3288307 Thank you, it's good to know I handled the third chapter better than I'd hoped. I felt it might've been a bit rushed, personally, and that's more or less past experience talking, but to see that it at least reads appealingly is amazing to see.

Now that I'm far less worried over how the third went, chapter five will come much more easily. I would love if you could mayhaps find the time and interest to review a bit further, but I understand if you've other commitments. I can hardly thank you enough for helping me with the little errors I've made, as well as for setting my mind at ease with the rest. Now that I've got three full chapters to gauge the flow with, the rest will be much easier and should come much faster.

Also, in case you intend to read on simply for pleasure, which is just as good as to review at this point, I do hope you enjoy the rest. I'm still nervous with Chapter four being the shortest yet, but I'm hoping that's no issue. With two stories of mine getting decent attention, and good feedback, I'm definitely much less nervous. Hope that helps me finish this one up. I need to finish a story.

Review, chapter four -

It's rather good that this chapter opens with the question on everyone's (or at least my) mind, and puts us readers in the uncomfortable position of being at least in some small way connected with the protagonist, asking the very same question. Sweetie Belle easily evades giving a real answer, but the attention is still appreciated.

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Wow, there's a lot to consider here. I had my suspicions before, but I'm pretty much considering that the only true path to hope left is to exterminate every single anthrobomination (I jest).
Either way, the hints you've been dropping have a lot more solid base now, and such suspicions were, if not exactly confirmed, than reinforced. At least three (I suspect all) of the mane six are thrill killers, and they are grooming their siblings-dearest to follow that course. Possibly some kind of Reason other than 'for the hell of it'. I mean, damn, but I even suspect the fact that they ARE anthrobominations is somehow relveant as well, though there isn't as much base for that...yet. The fact that they have 'friends' of such professional standing to dispose of suggests not just an individual or even group, but an institution.

...In short, Unraveling is being very nifty at answering one question by spawning two more, and dangling that bloody, dripping, tantalizing truth just out of jaws' reach.

Also, Chapter Four Sweetie Belle is exhibiting Chapter One Scootaloo symptoms. Suppose the path to hell is fourlane highway, eh? Though so far she might go another path, who knows? The fact that the narrative has, at times, slipped into her perpsective gives me some hope that she'll be a fledged and developed character, though the risk of meeting a grizzly (and gristly) end is not to be forgotten either.

Even more so, in lieu of recurring connections like this:

the order to kill somepony else, somepony that could have been innocent, as innocent as--

A chapter in which speculation could go rampant. I could expand my own pet theories further, but that's possibly poor reviewing form (though shows a captivated reader, again, a compliment...)

This 'verse is fucked up. I recommend purge by fire. Short of that, let's see where it goes. It is, as you feel, a shorter chapter, but one that still has quite a lot packed into it, dare I say more than the others. Where does the horror end?

3288430 Thank you, I'm glad you're enjoying it still. Again, it's still comforting to see I'm getting better at actually writing and not just typing and following the advice of my readers, since that's kinda what I started out doing. I'm hoping to have chapter five up within the week, in case you have the time and interest to continue with this.

The plot thickens... I'm seriously of the mindset that I've just about figure out what's going on, but I'll wait until the final chapter to be sure.

Overall, this story is, well, bucking fantastic. I think the WRITE reviewer has handled any criticism I might have, so I'll just leave my remarks at praise.

One more chapter to go. I'm getting kinda anxious... Poor Scoots. Poor Sweetie. They're being played like an Xbox 720.

I finally Read to the fourth chapter! Holly smokes, just completely psychotic! I don't know what to say, part of me want to shout and curse... the other part of me wants to Is there something wrong with me for enjoying every moment of this story? The best part is that it is Incomplete! so I have something to look forward to. Great job, I like it. Now I might just go cry myself to sleep if I can

3456515 Actually, it was complete, but I dropped Solace just yesterday and I intend to rewrite it and continue the story. I had a whole world idea going on, but I'm basically dropping that now. I feel like I bit off more than I could chew, and I'm probably going to wind up looking for somepony on site to help me out, maybe bounce ideas around with. I'm not sure how to rework the chapter.

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Ah, well if you need anything from me, I am willing to help. (though I do not have much to offer) Otherwise I shall wait patently. Again, great job

so it’s twilight and another element or something?