Inside, was a small little craved crystal,

It should probably be 'Carved'. Unless, ya know, Crystal is actually part dragon. Or Shadow. Either way, that would be an... Interesting plot twist. Also, putting 'small' and 'little' right next to one another is kind of redundant. This ends the message from your friendly local Grammar Nazi.

Anyway, nice chapter.

whoa, cocoon is wicked pissed

Bitches be trippin'

I don't get Chrysalis motivates in it. But probably you will tell that in time :P

Hello I'm your friendly neighborhood grammar nazi :3 now then the grammar -_-
1. Either has an I it's not ether unless your talking about a highly flammable liquid that smells good
2. STOP SAYING THE SAME THING OVER AND OVER AGAIN
3. It's carved not craved
4. Please stop capitalizing father and mother and daughter it's annoying

That's all I can remember that really stuck out for me. There was a lot wrong though. Do you have an editor? Not saying I'd be one but if you don't have one you might need one and if you do you might need a new one or just get more

3159107 Revenge :3

Again, all the problems of all your other chapters: you still make stupid mistakes constantly and refuse to get an editor. This is seriously a major turn-off.

‘Well…you couldn’t do anything to save your Mother when you were but a small little foal.” She then casted me a wide, evil grin. “And now, you can do nothing to save your own children from me.”
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Also, I don't mind the grammar much.