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Using over cooked noodles as a noodle incident?
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It's a good story, I'm enjoying this new perspective. A few things i need to comment on: the constant time shifting is a tad disorienting, flashbacks aren't a bad idea but when every chapter is at a different point in time either forward or back it makes the story a bit hard to follow. My only other comment is that I think you need an editor. There's several grammatical errors throughout chapters as well as words that seem randomly thrown in sentences that don't need to be there. Easily fixable stuff, I can volunteer some time if you have noone else. All that aside it's a good story as I stated before. I'll defitiely track and wait for more.
A very cute story. I look forward to seeing how things turn out for these two.