock of Eternity.
There's a place, beyond the imagination, where magic is watched and protected. In a void composed of only a blue background, like and endless blue sky, there's a floating rock. It can be however its owner needs it to be, from the size of a single room to a full house and even bigger if the Guardian of Magic needs it to be.
A lonely white figure flew from the horizon, not really fast but constantly coming closer at each second. When it was close enough it descended to the entrance of the rock. She didn't knew how she ended there or how she knew where to fly, the only thing she knew that forces beyond her actual understanding were about to let their judgement over her. One of them apparently favoring her, maybe the only one, instructed her to come here in order to help her.
Princess Celestia stood still in front of the entrance. It looked like the passage to the cavern of an old dragon or to a long forgotten tomb of an ancient pharaoh. 'Why I'm here? What am I doing here?'
After thinking about her situation and steeling herself she took the first steps into the rock. After walking for what could have been years or mere seconds, but since the alicorn was completely alone on her walk, the time that took her to get inside will remain unknown, she came to a simple door made out of wood.
Beyond the door she found herself in a stone hall, no smaller than her old throne room which reminded her the home she was forced to abandon. She advanced further, examining the room as she did. The first thing to catch her eyes where seven grotesque statues, each one representing a different action. Over the statues, carved into the stone, was the tittle 'The Seven Deadly Enemies of Life' and under each one a different name.
"Pride, envy, greed, anger, sloth, lust and gluttony." She read to herself. Coming closer to Envy, she intermediately felt an immense amount of magic. It was strange and savage but at the same time it felt almost familiar, like she had been in the presence of similar magic before but she couldn't put her hoof on it, till the memory of a world ruled by chaos and disharmony assaulted her. 'Discord!' The princess backed away from the statue, invaded by fear as she started to see that those were no ordinary stones. The thought of seven beings with the power of the draconequs running free overwhelmed her mind.
"I see that you've found the sins, I was frightened too when I first saw them." Someone said from the other side of the room, Celestia looked in the direction of the voice to find Shazam seated in the stone throne at the end of the place. He rose from his seat to walk next to her. "Is there a problem?"
"Oh no, sorry. Is just that I'm still confused for all of this."
"Don't worry. As I said, I was just as clueless my first time here. You get used to it after a while." He rubbed the back of his head. "So, shall we go to the study? I can explain some things to you as we figure out what to do." He invited her with a gesture to follow him and they walked to a door next to the throne.
***
-Meanwhile, on earth.
Everypony was panicking. After twenty four hours out of New Canterlot, the Princess should have been here with the mid-day sun as she has been doing for the last five years. Luna left her own guarding duties following the night to help with the scared ponies at the capital. Inside the palace were gathered the Elements with some of the most prominent and influential members of their society trying to make some sense out of this.
"Where is she?" Said the most. "We did something wrong!" Said the pessimist. "It's the Disaster again." Said a lonely guard that has seen too much action for a single life.
"CALM DOWN EVERYPONY!" Luna called with a seismic voice that shook the ground itself. The sheer impact of hearing the Princess of the Night shouting was more than enough to bring a silence worthy of a cemetery. "Now, if my sister wishes to be alone for a while that doesn't mean that you will cower in fear just because she's not here." Ever since the unification, Luna has become accustomed with Celestia being more distant. "We just follow with our daily basis as we always do." Then she looked at the guards. "And you will look for her. Send the message to the other cities and warn them to look for my sister just in case."
"That won't be necessary, ruler of night. For your sister is not here at the moment." Everypony gasped when they turned around and saw it. The Phantom just walked to Princess Luna, never minding the stunned ponies around him. "Fear not, Luna of the stars, your sister is in no perish but her presence was required somewhere else." Luna just stood there, thinking how it was possible for a human to be around.
"And you are?" At first she wanted to say 'what are you' but that sounded too rude in her mind.
"Not an enemy but neither an ally, for me I will always be a Stranger."
Twilight came closer to the Phantom, still trying to figure out how a human could be alive. Inside her mind it couldn't be possible, humans were dead or converted to pony but yet, there he was, right in front of her. 'What is he?'
"Even if I spent the next five years explaining to you who am I, bearer of magic, you wouldn't understand." He said in that same monotone voice but never turning around to face Twilight. Still looking at Luna, he continued. "If you still do not believe in my word I understand that the bearer of the concept of honesty is at your service. She can confirm for you that I only speak the truth." Applejack, who was there with the rest of the Elements, stepped forward saying.
"I'm the Element of Honesty mister." The Stranger turned around and knelt down to be at the same eye level with the farmer pony. He took off his fedora, revealing a grey hair and looking at her with pure white eyes he said.
"Your Princess is now facing the consequences of what happened here. The higher powers are judging her actions and yours too. Each one of them will send a messenger to testify the impact as I will guard to impede any injustice to happen." Inside her head, the words from the Phantom felt like hearing the very emptiness of an old abandoned barn as his eyes were like staring at the bottom of a specially dark and deep abyss. And the abyss was looking back at her. She could tell that he was telling the truth, that was the only thing sure for the earth pony.
"H-He-- He's telling the truth."
***
-The Rock of Eternity.
Shazam and Celestia entered to a room decorated like a restaurant. Various tables arranged in a Victorian fashion under the light of a crystal tear lamp. He moved a chair for the Princess that was suspiciously modified for a pony like her as he sat at the other side of the small table. He offered her something to drink , after thinking about it she asked for some simple earl grey tea. Muttering something, he made appear with a thunder a coup of the infusion and a milkshake for him.
"So, any other questions you want to ask? I know for experience that by this point there's still a lot of confusion."
She took a moment to reconsider her thoughts, the internal storm of her mind threatening to tear her sanity apart. But she have been before against the adversity of being defenseless, she learned how to keep her mind straight and to not lose herself in despair. She learned that lesson back when Discord menaced her sister and her ponies.
"What happens now?"
"Straight to the point, huh?" Shazam sighed. "Well, I'll be honest with you. You're in trouble. A big one." There will be a time for subtlety but at that moment he knew he had to be honest. "As Odin said, a whole species disappeared and you were in charge at the moment."
"But I did everything I could."
"As beings like us should. But basic morality is not the problem here. The problem is to convince the others that you actually did everything you could." Then looking directly at her eyes. "But first I really need to know something." His tone went from friendly and paternal to harsh and direct. "Do you really feel sorry for what happened?"
"For not being able to handle the Disaster or for the Barrier?" That was it. She couldn't hold it anymore. "Or for being unable to convince half of a species to look over their prejudices and fears in order to live?" He was about to reply but she continued. "I AM SORRY." She said, her voice making the room to shake. "I'm just a terrible protector. I've tried my best but since the Disaster and then I've been just failing and failing." Tears started to pour from her eyes. "I've always guarded life in my home. I always protected the innocents even if that meant to make sacrifices, to lose my only family." Shutting her eyes tight. "I even gave up my own freedom for them, for everyone, only to be sure that they would be safe, and why? Just to fail when it counted the most."
Shazam rose up and hugged her, stroking her mane trying to console the broken mare. "Shh, it's all right." He remembered the first time he failed too. "We all commit mistakes, it's not your fault."
"Yes it is. Half of them died only because they mistrusted me. ME! It's my entire fault." The once sure and strong mare that she used to be was being consumed by despair and guilt since the very first victim of the barrier. Now all that pressure was making her collapse.
In his mind there was playing a very similar scene. Only that he was on Celestia's role and the last son of a dead world was consoling him. He hugged her as whispering. "Believe me, I know how you feel."
"D-do you?" Between sobs. "Do you know?"
"Yes, I do." He remembered his own battles, his own monsters. He knew.
Celestia freed herself from the consoling hug. Trying to regain her posture but with tears still falling from her eyes. 'I need to know.' She thought before asking. "I know that you are on my side, I believe you when you say it. But..." The question was there, in her mouth, ready to come out. "But what if you're the only one? What will happen if I'm guilty?"
"You're not guilty for this." He avoided the question, knowing far too well how bad the real answer was. But even if Celestia was still new for all of this she knew when someone was hiding something from her. She asked again.
"What will happen if the majority points me as guilty?"
"It's not the majority. The votes are tied so we can work with this."
Celestia looked at him fiercely. The temperature of the room started to rise as she pressed her right fore leg against the floor. She asked one last time, slow and clear. "What waits for me if I'm declared guilty?" The tears on her face boiled to vapor as the sun's heat surrounded her.
Shazam sighed. He didn't want to tell her this. She was too innocent yet, she didn't deserve it. Hesitating he started to speak. "Do you know about a book called the Bible?"
"Yes." She answered between gritted teeth.
"Do you remember the story of Moses and the Pharaoh?" This time Celestia didn't answer but nodded slowly to him. He took the cue. "The ten plagues."
Suddenly, as quick as it appeared, all the heat around the solar alicorn abandoned her. Her pupils shrank as her breath and heart stopped for a moment. Fear took the anger's place. Shazam noted this and continued.
"When He declared the ten plagues to siege Egypt, it was the Spectre who released them." He took a time for her to process it. "If you're found guilty, the Spectre will be on charge of your punishment. He won't stop with you, he will go for those around you who could do something too."
"No." 'Luna, Twilight, my ponies. My family. "NO!" Breathing heavily. Shazam just looked with compassion at her as he remembered his first time hearing about the Spectre. He was surprised when Celestia spoke again.
"I will not let him do that." She said, will overpowering her inner fears. "I don't care how powerful he claims to be, but if he threatens to be even near my family I will fight him, even if that kills me. I may have failed in the past but that doesn't mean I still try. I will fight the heavens and hell if necessary but he will not touch them. And if he truly is the divine wrath of the creator then I will offer myself in their place. Their punishments will be mine, even if I have to suffer them seven fold or seventy fold. If I have to die and resurrect for all eternity only to receive the punishment meant for them, so be it. But he won’t. Touch. My. Family." She didn't notice, but around her the air was hot and dry, the furniture near to her ignited and became ash as fast as a blink and the stone floor directly touching her hooves was now liquid.
Shazam looked back at her in amazement. 'I should have known.' He couldn't do anything but amaze before the alicorn's resolution. 'And there I thought she was broke. I'm glad that even Solomon's wisdom can be wrong sometimes.' He smiled warmly as putting his hand over her shoulder. Guardian of Magic was his tittle. It wasn't meant as some kind of authority investment but a responsibility as well. His calming touch and soft expression were enough to snap her out of her own anger. Panting, Celestia spoke once again.
"What do I need to do?" Shazam stared at her, not sure of what she meant. Not hearing an answer she asked again. "I can see that you can't simply point me as innocent." Her tone was the same she used back in her home. "If you could, you would have done that already." The time for regrets and sorrows was over and now it was time to face destiny and look at its face in complete dignity. "I assume there's something I need to do in order to prove myself." Her fear was no more a fire threatening to consume her, now it was the fire that powered her will to live. Again, not for herself but for her ponies.
"I asked you a question. I've followed your instructions coming here, I told you things that nobody else should know and I'm even ready to accept your judgement, even if it's against me. The only thing that I ask is your honesty. No more detours and no more doubts. Just tell me what I have to do."
Shazam stood confused for a while before even changing his expression. When he did, his face changed from amazement at the courage of the pony to the same determination that she showed. "Very well then." He turned around and started to walk, gesturing her to follow. "At first I just said right there and then that you were innocent. You tried your best and even managed to save countless lives. Blaming you for not being able to save the entire world when you were the only one doing something about it is just wrong."
"But as you can suppose, the Spectre, Odin and some of the others said that my word wasn't enough to prove that, which lead us to the Stranger going for you and starting all of this." The entered again to the throne room.
"Six trials, six tasks that I will put you into. If you manage to pass them then you have proven you worthy abode any judgement that I can put on you and therefore innocent will be the only verdict I will be enabled to proclaim."
"Are you ready, Princess Celestia?" He asked her projecting all his authority with each word. She didn't showed any doubt or fear anymore. She had proven herself before, to the Elements and once again to her subjects. Ready or not she knew that it didn't matter, her destiny called for her once again.
"I am ready."
He smiled at her. "Before we star I want to tell you something. I believe in you, and so did the Wizard." He raised a hand closed into a fist. "Good luck Princess Celestia, I'll be waiting here for you to come victorious." And he shouted once more. "SHAZAM!"
She never heard the thunder nor saw the lightning before disappearing.
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history is written by the victors
but is guilty of genocide directly or indirectly
had the power to at least stop the wall
but here the question is
if I try or not?????
I only made ​​a half-hearted effort????????
I do not take intoaccount the decisions of humans?????
I pay really help????????
one is free to choose her chose what was right but that many lives were taken
this truly repentant?????????
many repent but then they forget and make the same mistakes
if this were to happen I think she would do it again
many of their ponies they saw humanity as a monster
as she looked really????????
for me is guilty not think they should kill her but deserves punishment
history has taught us that even thousands of years to pass the guilty are punished either physically or punish his own consciousness to its end
humanity is extinct was nothing left that chose CONVERTION remember their past lives or not?????
you do not remember would deny themselves lost in a nutshell what is unique to that equal to a death of consciousness and has ceased to exist
maybe she deserves punishment if not death but a punishment for all who chose to remain innocent as human
and did not attack the ponies they just wanted to live and refuse it in my opinion if it was a crime
so I say she deserves some kind of punishment
but as things Ships free of charges
sad but true justice sometimes does not reach the guilty
and I think this will be one of those cases
at least try to coexist in harmony with humans????
greetings and good luck ok
Okay, seriously.
I'm only gonna say this once. Stop trying to control your readers. Just on the basis of 'I'm going to have her declared innocent every time someone calls for her to be punished or found guilty etc.' alone, you've proven that your behavior isn't going to help matters any. After all, many people who dislike the Conversion Bureau are of course going to call for her to be found guilty and for her to be made to suffer in various ways. Threatening your readers with an outcome they will hate will just turn them against you and make them want to do it more because they're likely to think you're already going to have her declared innocent. In short, you're setting yourself up to be given the responses you're trying to get them to give you so that you can justify having her get off scott-free. Which in turn will just piss people off.
So in short, stop trying to control what your readers say. All it will do is lead to reader backlash against you. They have the right to express their opinions. You don't like it? Block comments altogether from being posted on your fic. Otherwise don't bitch when people do respond to it.
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Uh uh, an internet fight. Don't let me out.
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Finally someone thinking about it. Mister, I appreciate your opinions and the will to share them with us. Don't worry, punishment or not punishemtne is not the only theme here.
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Stop? When did I started? Dude, calm down, that was just a joke. I'm not that lacking of ideas that I need the comments to drive this story. Take it easy pal.
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No we just need someone in the background shout MORTAL KOMBAT!
she handled the situation poorly. And is guilty of manslaughter at the very least.
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You, and by extension a sh*tload of people, have a point. In fact, even Celestia says she made a lot of mistakes in the worst possible moment. This notions is not lost to me and it will not be absent in the story.
But I will leave you this piece of thinking, right from Chile (my homeland):
If during an earthquake, the emergency teams are unable to save everyone and everything. Do you blame the rescuers for the earth moving?
4683995 Yes yes I can see where your going. She move her people to save them and the price to pay was the extinction of an entire species.
ok just need to know IN this Conversion bureau was there a War are the converted mental state modified in anyway is she at the very least trying to preserve and protect the history and culture of the species her and everyone else involved cause to go extinct.
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Okay, lets see (reply free of spoilers):
War: in the first chapter there's a hint of the HLF existing in this universe. Take your guess.
Mental modification: Again, hint on the first chapter. also look who did the recording at the beginning of this chapter.
Trying to preserve and protect history: Further chapters.
And final question. What caused the barrier to happen?
4684176 If mental modification was done on her order then she is guilty of mass RAPE on a scale impossible to understand regardless of human violent past no being even for the greater good God or not has the right to do that.
For the barrier I have no idea of what may have cause it to happen but if any sentient being caused it to happen willingly and knowing of its consequences then it will be guilty for most of the committed crime against humanity but it will not leave her not guilty of all her charges.
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I suppose we agree in some points and disagree in others. If I wasn't this hermetic with my stories I would give you a bigger explanation but if you want the spoilers lets continue this via PM.
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Kaiser Nova!
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4684336 It was a fun conversation. I wish you and your story great success.
4684336 TITANS!!
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Many thanks:
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P.S.: I really like your avatar, it's cool.
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It's so on that it's off (i don't care if that doesn't make any sense)
Shine, in the name of Zeus! And smash everything into atoms!
BIG! BANG! PUUUUUUUNNNCH!!
This is tough one, glad Im not a supreme being of magic/technology. I always liked Shazam/Captain Marvel so it will be interesting to see what trials he sets, I assumes theg will be based on the deadly sins of the universe?
This is tough one, glad Im not a supreme being of magic/technology. I always liked Shazam/Captain Marvel so it will be interesting to see what trials he sets, I assumes theg will be based on the deadly sins of the universe?
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As my granny says, don't count your chickens before the get out of the egg.
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After rereading the first chapter, I've come to the conclusion that the Potion did what it did in most TCB stories. Remaking the human into a pony, both physically and mentally. I call injustice on that part. If she really wanted to at least save those that wanted to be saved, altering their mind is a stab in the back. Taking away what makes them human is just as bad as outright killing them in my opinion, as their not the same person mentally after the effects of the potion are done. I wouldn't think that making a potion that only changed the body would be that hard to do, so there must be something else going, something that made Celestia alter their minds with the potion. I can only speculate, as most TCB stories are all about the glorious ponification of the Human race, so it begs the question of why the mind rape with this one.
Anyway, can't wait for the next chapter, and while I see her as guilty as charged, its up to you as you're the writer. Peace out.
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Oh you will see, there's definitely more than meets the eye here.
(And you're seriously telling me that nobody has noticed the name of certain doctor in the last chapter?)
4686172 Doctor Henry Jekyll. Nice reference there, but I didn't really notice because it is irrelevant to the chapter. At least to me anyway.
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[insert evil, maniac, void of any good, Vincent Prince kind of evil laughter here]
Mistake here:
I see a lot of people wanted to see this as a conversion bureau where the converted really did have their minds messed up. I really hope that you did not go down this route as well, because it wouldn't make much sense for a neutral conversion bureau world if the newfoals got their minds messed with. I believe that the newfoals in this world are pretty much the same as they have always been, and the only reason they would even ask and plead with their family and friends to get converted as well is because they were desperate to keep them alive, not because "for the glory of ponydom," but because they don't want to see them die and it would be interesting to show two, or actually three sides of this tragic tale where one accepts their friends and families decisions and is sadden to see them go, another getting desperate with their pleading that the ones they were trying to save shunned them, and a third one that shows some newfoals did exactly what everyone else accuses them of doing but with various results: like the ones who were forced to change did live their life as a pony but rejected their "savior" and spends the rest of their life resenting them, kills themselves either immediately or after Earth was destroyed, or really did have better lives after being changed, but that last result would be extremely rare, like only 2 or 3 got better from this. And what's more, the ones that really did do the forceful changes actually stole the injections from the official conversion bureaus. I feel like that last part about the newfoals' desperate "salvations" could be some sort of trickery test from one of the gods to gauge Celestia's reactions to these situations and she'll automatically get the guilty vote if she shows the slightest positive reaction to these situation, unless she can somehow save herself in time by them her real feelings about this rather than her reactions. Again the newfoals that advocate these acts were already seen as pretty desperate by everyone, including other newfoals when the culprit sadly believed that they would support them.
Anyway, I feel like Celestia is still a bit underprepared for this, like there could have been a couple rules or have them go over her situation one more time before starting. Like the trials again, because if I wasn't paying attention, I would've been under the impression that these were Shazam's rather than everyone else's... right? Anyway, I feel like reminder would probably be helpful for Celestia in a bit which is basically "remember everyone judges in their own way" which should sufficient info to remind Celestia of these tests.
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Okay, I'll answer by parts.
1.- Fixed
2.- Although I would have liked to keep the hermetism, I think that a vague and implicit explanation is in order:
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3.- Yes, these are Shazam's trials. Each judge will have a chapter to judge Celesti on hi/her own terms.
You have earned this
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This ins one of those high points in my journey to become an actual writer. The point when I earn a Captain Marvel video with an AC/DC song!
I want to thank the academy and-- Woops, wrong speech. But seriously, thanks man.
4747476 You also get this as a bonus
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So, that means that I have Lunar Metal's approval for my view of Billy 'SHAZAM!' Batson?
4756316 Yes, yes it does.
Liking this. Don't see many CB fics with canon Celestia.
One question though that I'm unsure on, having never read the original CB story. Does conversion alter the human's mind as well here, or only the body? That's kind of the difference between accidentally wiping out half a race and purposely wiping out an entire race, heh.
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Look, as this story advance I'll be leaving more and more clues on what exactly happened. How the potion works is one of the main pieces. The bigger clues so far are in the flashbacks from The Stranger and Innocence. and in this image:
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And thanks for reading.
4769801 Hi Wave Blaster, i reckon tgis fic is good
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How long has been that comment there?
Anyway, sorry for not answering before. Thanks, glad you liked it.
In my Yoda voice: "Typos, I see, Repair them, you must, ask you, I do."
Would you like an proof reader/editor? I'd be happy to help ^_^
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Tell you by PM.
oh celestia that just pathetic, are you saying that ethnic cleansing is the way to save humans of the barrier, that i don't know...your island created? gee should figured a way to turn that off you dick.
oh and you being an innocent?
innocents don't brainwash and make genocide.
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Wow, seeing this comment makes me realize how long has been since the last update and how much of backstory is still missing.
Thanks for reading, btw.
Commenting "kill her" (1) will get her another vote, eh?
(5)
KILL HER! (2)
KILL HER! (3)
KILL HER (4)
aaaaaaand.....
FRICKIN' RIP AND TEAR, TORTURE HER, SHRED HER TO BITS, BLUE BLOODY MASSACRE!!!!!
Does that count?
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Not really, it was just a joke.