C'mon, Dashie, that last prank was pretty funny," Pinkie Pie giggled.
Rainbow Dash sighed, "Yeah, but we already moved Rarity's ponykins last week."
"But what about Twilight's disappearing ink?" Pinkie suggested as she collapsed in another fit of laughter.
"But we do that every time!" Dash complained, pulling at her face. "And I'm so bored!"
"Hmm," Pinkie said thoughtfully. "Well, how about we prank-"
Whatever Pinkie Pie had been about to say next was cut off as the door to Sugarcube Corner opened and in walked a small, exhausted dragon.
"Welcome to SugarCube Corner!" Pinkie exclaimed, as she bounced behind the counter. " Hiya Spike! How are you doing today?".
"Hey Pinkie," Spike said as he walked up to the counter."I'm doing good, how about you?"
"I'm doing great, Spike. Me and Dashie are just-" while she was saying this Rainbow motioned for her to not tell Spike about the pranks. Pinkie noticed this and arched an eyebrow before remembering that they were thinking of pranks. Pinkies mood seemed to grow ever-happier as she continued speaking."-having lunch. What brings you here on this fine day?"
"Twilight gave me my allowance early this week so I decided to get a snack". He actually found some bits on the ground that twilight was experimenting on and stole them. Twilight then spent the next hour looking for her money as it was part of the funds to fix the window that at this point was shattered by a tree branch. Fucking tree library.
"That's super duper Spike, so what do you want?" Pinkie said as she motioned towards the overhead menu above her. "You can have cupcakes, plain old regular cakes, muffins, or bagels ".
"Wait, bagels?" Spike asked. Pinkie nodded. "Never mind, anyways those all sound good Pinkie, but I came here to try your brownies" he said. Spike then had a deep internal debate as to why a bakery would sell bagels when there was a Starbucks next door.
"Okie dokie Spike, they will be done in about ten minutes" Pinkie said as she bound into the kitchen. "I wonder what Dashie was talking about?" Pinkie mumbled so quietly that only she and the bacteria living in her horse mouth could hear.
"Hey Spike, hows it going?" Rainbow finally said as Pinkie left. I wonder if he even knows I was here. She thought to herself.
"Oh, hey Rainbow, I didn't see you there. I'm doing great, Twilight gave me my-"
"Jerk..." Rainbow murmured. "Yeah, yeah I heard it already. Hey, can you do me a favor?" Rainbow said a little hastily.
"Sure, what do you want me to do" he said. Wait, is she nervous? he thought.
"Just watch our food while I go talk to Pinkie." Rainbow said as she flew into the kitchen.
Pinkie was bouncing around the bakery's kitchen collecting the ingredients for the brownies and singing about cupcakes for no particular reason when Rainbow burst through the door and crashed into a wall. Pinkie stop what she was doing and looked over to Rainbow giggling the whole time.Normal ponies would have checked to see if she was alright but Pinkie knew better. Just last week she had crashed into a brick wall and came out unscathed. Rainbow got off the ground and rushed over to Pinkie.
"Yo Pinks, I just got an awesome idea for a great prank!" Rainbow exclaimed. Finally something to get me out of this boring rut I'm in. She thought.
"Tell me, tell me, tell me Dashie!" Pinkie asked.
"Well, you know how spike just ordered some brownies?" Pinkie nodded "Yeah, so I have some special brownies at my house we can give him instead.".
"What special brownies Dashie"? Rainbow gave her a blank stare. "Oh, ooh those special brownies. Are you sure?" Rainbow nodded "Okie dokie lokie". "This is going to be good" Pinkie whispered. Some people believe her smile grew three sizes that day but that's just fucking stupid. It would have probably broken her jaw and given her a smile the Joker would have applauded.
"Thanks, Pinks. I'll be back." Rainbow said in a deep voice that Pinkie swore she heard in a movie before. Dash flew out SugarCube Corners back entrance as to not alert spike that she was leaving.
Rainbow zoomed over ponyville at astonishing speeds. She was hoping that if she went fast enough no one would see her. Luckily, she wasn't seen on her way to her home in the sky. She unlocked her door and flew her bedroom on the second floor of her home and trotted up to her dresser. She noticed the framed picture of her and her mood grew even greater as she stared at the picture. "Soon..." she whispered as she put the picture back on top of the dresser. She then opened the third drawer and grabbed the lunchbox from under the box labeled 'toys' and closed the drawer and left her home, locked the door on the way out. She then raced back over to SugarCube Corner and silently went through the back entrance. She then walked back into the kitchen where Pinkie was waiting.
Rainbow took a second to breath and opened the lunchbox while Pinkie bound up to her and stated. "Okay Pinks, I've got the brownies from my house". Rainbow stopped talking as Pinkie tried to grab one of the brownies and eat it. "No, bad Pinkie."
"Aww...please?" Pinkie pouted and gave her puppy dog eyes but it was to no avail.
"Fine." Pinkie said as a smile slowly began to spread on her face. "Let's go give Spike his brownies before he gets suspicious." Pinkie then trotted out of the kitchen and back behind the counter with Rainbow in tow."Here you are Spike, I made them extra super duper special just for you" Pinkie exclaimed as she bagged the brownies and handed them to Spike.
"Thanks Pinkie". Spike then proceeded to scarf down one of the brownies."Wow Pinkie, these taste great"Spike said as he finished the last of the brownies and walked over to the trash and threw his garbage away and walked back up to the counter."So what do I owe you Pinkie"?
"Consider it on the house for my favorite little dragon Spikey. Just please don't tell Mr. and Mrs. Cake about it." Pinkie replied with a hint of nervousness in her voice.Spike either didn't notice it or was too overjoyed to care.
"Wow, thanks a bunch Pinkie!" Spike said as he sat down on one of the chairs the shop had to offer. The brownies were starting to kick in but Spike just thought it was a dizziness. It was only till the hallucinations started that spike noticed something was wrong.He tried to say he wasn't feeling too great but all that came out was a bunch of incomprehensible stutters. It wouldn't have mattered anyway seeing as he was starting to feel good and relaxed. Not fifteen minutes later Spike was completely baked.
writing second chapter now should be up in no more than a week
2986651 One question which part and thank you
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Well, the fic on the whole is very short (only just passing the bare minimum), so I read the whole thing in a few minutes. Despite this, quite a lot actually happened in the fic (Pinkie remembering her previous pranks, Spike walking in, Twilight inexplicably giving him early allowance, ordering brownies, Dash's dash back to her house, etc, etc, etc.), yet you go into the bare minimum of detail. You could easily have expanded a few descriptions, in particular to include how certain things made the characters feel. You went into very little detail about the character's emotions and internal reactions.
That said, I laughed, and I'm interested to see what happens in chapter two. My only criticism on that point is that I feel like the bulk of the humor will be in the next chapter, which I can't read yet...
Otherwise, yeah, thanks for writing this one.
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thanks for you opinion i will try to work on that in future storys/next chapter. one thing i need to work on is feelings like you said and you were write about the bulk being in the next chapter which i am going to try and get to a combined total of 3000 words story wise
4 dislike ... is to be expected
Pot brownies. Clever.
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Hey, having two dislikes isn't too bad; just look at the ratio you have going! Don't let dislikes discourage you.
2987010 i know thank you i am not discouraged because of 1. the ratio has good betting bad 2.dislikes are to be expected on any fic because people can genuinely not like something and its their opinion and there are also people who dislike just to dislike also cool pic
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I for one, thoroughly enjoyed reading this.
2987180 thank you kind sir and i see what you did there
also new chapter in a week oh and i am going to update that as more or less dislikes appear
Just wanted to tell anyone in general that i am going to edit this tommorow to add some things people sugested
Keep going! This looks real funny! Can't wait to see what happens with Spike!
Keep this going, this is funny and good. Just re-read it because I saw a couple errors in the dialogue.
2990770>>2990672Can do it probuly will get the second chapter in about3 to 7 days now i have 2 questions for you guys
1.what did you guys think so far? i have been updateing the dialog and fixing grammer mistakes for the lasts two hours or so so i think it is a little better now that i re proofread it
2.Should i write the next chapter long or split it into two i already have a thousand words done and it not even havle way through the day also should i add an epilogue style thing that tells what happens to the other charicters and their opinions
Thx for reading and have a nice day
2990844I think you should split it so you can have more chapters up. When I see a story, I like to see that it has more chapters up. About the grammer, i believe that you need to use some punctuation, but I'm not sure exactly. *Watching Spiderman 3 on FX*
2990882 ill check in on that. still have to find proofreader
also thank you for the incite i will probably split it every thousand words
2990895Good idea. I can be a proof reader, if you want. I'll*
2990911 sure ill pm you about it.
2990914Alright, sweet.
Rainbow Dash is being kind of a bitch to Spike and Pinkie. Thinking Spike's a jerk just because he was exhausted and didn't notice her, setting Pinkie up as her fallpony... Not cool.
2993713 tis kinda the point great job for noticing but dont worry she gets whats coming to her later
2994810 Spike is on the good stuff.
2994895 Can't argue with that.
Lets see weed produces happy peaceful thoughts.
Ponies being peaceful.
Now you know there is no way ponies could be in a good mood
24 / 7. They are smoking the best stuff.
: Screw lemons !
2994942 2994895 you guys are right. the reason for this is that in my personal headcannon equestrias nature is near perfectly preserve so it is an better environment for growing with no pollution from cars and junk and there has to be a pot brownie special talent or at least a weed special talent
2996551 That would be a awesome talent.
2996694 im saying also new chaprter soonish
this is going to be good
2999929 indeed kind sir and also new chapter tomorrow (proably)
No. Just no.
well this will obviously end badly lets see
1 pot brownies
2 baby fire breathing dragon
equals S@#$ run for you lives!