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HM one where he is evil...I LIKE
Damnit, when you actually read and don't skim, it makes you really fucking sad...
I feel bad for Dylan. In all honesty, he seemed rather two dimensional to me before, until I came back and reread this chapter.
Yeah, he's about as three dimensional as an Octahedral molecule.
Which is the largest three dimensional molecular geometry.
It feels really wierd hearing discord say "fuck".
Well, technically READING discord saying "fuck".
Okay, one: The cursing. Cursing in these stories is kind of like sex in fimfiction. You can use it freely to advance the plot, provide emphasis on relationships and advance the story as a whole, but when it has no purpose, it lessens the immersion of the reader.
Two: I like your writing style. Very good use of descriptors and colorful diction for effect.
Three: Giving your characters a dark past is a path to tread lightly, but when done effectively separates the meh stories from the outstanding ones. You were effective here, I would wager.
This is a comment. (On the internet.)
Damn.
First Discord talking to himself i ways i had problems grasping
Now a guys puking his guts up in an unknown forest whilst something watches him
Moustache seal of approval
Nice job bro
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Ha you said that this would be bad mate... YOU LIAR its fine just needs some refining
So I've had this is my remind me later box for some time now and I think it's time... ONWARDS!!!