1,000 years after the sack of Canterlot, everypony is an Alicorn - everypony except the rebels. But when five young ponies are chased from their homes, they must solve the mystery of what happened all those years ago and save Equestria themselves
1,000 years after the sack of Canterlot, everypony is an Alicorn
What a sick and twisted idea - I like it!
I was thinking about some constructive comment about plot, but during the prologue I was mainly like "oh crap..." Generally it was a good idea to show the tortures only by sounds heard by Twilight - letting the reader's imagination work, and make a picture grimer than any graphic description...
Wildheart glared, “That’s just the propaganda Chrysalis and Sombra spew to justify their leadership.”
History is written by the winners... (there was a nice Lord of The Ring fanfic called "The last Ringbearer", revolving around this topic)
And that's not all that's sick and twisted about it. But that will come later xD
I tried writing out the torture scene at one point. It was a great writing exercise, but it really took away from the story, IMO. So I took it out, I like how it turned out much better. The less you know, the scarier it becomes
And that is generally true! What's a rebellion and what is a revolution is determined by who wins. Also, I'll check out that story when I get some time. If that ever happens...
Exactly. Not to mention that a reader who went through Cupcakes, Rainbow Factory, Pages of Harmony, <insert your favourite gorefic here> will probably be unfazed by any description, except of those their own mind would create for them...
so did you forget to stop the italics around halfway through?
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It's amazing how important one little '/' is xD
3226125 yep XD
Nice little look into the daily life...
And what happened to them...
Yikes...
~Skeeter The Lurker
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Someone in my story has a normal life?! I MUST SMITE THEM *Throws changeling drones at the situation*
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Hehe
~Skeeter The Lurker
What a sick and twisted idea - I like it!
I was thinking about some constructive comment about plot, but during the prologue I was mainly like "oh crap..." Generally it was a good idea to show the tortures only by sounds heard by Twilight - letting the reader's imagination work, and make a picture grimer than any graphic description...
History is written by the winners... (there was a nice Lord of The Ring fanfic called "The last Ringbearer", revolving around this topic)
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And that's not all that's sick and twisted about it. But that will come later xD
I tried writing out the torture scene at one point. It was a great writing exercise, but it really took away from the story, IMO. So I took it out, I like how it turned out much better. The less you know, the scarier it becomes
And that is generally true! What's a rebellion and what is a revolution is determined by who wins. Also, I'll check out that story when I get some time. If that ever happens...
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I'm awaiting eagerly...
Exactly. Not to mention that a reader who went through Cupcakes, Rainbow Factory, Pages of Harmony, <insert your favourite gorefic here> will probably be unfazed by any description, except of those their own mind would create for them...
Is this the sequel to My Name is Twilight Sparkle?
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No, this is a separate story. MNITS is currently undergoing a massive revision before I release the sequel.
Gotta hunt myself down some editors editors be massive skiddish, yo.
3788733 Well... I'll do it.
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I'd most certainly appreciate it!
Why don't you PM me with your e-mail and I'll send ya a link ^_^
3794547 Just so you know I can ONLY do spelling and grammar. (reposting just in case you miss my e-mail)