EA Gift To A Princess Holiday’s Heart

• Equestria Girls
• Drama
• Slice of Life

Princess Twilight goes to the Mirror World to see what Sunset, her counterpart and the others do during the holidays.

• Alt. Universe
• Twilight
• Other
• Sunset Shimmer
• Sci-Twi
• Main 7 (EqG)

Lonely Fanboy48 · 5.3k words  ·  19  6 · 1.8k views

Tags: [Drama], [Slice of Life]

Review: A Gift to a Princess Holiday’s Heart

Summary: A friendship gift to Princess Twilight Sparkle. Where the other version of Twilight Sparkle gets help with her friends to give a gift to Princess Twilight Sparkle from Equestria.

Critic:  In all my days of reading this fiction it’s a one shot.  However, it just doesn’t have the moments of their friendship and spent time on.  Everything is great but to what extent? A gift is great but, putting all the details that they went through would be more emotional for the time that they spent with Princess Twilight from Equestria with the rest of the friends from Equestria Girls.  Although Twilight and Princess Twilight did see each other near the ending of friendship games. END credits… you could have written something about that.  Which friendship can go anywhere between two worlds.   

Getting moments in this fiction would have been very good to this. However, the flow of this was at least a 7.  The idea is clearly a 7. Till then I believe the dialog could have been better if I give this at least a 5.  Grammar is at least a 8.

Therefore this fiction is at least a 6.5/10

You do realize I made three chapter stories taking place before this right? The reason why I didn’t want you to read them is because they we’re long and I assume you would catch on once you read this one. And considering you didn’t mention anything about Water Lily, here are two chapters you can read so you can understand what my direction was.

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/424529/9/princess-twilight-meets-new-friends/lily-and-waters-day-with-the-princess
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/435707/4/princess-twilights-yacht-vacation/outdoors-back-in-the-exposure

After I was done doing the chapter stories, I was resenting to one shots. And I did write moments between the two Twilights in Princess Twilight’s Yacht Vacation and Twilight’s Backstage Pass.

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Ok i did finnally got to go back and read the 2 links... and it was good. Thank you I like to change the rate for this... 8/10

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Thanks. Curious would you be willing to review Princess Twilight's Backstage Pass when you get the chance? https://www.fimfiction.net/story/444481/twilights-backstage-pass

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put it in my folder my door is always open... but i also have to finished the reading the ones first...