This story is a sequel to Twilight’s Backstage Pass
SPOILERS FOR ANYONE WHO DIDN’T WATCH HOLIDAYS UNWRAPPED!!!
After going on the beach making tons of friends, knowing more about her counterpart on the cruise and enjoying the Starswirl Festival, Princess Twilight is curious on what the Mirror World does during the holidays. Sunset Shimmer takes the Princess Of Friendship to the Canterlot Mall where most of the magic takes place, while Twilight meets a familiar face from her past in this world.
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If any of you say that I was impatient, this story was complete a month ago when proofreads. As for the special still being leak, it’s not really a special. It’s an anthology special with 6 shorts. Like I said in Twilight’s Backstage Pass (Even though that still has just begun), all future Equestria Girls Princess Twilight stories will be one shots.
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If you want I can give you more collidence of two worlds: Dash V Dash, The jack apple trip, Fashion party, two shy to talk....
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Thanks for the advice however that’s gonna be for a later time. Hearth’s Warming stories are on my mind right now.
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You welcome, and if you have a hard time, think of something a rom com would do
Why 5 likes and 7 dislikes all of the sudden!? It was good.
Why 5 likes and 7 dislikes all of the sudden!? It was good.
You might want to proofread it again- I definitely found a few grammar errors here and there, though I don’t remember any spelling mistakes.
You might also want to address a few word choices. I was slightly confused at the beginning of the story since most refer ‘Equestria’ as the pony world.
Also, I don’t think that ‘Twilight does not have enough coins to buy presents’ is valid for why she isn’t going to buy presents for her friends since she is the princess of friendship. Gold is also worth quite a lot in the human world (at least for us).
Overall, I could see this being a sequel of your previous story, especially with Water Lily. I’d say that the overall plot/idea is definitely there. Also, I love your choice of her gift!
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What’s your opinion on Water Lily’s Gift To Twilight?
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I think that the gift is perfect, coming from a young child to an older person.
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Yeah. It was something I had in mind days after I watched Holidays Unwrapped. And also putting this Friendshipping thing between Princess Twilight and Water Lily in full effect.
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